[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 11:49 AM Title: Decisions
Another agonizing cliff-hanger? You fiend, you! ;-)
Author's Response:
Haha. My apologies good sir! But you are about to stumble upon another!
(Though I do hope I can upload the next chapter tonight!)
[Report This]Date: September 19 2013 8:05 AM Title: Dead Eyed Duo
Ah-ha! Dissension in the ranks. A classic example of making the enemy of your enemy your friend.
Author's Response:
Muahaha. I'll say!
Date: September 18 2013 10:54 PM Title: Prologue.
Poor Alexandra : :P
Author's Response:
*Snicker snicker*
[Report This]Date: September 18 2013 10:41 PM Title: Dead Eyed Duo
Ah the anti-heroes arrive.
Now it's a party.
Author's Response:
Muahaha, oh yes.
Date: September 18 2013 9:26 PM Title: Dead Eyed Duo
Dang that was a intense cliffhanger.
I really do like this story so far, even though I did get confused on some of the chapters, it's all turning out great.
Author's Response:
Glad to hear that you're enjoying it so far. =)
As for any confusion, I don't know exactly what may have left you confused, but I will say that I do often write in a way that is intentionally confusing. Just because I like to leave people guessing what is going to happen next, or sometimes even what is happening. I don't like to give everything all at once of course.
Thanks for reading, and thanks for the review as always! ^^
[Report This]Date: September 18 2013 7:55 PM Title: Prologue.
I think Seung has already become my favorite character.
Great story!
Author's Response:
Likewise, I've been wanting to bring her into the action for a few days as a result. Definitely top 5 out of all of the characters I have in this universe so far.
Thanks for the great review, and thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: September 18 2013 11:29 AM Title: A New Day
This chapter was great I can't wait to see what happens next. I love your descriptions of things as well as the pace, flow if this story. Great job.
aaron
PS. Will there be more barefoot scenes, with painted toes?
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for your great review, Aaron. Glad to see that you're enjoying it thus far. =)
Absolutely! I wouldn't be able to say for sure when they might come about, but there is definitely more on the way. After all, what's a good GTS story without barefoot scenes?
[Report This]Date: September 18 2013 9:57 AM Title: A New Day
This has to be the most laxed security force for a major cover-up I've ever seen.
Author's Response:
Lmao. It isn't a 'major cover-up' though. >.>'
I want to say what the true nature of the group is, but, that would kind of blow the whole thing. All shall be revealed as the story continues and it will begin to make more sense.
[Report This]Date: September 18 2013 8:34 AM Title: A New Day
Don't think of it as "slow." Think of it as "delightfully prolonging the suspense."
I know I do. :-)
Author's Response:
Haha. =) Certainly a good way to put it.
Thanks for your great reviews as always, Carycomic!
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 8:45 PM Title: Filling In.
An interesting start. As of how far I read we have a shady company and A kind girl looking after our main character., and the promise of some interesting action further down the road.
I'll make sure to look out for this story, and hopefully continue reading the rest of it.
If I hade to offer one critisism it would be that when you switch speakers you need to start a new paragraph in order to indicate the shift in who is speaking.
Author's Response:
Many thanks! I look forwards to your reading it as it continues through it's paces, and hope you enjoy it and see it through to the end!
I know I mentioned a reply to the criticism you had at the Writer's meeting, but I'd like to also reply here just for the sake of any new readers that might see this review: I think that begins around chapter 3 (An Unexpected Visitor I) as UHF suggested that as well before. =)
Many thanks again for the review! I appreciate them, as always, and look forwards to any more you might have in the future.
- Xan. (Aetron.)
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 4:08 PM Title: Shock & Awe
Just goes to show doing the right thing doesn't always pay off.
Author's Response:
Very true, very true indeed!
Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 7:27 AM Title: Shock & Awe
Oh, I think I estimated Britney correctly! As for Chanel? She might be subtler and more playful about it than Britney. But, I think she's just as cruel.
Author's Response:
She very well may be. ;) I suppose you'll just have to find out!
As always, thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: September 11 2013 1:16 PM Title: Revelations
Shit seems to have hit the fan.
aaron
Author's Response:
I'll say. o_o''
[Report This]Date: September 11 2013 1:01 PM Title: Revelations
Ah the failed escape attempt.
Great stuff.
[Report This]Date: September 11 2013 10:11 AM Title: Revelations
Uh-oh! This rich bitch sounds like the kind of young harpy who's too impatient to inherit the nest from the older ones. And, that can have one of two consequences: them underestimating her, or she over-estimating herself. Either way; someone from the upper echelons is going to get shrunken, as well.
Author's Response:
Ohhh yeah. She is definitely trouble. She is actually a character I made during an RP with SizeScribe, somewhat of a precursor to this story. By the gods she is just... She is evil. Pure evil. Very very much the entitled type.
It's hard to say who would underestimate, or overestimate who, though!
[Report This]Date: September 11 2013 10:04 AM Title: An Unexpected Visitor II
Hmmmmmmm! I suspect there's some kind of hypno-chemical in whatever foot lotion she uses. It was _way_ too easy to get him to acquiesce.
Author's Response:
'acquiesce' Damn that is a good word.
Also! I suppose we shall just have to see. =)
However, I will say that the male brain can be quite easily swayed under the direction of a teasing girl. At least, in my experience. But I wouldn't want to give anything away, either.
Hope you're enjoying it! :D
[Report This]Date: September 10 2013 12:37 PM Title: An Unexpected Visitor I
"...the hallway where freedom lay."
Heh! With freedom like that, who needs slavery?
Author's Response:
lol!
I'll say, I suppose I really should have written "Temporary freedom" but it didn't sound right at the time.
Date: August 31 2013 11:44 PM Title: Filling In.
Still intrigued.
[Report This]Date: August 31 2013 10:52 PM Title: Filling In.
Very good chapter, perhaps not as engaging as the last one but I'd be lying if I said I didn't enjoy it. Just wish that you would've offered a little more detail. But I will definitely be waiting and reading the next chapter.
aaron
PS how did she come home so early in the day?
Author's Response:
Yeah, it was a bit slower I admit. Though it was partially intentional because the next couple of chapters I plan to have be much more ramped up. =)
I must ask, in what way do you feel it was lacking detail?
Thanks for the great review!
Also! I invisioned her to work a sort of 7 - 3 shift. She also lives quite close to the building, so it's not very far from there to her place. =)
- Xan.
[Report This]Date: August 31 2013 8:15 PM Title: Filling In.
Nathan's blacked-out memory really adds to the suspence of his sudden realization. Elysse might be his saving grace, (or) she could just be 'toying' with him, allowing him to think that he's in good hands...
I really like the way that you've set this up. I hope that it's a long adventure, seeing that this 'Research' is somewhat common place for this 'Company', you've got a perfect setting, with tons of possibilitys!
Great first chapters, can't wait to read more... ;`)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your great review! I'm glad that you're enjoying it thus far, and hope that I can continue to entertain as it goes along. :D
Hoping to have the next chapter uploaded either tonight, or tomorrow afternoon at some point as well!
- Xan.