[Report This]Date: July 20 2013 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Really great story, I certainly enjoyed it and was pleased to read a new chapter everyday when you uploaded them.
I had my suspicion about the "special place" at first when I started reading this story. Then I checked your other stories, so yeah, then it became obvious.
I understand the comments from some people that question having this end in swallowing the shrunken people. Maybe this is personal taste, we can't all like the same things. If you as the writer like this subject a lot (I assume), then by all means only write stories that end like this. Whatever motivates you to give us a free story to read.
I'm not sure if I myself can be classified as a voraphile, or if you consider yourself one. For me it is more a morbid fascination and not something arousing. So I await your next story, and am very curious about the plot and characters that are going to be in it.
What you have in this story disregarding its conlusion is amazing character development and dynamic. I really love how you put down Samantha, she must have been so screwed up psychological by April. All three of them were great togheter. April as the cruel insane tormenter and Robert as "the new" guy experiencing this hell for the first time. I liked this aspect more than the conclusion of the story. (But again, I have no problem with the ending.)
Maybe you can explore this even more in future stories? The relationships between the characters, because you really got some talent there.
I must even admit, I would have prefered that Robert was eaten too. I am really not into crushing. This again is personal taste where there is no right or wrong.
Top class story, amazing writing style.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2013 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Well cant say I didn't see that coming, but you made me intruiged in this world that allows these kinds of things to happen. I MEAN the cop was RIGHT THERE, and he obviously KNEW what she was gonna do to them. I hope you elaborate more on why people with this syndrome are allowed to be treated this way in some other story sometime. Great story BTW.
Date: July 18 2013 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
All that....just for them to get eaten? Really? That's pretty...sick. The categories lied to me!
Author's Response:
I wouldn't they say lied... Maybe the tags just felt you weren't privy to such information.
Date: July 18 2013 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Sizescribe I READ your previous story, you cant fool me! Great leadup though, although I knew what was coming.
[Report This]Date: July 17 2013 9:05 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wow. I just read the first 4 chapters at once; I'm blown away. Swift pacing and an an impressive slow shrnk aspect. Your writing feels very real and I like your style. Will most definitely be keeping up with this one.
[Report This]Date: July 15 2013 7:11 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wouldn't anyone notice if he screamed in the stroller? She's like in the wide open aint she? And man, it scares the crap outta me just reading this story, April makes the hairs on my neck stand on end. Great story for sure!
[Report This]Date: July 11 2013 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Love the gentle/dominating attitude.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I am the kind of person that mixes soy suace, and duck sauce in my chinese food ;)
Date: July 10 2013 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wow, very cool! I can tell you definitely have experience with writing. The characters seem very realistic and I can totally imagine the whole situation playing out in my head.
Very excited to see where you take this, hope you keep updating it.
Author's Response:
Thank you, not to worry, this story is on the fast track to completion.
[Report This]Date: July 09 2013 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
amazing! love the gradual plot build up. looking forward to reading more. please continue!
Author's Response:
Thank you, appreciate it! :)
[Report This]Date: July 08 2013 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Flows really well. An I like the plot. Hope to see more.
aaron