Oh Man.....this is really GOOD!   Just found this and started it, then couldn't stop reading...Ha!  Your size is a bit too small, (for my interests) but, the story idea and the underlying fear factor is really off the scale Dude!

I think your doing just great with this Gadjet.  Glad to see that you've decided to start writing, it's about time! ;`)

Several thoughts:

1. You don't cut holes in a lid, you punch them - usually from top, which would make it effectively impossible for Tommy to get out. Also - such metal edges are sharp for full size people, but magnified a hundredfold - it's not a V shaped knife edge to maintain such property. Finally - I don't think that glass etching would provide enough foothold for climbing. I'm no expert and I can be wrong about any of those things though.

2. You seem to misuse human/giant a lot - at first I thought the "giants" somehow grew a lot and conquered the earth, but it seems it is actually the little people who shrunk - and both sides wouldn't use such nomenclature (full-size humans wouldn't start calling themselves giants and while littles could try to maintain the illusion of their "humanity" - they would be largely lying to themselves).

3. As for the tiny people and their "colonies". Living in the late anthropogene (late since humans will be obsolete in just several decades), we have no idea how the primeval environment felt like for early humans. But at such minute size, it would be so much worse - everything would be gravely dangerous. Every mantis the size of a whale shark? Ants not causing "problems" but rather becoming deadly machines of doom. Seriously. They would need heavy equipment to deal with such dangers and I cannot envision them running foundries and factories, being hunted by the "angry giantesses" all the time. Also, comparably slow human reproductive cycle would have no way of ever catching up to the losses and the "wild micros" would very soon become extinct - leaving only the domesticated ones. On the other hand if it worked faster, then such creatures would not be humans at all - it takes a long time for our personality to develop. And human shaped instinct-driven tiny mammals are not very interesting... But no worries, just some overly-realistic craziness - it completely breaks the Tommy's behavior and perspective for me.

4. It's clear that either Kimmy is completely insane or all "giants" are just much different from us - but regardless of which option You have envisioned, it makes her behavior empty. There's no telling what her deus-ex-machina-driven multiple-personality will have her do next - and it doesn't seem interesting at all. I think another problem is that when the world has lots of shrunkees, then there's no reason for any GTS (or the reader, for that matter) to become overly attached to any particular little person - since if it breaks, she can always get another one. Just saying, makes her "caring" a lot less important. Or at least it would be much harder to develop such emotion (and no, her saying that "from this point I will protect you" doesn't count, since she can say "that was a joke" a minute later - without a deep emotional bond, such promises are empty). I largely ignored her little speech about his fear feeding the predator - there are many social and psychological problems that a person can have and she can choose to lie to herself about it - but it doesn't mean everybody else has to indulge her. Well, of course Tommy has in his situation, but of course even if he dies, then she can flush his body down the toilet (or lick him, ...) - and get another one.

First two are just details that I figured while reading the last two chapters, but 3 and 4 are essentially some major story-breaking level problems - they already made the characters venture far beyond the point of unreliability and it's hard to imagine any of them ever returning to the realm of the believable. Which isn't at all bad - there's plenty of such stories around the site and nobody else but me seems to mind, so don't worry about it :>

I didn't want to criticize the events so much, it just.. kind of... ended up this way. I think it's still a great first story though, so keep going and I'm sure You'll get better. Of course, if You never aimed at any level of realism, then simply ignore my thoughts entirely and please excuse my unhealthy craving for anything meaningful on this site :>

Author's Response:

1. I suppose, but me personally I like twisting the knife after I've cut the whole. This would mean the whole would be star-shaped and someone small enough could definitely wiggle throught there...Im not sure where I misused giant, but humans never call themselves that in this story...There are two races: giants and humans.