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Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 02 2013 8:51 PM Title: Married to Barbara

I feel that for your first story your grammar and spelling are pretty good, and your dialogue is well constructed and flows naturally.

I concur with jacksmith in that this is not a parody but rather more of a commentary.

anyways I think this story is really interesting in they way that it reads like a slice of life. there is no dramatic death sequence, or over the top shrinking scene, just two people interacting with each other despite their size differences.

 

 this story is probably the one of the closest things you can get to telling a realistic giantess story.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind words.

To be honest, this isn't the first time I dabble in creative writing. And I'm 31 and started learning English at the age of 12 I think, so I got to have something to show for.

That realism is what I try to achieve, and I glad it came over that way. In retrospect I which I could have laid it on thicker, being more overdramatic in the beginning and have made the nagging more excessive. 

Since I posted this story I had so much like these experiences in real life that made me think... damn, this should have been in that story.

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 25 2013 7:42 PM Title: Married to Barbara

This was so realistic and to the point,  it delivers the true reality of what it would most likely 'really' be like....to become miniature in size, and totally dependant upon your giantess wife.  You have performed a true glimpse into the fantastic world of a tiny man, and his gigantic wife, as she flitters about the house seemingly unaware of how roughly she manipulates him, and as if it's nothing at all, she controls every aspect of his deminuative life....

I would really like to read more of your work, and after reading your bio, we have had the same (50 ft. woman) dreams, and afterword creating some of our own...

You writing is nearly perfect as far as I'm concerned, and I really enjoyed the story as well!   I hope to see more of your work soon....



Author's Response:

Oh come on dude, my writing is not nearly perfect. :) I have a lot of points to work on and I hope I can only improve in my next story.

I am so glad you got the gist of it. This was exactly what I am going for without trying to give it away in the beginning. I thought many people wouldn't understand what I was going for. I guess I am not so crazy after all. :)

Thank you for your kind and positive words. And I have another story in the works I am eager to start on now.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2013 3:40 PM Title: Married to Barbara

I rather enjoyed this story. I love how nothing really happened, it was just their usual day. Very refreshing. My guess is this isn't your usual fair...
May I ask what your most fluent language is? Because you wrote this so well I was honestly taken back by the fact that English isn't your first language. Well done.

aaron
PS would you consider writing more?(not just for this story but in general)

Author's Response:

Wow, thanks for those kind words. I can judge how other people's English comes across, but I have no idea how I am doing myself. My first language is Dutch. Your words really lift my spirits. I wrote this in English from ths start, so I am a bit proud it went over this well. (Usually I write in Dutch and then translate.)

Yes, I have some more story ideas. And they are nothing like this story. (I am setting up a plot-driven fantasy story, so you can expect some fun and drama.)

I am encouraged now to write more.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2013 1:05 PM Title: Married to Barbara

You conveyed the tedium of a shrunken husband and a semi-vacuous wife quite plausibly. Bravo! :-)

Author's Response:

Thank you my friend. This means a lot coming from an author like you, which is why I would also like to welcome more critical opinions on where my flaws are and what desperately needs improvement. You got to try pretty hard to offend me. :)

On Barbara: of course it wouldn't surprise you that this all is based on real life experiences. She is a combination of my mother, sister and several ex-girlfriends.

And five-star ratings... come on rate it for what it's worth. ;)

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