Starting to get to the good stuff.

Still a bit slow, even though there, is action.

Nice rising action chapter, and cliffhanger, can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

It isn't rated X for nothing! LOL I like to give a good buildup for the story. Just jumping intp the sexual bits is fun, but it won't be a story or characters you remember. I want you to be able to see what I see, feel what I feel. if you get even a little bit of that, I feel I have done my job. But thank you for your kind review!