[Report This]Date: September 05 2013 2:37 PM Title: Chapter 4
OMG! Sweat yoga and tofu cakes! I think he's gonna need a little prozac as well, maybe just to sustain him for a little while longer....he is 36. Is that old? Ah well, he couldn't be in better hands, I mean hey, what if he were to fall into the hands of his 'ex-wife', or maybe someone like 'Tinyone234', god knows he'd be praying for some of those kale salads and bean sprouts...... ;`)
Damn this is so well developed, I love your discription's and the 'realistic-ness' of this tale,...Just one suggestion, could you start titling the chapters, I know you could come up with some great ones...
It would make it easier to remember where you left off, and add just a bit of a hint as to what is to come...
I'd give this 20 stars if I could!
[Report This]Date: September 05 2013 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 4
Look at it this way, Dan. It might be better than the dehydrated military-surplus stuff you might be forced to eat in a top-secret government lab.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2013 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 4
I love this story. The details are superb. Also love the casual way in which Kat and Steph had a discussion about Dan,to him and for him but didn't really listen to him. Can't wait to see what happens next. Also love the somewhat playful nature of these two girls and the fact that Kat thought he was 40 instead of 36 was great cause that brought yet another bit of realism to this story. Well done.
aaron