Date: March 23 2016 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
I hope you find the inspiration to write the next chapters soon. The story was already very good, now things get very interesting.
Author's Response:
Working on it right now as a matter of fact Barrowman. ;)
Date: March 15 2016 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
For Wendy this is also a good lesson. The longer he is gone, the more she will learn. What she do with it is up to her. The fact that he wants nothing to do with her will even eventually sink in with a 14 year old girl.
Yes that toughen up part for Tim will be interesting. But even that hard life or death is better than living in a LPGO controlled environment.
Author's Response:
I'd would agree with you on every point that you made Barrowman. I think Tim is very lucky in the respect of meeting somebody his first hour out of the house. As I'm well aware of the old axiom, of - The problem with running, is that you eventually find out that there's nowhere to run to.
Date: March 15 2016 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
Can't wait. I look forward to this new setting. The outside world. Let's see how that feels like for a shrunken person.
Author's Response:
Full of dangers from unknowns and knowns alike. ;)
Date: March 14 2016 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wendy is very cute, yet totally in charge. Love her as a character.
Great writing,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thanks again Diesel. Wendy will soon have to shar the limelight. :)
[Report This]Date: March 14 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Interesting. You're continuing again. Let see where this goes.
Author's Response:
I should have some more soon Barrowman.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2015 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story seems so realistic. Well done !
I hope the babysitter will let him play with her.. if you know what i mean
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for the vote to realism Takuoni!
[Report This]Date: July 21 2015 6:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
I thought wendy was going to be like a sister or mother type twords tim but i thought wrong. Seems like shes slowly becoming power drunk. Im glad this story is back by the way.
Author's Response:
I think you'll still see elements of that.. But I just figured that the temptation to overpower at her inexperience age would be too great a psychological feat to master.
Thank you for writing a review Moonpie... Love your name. :)
Date: July 20 2015 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thanks for making that clear on the size front. :) ;)
About Wendy's age. I was 99% sure of the reason you just explained. But asked anyway to make sure. ;) The story wouldn't work well with a Wendy that starts off as 11 years old or 17. Tim's age of 20 years old is also not randomly chosen.
Governments who act like surrogate parents. Very disturbingly present in my country.
"But I've come to believe that I'm writing more for the reader than for myself to the extent or ratio that I give them the best of what they want yet keeping enough independence to not give them only what they want which I believe ultimately yields you a better product than the inverse method that many writers insist upon which I diverge from."
That sounds good. Seeing the details and hints in the story. I'm convinced it wil be a satisfying journey and ending.
Glad to review and read this story.
Author's Response:
Thanks again Barrowman.. From the way it's look it might just turn out to be just me and you on this journey I fear, He, he, he.
But so be it if that comes to be true. I'm just glad that I've got this one going again and I have a clear idea of how it will progress and ultimately end. I think it'll be worth your effort. :)
Date: July 19 2015 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
@Crocodile.
I'm interested what the writer thinks too, when he/she writes his/her story. I don't want to write every possible outcome I can think of in my review when the story isn't finished, because I want to see the writers point of view and thoughts and don't want to ruin it for other readers.
Important is that this world is believable if 1% srhinks to 3 inch and the characters point of view are understandable. Also important is how much I can relate with certain choices of the characters.
The anger/emotion it gives is indeed also important as you mentioned, because I see the same type of rotten behaviour, dumb people and overbearing governments in the real world. Telling you that it is for your own good and that they care about you. Betrayal by a friend/family member/loved one is an absolute NO in my world. That is an act I almost never forgive.
It may change, but at this point, I only care about the wellbeing of the characters Tim and Wendy. It occured to me that Tim hasn't done one very important thing yet. But it looks like he's doing it gradually so far.
By the way. Did you deliberately choose the 3 inch height for this story or is that your favorite height/size for every story with shrunken people in it? The age of 14 year old Wendy and not 11 or 17 is probably on purpose.
Author's Response:
I'm in complete agreement with you about our governments overstepping their bounds in the attempt to become the surrogate parents of a race of people who no longer need any such thing. I could go off on a very long diatribe about such manners and tend to do so but will spare the readers the boredom as I know they don't want to get their political science from me. he, he.
I had a very nice sophisticated response to your question as to why I picked 3 inches but the page silently logged me out so when I tried to post it, thereby barring me and therefore lost the response totally. Let me see if I can try again.... I chose that size for the following reasons as it is not my favorite height either... When a beer brewery chooses a signature lager (although this is not so much the case these days as it used to be) they attempt to smooth out the peaks and valleys of that taste at the expense of losing the more cultured palates to the blanded taste buds of the masses in the interests of maximizing profits knowing full well that they could make a better beer if they so chose to do so but default to the former for monetary concerns.
Now, I've heard some writers here state that they write for themselves.. And that's fine for them and I wish them the best of luck with that philosophy too. But I've come to believe that I'm writing more for the reader than for myself to the extent or ratio that I give them the best of what they want yet keeping enough independence to not give them only what they want which I believe ultimately yields you a better product than the inverse method that many writers insist upon which I diverge from. Perhaps there's a metaphysical reason pertaining to service to self and service to others which if I go to deeply into may hurt some feelings amongst my contemporaries so will ask you to forgive me for not divulging further into that hint.
As to Wendy's age I chose 14 because that is typically (although not always) when a female begins to show her flowers which means that she has the equipment but does not yet possess the experience or wisdom to use it properly, which typically leads to many mistakes which our protagonist must endure leading us to an abundance of poor choices that give us the travesties which I'm all to happy to pick and choose from.
This was another great review from you Barrowman! I truly appreciate your bravery in doing such if going by the viewership to review ratios are sadly any true measure to go by.
I truly look forward to your next one!
Date: July 18 2015 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
@crocodile
Totally agree with you on every word.
Author's Response:
He, he, well thanks again then Barrowman!
Date: July 17 2015 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
EH... I'm actually not at all sympathetic towards the little dude. He's... well, he's an adult, but he acts like a bratty (and not especially intelligent) child...
Author's Response:
I suppose a person could regress just a bit should they loose their stature and status in life like he has.. They might even revert a little bit.
Date: July 15 2015 5:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
Ok Crocodile. I stick with it. ;) :)
I like how this world works. Because it's believable if 1% of the population shrinks to that height. The disturbing part is that the mother lets someone so much younger and not fully matured take care of him. If you do that as a parent, you break the selfconfidance of a child/young adult that is already brittle in his shrunken state. With a strong character who doesn't break, he or she will become hatefull. The other disturbing part is that Wendy seems like a nice girl with the best intentions and is put in that position. She has no concept of what it's like to be a 20 year old shrunken person. Her so called good intentions only anger and hurt everyone who was in that postition. No one will accept life lessons from a 14 year old. An unhealthy situation.
There are all sort of possible outcomes.
Author's Response:
Indeed you are very correct about every statement and observation that you just made. And that's exactly why I chose those conditions to explore! I don't see a lot of things working out here much to both of their consternations or sorrows.
I do hope that it does continue to provide interesting and stimulating reading for the viewer however. The outcomes are endless indeed, but I have a particular one in mind with a determination to see this story through to it's end.
Thanks for your pledge to stick it out with this story and please continue to review it!
Date: July 14 2015 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice to see this story back! Definitely, one of the best!
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for the great incentive Abc! It was time to dust this one off and get it going again. ;)
Date: July 12 2015 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 1
Pooh, what's welcome return.
These two have a great dynamic. I love how Wendy gives an air of barely even trying as she dominates Tim.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for reviewing RealIRS. If you think about it, wouldn't it be that easy? I think that the slightest movements on her part would bowl him over like a mac truck. She holds most all of the cards and can dictate most all terms due to that.
[Report This]Date: July 10 2015 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very good
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot Bittany!!!
[Report This]Date: October 04 2014 11:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
I hope this story is not dead its been good so far.
Author's Response:
Nope, not dead, just sleeping for a little while. ;)
[Report This]Date: May 26 2014 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very good. Please continue.
Author's Response:
By all means I shall Elcrumb!
Date: January 28 2014 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love Wendy and Love the premise for the story. I am sure that Wendy will continue to have the upper hand. Very nice writting when you show it from his point of view (being lifted). You make your stories very believable. If this happened in real life it could easily go this way. Out of curiosity will Wendy's Mom make an appearance?
Looking forward to more,
Diesel
[Report This]Date: July 09 2013 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very nice! You have a wonderful attention to detail, and you clearly craft your scenes carefully. I love your setting as well. I look forward to this wherever you take it.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the positive review QMajor... In the end, it is my hope that I take this to a place that entertains you my friend. :)
Date: July 07 2013 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 1
1. There would be cheap and reliable facilities for this. Yes, there would. With minimal help the little people could take care of each other in specialized environments.
2. A mother? Seems more like deus-ex-machina to me... I'm seriously serious.
3. He would have worked as well. Various call centres and such would gladly welcome people with such.. disadvantages - I mean, he still has a brain, right? In the socialism that we currently have chances are it would even be subsidized.
4. It's ridiculous how strange people seem to assume that the first thing a giantess would do is to humiliate her victim, but whatever. Frankly, I almost no longer care about this silliness.
Most likely farewell.
Author's Response: You talk as if you've been there Gerald.. But we all know that you have not. I think this story is bubbling some of your very own personal issues to the surface here.. And to keep reading might either be therapeutic for you or torturous... If it is your first inclination to leave than perhaps you should.
But should you decide to read on I only ask that you give me the freedom to create the world that mind mind is doing right now and to avoid your scathing comments in the future.