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Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 21 2014 6:01 AM Title: Into the Arid Wastes

As a huge linguistics nerd, I'm curious to see what kind of grammar and vocabulary you've come up with. As for the chapter, interesting development. It'll be nice to see where this leads.

Author's Response:

Glad I have someone who appreciates languages around. I am struggling to come up with a concrete grammar system, and could use assistance.


Reviewer: VividImagination Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 20 2014 3:28 PM Title: Into the Arid Wastes

Awesome! As if the gts genre wasn't cool enough, the sci fi aspect makes it infinitely better(for me anyways).

I liked the idea of Michael having a bit of power himself before, but now that they're on Nibiru, he's pretty helpless. Oh well. I think the 35 or so bodyguards should help keep them safe. Hopefully they aren't expecting some truly impressive demonstrations of Nephilia's power though. Because jumping high and running fast seem to be all she can muster.

Can't wait to see more!


Author's Response:

It always brings a smile to my face when the first word in a review is "awesome"

Also, Michael isn't entirely helpless. He's got his intelligence, and his resourcefulness to keep him safe. And in regards to Nephila, wait until you see next chapter.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20 2014 1:20 PM Title: Into the Arid Wastes

Sometimes Michael feels smaller than he actually is with the way you describe things. A spear long enough to impale 40 cargo ships? You sure Michael isn’t micro size?   

I’m also going to assume Athena did experiment on Nephila to make her naturally used to Atlantian level gravity so her own home world gravity would feel light.

And actually feel sorry for the two Nibiru that Nephila attacked. I can see why that obsession is a double edged sword. Nephila’s mind goes on auto-pilot and she runs on instinct. It could get her and Michael killed.

The Nibiru language does kind of sound like gibberish.

I find it hard to believe that one girl acquired such a huge following for Nephilia based on a single meeting. 


Author's Response:

Well, Seems I've got some explaining to do. I guess I'll cover all statments in order.

1) No I'm positive he's not micro. Although I understand why this is confusing. You see, because of this stories setting it can be difficult to create size comparisons since everything takes place thousands of years in the past and the technology is differnet from ours. So I can't just do what normal macro authors do and say things like "As big as a phone booth" because then I would be including elements from out own time into the story. That would just sound awful, and pull readers out of the story entirely.

Thus I need to create things that sound large to compare the giants too.

2) Lips shut on this one.

3) An excellent analysis. Obsession is a powerful emotion like fear or anger. It can definetely be a double edged sword. Also If you knew what the girl was saying you wouldn't feel as bad for her. Btw, the boy is fine; he just has a sore jaw and a couple of loose teeth.

4) Yeah... it does. Then again so do many languages.

5)  I personally felt it was quite believable. The last time they met Nephila did something that is impossible for other giants to do. Although we understand that because Nephila is accustomed to earth level gravity she can jump very high, Nia (the blue painted girl) does not. She saw what Nephila did as a miracle; a display of divine power. 

It may not be as incredible as healing the sick or moving mountains, but to a primative like her, what Nephila did was proof that she possesses the same "divine" power as the Atlantians, who as we already know frequently come down and abduct giants.


Hopefully I was able to answer all your questions to your satisfaction. If you require additional explaination just leave me a review and I'll get back to you ASAP

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