Giantess World
Reviews For Miyu
Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29 2013 7:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
Author's Response:
Date: July 29 2013 7:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
It's an interesting concept and a good idea I think. Although one problem I noticed it that you tend to switch between past and present tense in the story. Pick one tense and stick with it, it's better that way.
Author's Response:
Yeah yer probably right.
Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 27 2013 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
Author's Response:
Date: July 27 2013 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
Oh wait, just re-read it, she WAS suspected.
Author's Response:
Yep I can see that that would be strange. I figured since there's no remains, theres no case. Thanks for the input
Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 27 2013 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
Date: July 27 2013 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Express
Id be interested to know more about the world, and why nobody said anything about her killing those guys and their family. Pretty good story, I still kind of lose a bit of belief in the fact that nobody suspects a thing about her, but its fine.