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Reviewer: Magic681 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2021 10:44 AM Title: The Woman from the Stars

Author is ridiculously skilled. Had literally three viewpoints on how panicked Bradley was, and how it was affecting his ability to think logically. And the spacing is really easy to read. Definitely written paperback books, and listened to feedback, i'll say.



Author's Response:

Hmmm, can't tell if you're serious or not...but I'll take a chance at you being serious and say thanks!

Reviewer: ong76win2 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 02 2014 9:39 PM Title: Bradley's Last Stand

Great story! Love to read more of your works!

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 11 2013 6:29 AM Title: The Woman from the Stars

Overall the story is good.  I agree the ending is a little weak and rushed.  There's alot of room for a sequel and I hope there is one.  Some ideas I came up with:  The Trial of Arell-Brad is taken to her homeworld to act as a witness for her trial, but quickly realizes that Earthies are on trial as well.  The punishment could be that they have to live with eachother to prove that they both can live in civilized society.  With Arell treating Brad as a pet and/or a man at any given time.;  Team 2-A new research is sent to confirm Arell's findings.  They are more objective and treat it as a science experiment, gathering "samples", etc.  I just think that Arell shouldn't just return to Earth, unless it in exile.  Otherwise you'd be covering the same ground you've done already.  Just some ideas, take it or leave it, its your story.  You may have more plotted out already.

Reviewer: Story smith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 9:08 PM Title: Bradley's Last Stand

So in all actually Arellano was just another fucked up human...good this shows that all sentient life host the same seven deadly sins. Lust, gluttony Greed, sloth, wrath, envy, pride. it may had taked some infulence on our part but Arell shows some of these sins.

I feel that your story should act as a sort of template for anyone who wants to make a giant alien race as the background to their giantess cause even if they act superior, morally the are not and anyone who thinks up a sentient race that's socity is some sort of utopia need to relize such a thing does not exist

Author's Response:

Wow, thank you! I'm glad you think I did that well! It's more credit that I gave myself! :)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 8:05 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

Im with the guy below, its really hard to feel bad for Arell with the things she's done. I mean its obvious that humans(little ones) are jacked up and that it rubbed off on her but that doesn't suddenly make what she's done justified.

Secondly, about Avakon, its REALLY hard to believe that their race has no discrimination or war, especially when Arell goes and says that the ONLY reason her race would externimate the little humans is that they look like alike. So basically, any OTHER race that is violent and despicable is okay but just because we look like them, all of a sudden Arell suggests that we might be wiped out? That sounds like discrimination to me...

Also, Arell and her people could just leave Earth alone, yeah little humans are violent and whatnot, but they are not only bigger but also WAY more technologically advanced...Do we pose a threat to them or something? Destroying an entire planet because you don't like the people on it doesn't sound like something a benevolent race would do.

Something else I want to talk about is why I think, realistically, the giant humans are benevolent and all that jazz. I think its because of their lifespans...Im not sure exactly but you didnt mention anything about their brains being slower than ours, in fact maybe the opposite. And they have THOUSANDS of years to discuss and deliberate whatever differences they may have amongst eachother. We obviosly wouldnt have that luxury, so we resort to violence...I think its unfair of the giant people to be disgusted at how their little brother race is doing with such huge advantages.

Anyway, this was a great chapter, and it felt like an ending, although it seems you plan to continue this. I obviously dont agree with how Arell tried to justify her actions but Bradley was AMAZING in this chapter...Totally stole the show!



Author's Response:

Arell's actions are, indeed, not justified. I'm in agreement...as well as she. ;)

It's a little more deeper than 'they just look alike'. Think back to the example that Arell gave. Imagine you found a long lost brother or sibling or someone who has close ties to you in that fashion. You're excited to see them, thinking of what may occur within the newfound relationship, only to discover that the person is murderer. Not only that, but he is getting away with murders and you know it. You may react a few different ways. You may call the police, tell a friend...or stop them yourself. Either way, it's unlikely you'd just ignore the situation. Ignoring the additional values that Arell's race hold on altruism, you can sort of see where they are coming from. You have to remember that Arell's people are not gods. They see the Earthies as something so vile that they just do not want anything to do with them and loathe any connection that they have with something like that. Arell's personal reasons go a little further. The centuries of violence and apathy made her cold and indifferent, and when she accidentally kills and Earthy, she finds that she likes it, a fact that causes her to be disgusted with herself and makes her realize that she's turning into a monster, which causes her to be afraid that the people of Avakon will banish her. All of which merge into her bitterness towards the Earthies.

I'll expand on the Avakonians and their lifestyle...in the continuation, of course. ;)

 

Reviewer: sketch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 7:29 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

After I've read the story I have to say I don't like Arell.  She's not a sympathetic character.  The explanation reveals her motivation, but doesn't excuse her crimes.  Crimes, I might add, against two worlds, but only one of which she seems to care about.  If you think about it, given her murder count and the moral code of her home world, she's one of the worst people to have ever lived on both planets.  Also, as a sort of ambassador for her people, she's done more to disgrace their name and expose the hypocrisy of their values than any Earthly insult.

 

So no, she's not sympathetic, but she is pitiable, as in I feel sorry for her.  Her psyche is as fragile as a china dish.  Bradley, on the other hand, shines in this story.  He's more like a metal rod, malleable but not easily broken.  Even bent and dented, still keeps the rigidity of a spine.  Most shocking given the true reason she picked him, to be her torture stress ball.  There's so much Arell could have shared from her culture, instead she's got a lesson in forgiveness from a human a fraction of her age.  Funny how she only looked at the bad.  If this was the Fifth Element, Bruce Willis would have been screwed.

 

Now don't think because I don't personally like your giantess, that I thought your story was bad.  The 5 star rating should make that clear.  It does a great job of expressing its themes in what I felt was a very believable manner.  (Okay, maybe Kevin was a little over the top.)  But I don't feel like the ending was rushed at all.  It gets to the point without straining believability be prolonging the chase or delaying Bradley's epiphany for extended ship scenes.  To have padded it out would have felt like filler.  All and all, good  job.





Author's Response:

Showing that Arell and her kind have the potential to be flawed is what I was aiming for, so I'm glad you think that...though I will add that disgrace is in the eye of the beholder. ;)

As I said to Gadget, her grievances with the Earthies was more than the trauma of the violence and evil, but a few other personal things that could heavily (and not to mention negatively) affect her life.

I'm glad you liked the ending! You're probably more pleased with it than I am. :P

Reviewer: Simpson3k Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 6:06 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

Storywise the ending was good with explaining the background about Arell´s motivations and all, but i wished there would have been some more..."private interactions" between Arell and Bradley some kind of more development in their relationship to each other.

At the beginning of the story i really thought that that is the core of the story and the conquering of earth is only kind of the reason why Arell showed up in the first place. But then Bradley was more time on the run than he actually spend on Arells ship.

That was a bit dissapointing to be honest.

 

I didnt expect them to make love lol but..well if Arell even a single time would kind of get out of her suit...well you know..

 

But perhaps ..at one day..Bradly is beamed up again while he watches up to the stars..short after he heard "hello my little earthy" in his head XD

 

And as a sidenote, i missed one arguement in the final conversation between Arell and Bradley. Human on earth my be less civilized then Arell´s people, but the agedifference of the both civilizations was never mentioned. I mean how long, how many probably million years do Arells people already live, how much time did they have since they lived in caves clothed in furry loincloths? I hardly can believe their never where violant in their evolution. They seemed to grew out of it, got a better understanding for life, learned to threasure it and all. But judging humans on earth for didnt learn that, after perhaps less than 1% of civilization age compared to Arells people is kind of unlogical. Its like hunting down gorrials in the jungle coz they didnt invent the wheel yet..after all gorrials are kind of pre-human in evolution. (perhaps they are not really but it fits to the example^^)

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 5:11 PM Title: Bradley's Last Stand

I liked the ending, It felt rushed indeed but It was a satisfying ending for me. n.n Do you have plans for a continuation?

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 4:33 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

While it was a bit abrupt have to say I liked the ending, I half guessed at some of the aspects. How such a long life could effect her view of humanity, but was still surprised by the revelation. 

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 3:26 PM Title: Bradley's Last Stand

OK story but ending felt rushed and ended up sending a very narrow misanthropic message. 



Author's Response:

The ending did sound better in my head than it ended up, I will admit. Didn't come out as good as hoped, but Im still pleased with it. Thanks for reading! :D

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 12:29 PM Title: The Ultimatum and War

Wow the intensity, and Bradley came back.

Nice cliffhanger I really want to know what's going to happen.

Can what for for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Story smith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 9:51 AM Title: The Ultimatum and War

Dude I love this stark fellow he's got some real balls hope you keep him around for a while more

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 3:45 AM Title: The Ultimatum and War

Felt the need to reply to your question even if it wasn't a real question to: isn't that the entire point of the antagonist?

 

 

Yes it is but there is only so much i can take from a antagonist in a story. Not saying you are doing a bad job on her. Just saying she is little bit much for me to handle and not get irritated when reading her parts in the story.

She is not really acring any better than us by taking people from Earth and playing with them and at times flat out killing them. She says we are inferior race to her race but in the end she is still just a human also, just another kind of human.

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 2:55 AM Title: The Ultimatum and War

Damm Arell is getting more irritating to listion to. I didn't like her from the very start. Yes she is a alien and has very advanced technology, so i can understand what she can do with it.

Next time she opens her mouth to talk, they should shoot a nuck down her throat with an unmanned drone , thats it no more craze alien bitch.

She said her race was just like us, what ever can kill us can most likely kill her also, just needs more of it due to her size. Not that hard to gas her in her mouth.

 

Colonel Stark if he has a arm free and a grenade he should throw it into her mouth, it wont most likely to kill her but it should be enough for a little bit of damage to her again.

 

 

I don't like Arell but the story is entertaining enough for me to keep checking for updates on it and to keep reading it.

I will look forward to the next update hopefully sometime soon.

 

 

 

Bit of a low rating only due to Arell seeming to win because of her size and technology and that they really haven't delt her a big enough blow yet.



Author's Response:

I feel as if I should be proud that Arell is irritating you, for isn't that the entire point of the antagonist? =P

Reviewer: alee Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2013 10:49 PM Title: Trouble on the Highway

Amazing story Sir Kevin, its a shame that we hv to wait like forever to get an update, i like whr this is going. CANNOT WAIT FOR MORE

 

Just a thought, can v c Arnell using her transporter to Transport a random flying plane to her ship to capture More Earthies to add her collection? Cuz at the start i had a feeling she may also do that, but BRADLEY comes 1st

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2013 8:42 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

The old fart coronel, is a badass!

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 30 2013 6:06 PM Title: Trouble on the Highway

Fantastic! :)

Reviewer: Lover of Stories Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2013 5:05 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

That was another great chapter, full of suspense for me he he, great work.

 

 

Hope to see another one soon. Thanks for the time and the care that it took you in writting it, it's a great story so far.

Reviewer: Orpheus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 14 2013 8:01 PM Title: Bradley's Flight

Oho, new chapter! There's never enough hide and seek set in a city on this site, I swear. I really hope you'll hold this one out, it's great. Bradley sure got lucky this time, but some kind of deus ex machina better not save his ass next time. It's about time he showed some backbone, like in this chapter, I really want him to pull something that can surprise even Arell.

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed [Report This]
Date: August 14 2013 5:18 PM Title: The Woman from the Stars

Really liked the most recent chapter, Bradley's escape down to pure dumb luck, though at the same time he enough of a backbone to keep running. Hoping he isn't instantly captured next chapter, and can make a decent chase of it.

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