[Report This]Date: December 31 2017 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
For me, there is too many describes of noting. Of course, everyone likes other things. I think it can be cool story. I'll read next chapter later.
8/10
[Report This]Date: July 12 2013 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
I have to agree with wildcatman, your descriptions for the characters are very detailed. And the story is leading off with a good start, I look forward to reading more chapters of this good story. Keep up the good work!!
Author's Response:
I'll try to do just that Pasret4. And I'll try to have an other chapter up tonight so please stand by and thank you very much for the comments! ;)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2013 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh, your discriptions are so methodical, and defined, that the scenes just play-out like a movie!
Your very good at building suspence. The scene in the doorway, when Wendy finally arrives is so exciting. The way that you discribe the brightly lit doorway, and the huge shadows passing before it sent a chill down my spine...
The size of Wendys' hand, and it being large enough to crush him, (or easily smother him) was very realistic too. The frigility of his small size is fully taken into concideration, and it would be very likely that most anyone, under the same curcumstances, would be overcome with shock and faint, from the abrupt way that he was suddenly picked-up!
This is turning into one of my favorite's! I look forward to following this....
I hope it's a Long one!
Author's Response:
Well then Wildcatman I don't think that you will be disappointed.. In the past I did these types of stories pretty much for fun and games. Not really taking them too seriously and not caring if I finished them or not.
This is not the case with this one as I've decided to go ahead and make it a project that will probably take dozens of chapters in order to round it out into a complete story for a change. I of course can't make any promises but this is my aim with this one.
I'm just very happy that person's like yourself and others are entertained by this and therefore am getting the needed incentive to give this story a lot more focus than I've done for a lot of my others. I'm even considering adding 3D art to illustrate some of the chapter scenes but this is just in the formative stage right now but is planned for future chapters.
Thank you very much for the good words Wildcatman. :)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2013 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 3
Just read the entire story. You go into depth which is rare to see. I wonder if Tim will get used to Wendy. Cannot wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for reading my story .. I really appreciate your effort to do such!!.
Yes, I wonder if those two will ever get used to each other as well. ;)