I just noticed this story Gadget. Congrads on uploading your first of hopefully many stories.

First off, the pictures are an interesting touch. Not a lot of people use the picture finction anymore so props for using that. 

Secondly, the quality of this work is far above the average of most first stories. Your grammar is excellent, the dialogue is used well (not too much, not too little), and its well paced (no timeskips or leaps in plot logic).

Lastly, I like how candid the story is. Those two paragraphs after the word "CRUNCH" really got me excited for future chapters.

I look foward to reading more of this sometime.

  Somehow you've improved greatly in the last chapter, I don't know why though. I am curious as to why Kim lusts for Tommy so much though. If you have problems with size, I recommend looking at the some of the writing tools on this size to get an idea on how big Tommy is to Kim. 

Ah a new chapter, good addition but it seems a little short? 

Great chapter! Also, I find it a bit funny how we're giving our giantesses superhuman strength and powers, as if having our little guys be so powerless wasn't enough! And I'm definitely anticipating some sort of revenge on the other 'normal' giantesses, at least after Tommy gets comfortable with Kim.

And let me give some constructive criticism, I hope!

I know Tommy is in a situation which in reality is just impossible, we really couldn't imagine how somebody would really react to situations that Tommy experiences, we only can write stories about it. But that doesn't mean that Tommy has to be somewhat dim-witted. I'm only saying that I hope he figures it out quicker, because unless the humans in your story never tell night stories, he really should know what a Vampire is!

Also, less adverbs! This is a lesson that has been taught to me by everyone I've ever asked advice about writing. I never understood why, until I started trying to use as less adverbs as possible, and then I noticed the difference when I read what I wrote. It definitely makes your story better, so, you should try too! Always try to write a sentence so that you won't need to use an adverb. :)

Oh and yeah, passive voice too, but I'm having difficulties with that too, I still can't figure it out, hehe. 

After reading I've got to say that I'm enjoying this story. I thought it was interesting how you are unraveling her abilities. The only thing that upsets me is that you are using a vampire as this is the same thing in my next short story but they are extremely different. Hope to see more!

Author's Response:

Sorry bout' stealing your thunder bro. Im not gonna lie, besides the whole "twist" thing, it allows me to get away with some things that I wouldnt be able to otherwise, like her being able to hear him despite his size. Basically it helps keep things moving instead of me having to sit there and describe how close she's holding him to her ear and whatnot! In other words it allows for some lazy writting! XD. And I gots a plot device to back me up!

Love it so far! Can't wait for more I'm on the edge of my seat I love how she is so sweet but has a dark little twist it keeps me wondering what she is I think I might know! Keep going!

Author's Response:

Thats the idea, Thanks for the interest.

Great new chapter, and the way of the giantess between gentle and sometimes half evil side? is my kind of giantess :D (actually i love gentle but very dominant giantess girls with thier man;))

Anyway thanks for sharing another great one, i hope the next chapter follows soon.

I am really growing to like this. Heh heh, Kim is so far turning out the way I had hoped, and unlike Smith I see the pattern. She's alone and lonely, she feels bad for the way humans are treated, and she wants to keep Tommy safe. The only way she can accomplish all of those is to keep him, willing or unwilling. And since he is unwilling, and he told her that he was trained as a pet, it only makes sense to toher to treat him as a pet until he trusts her. I bet that her making him call her mommy is a way to try and form some kind of bond between them. I also bet that unless he manages to befriend Kim quickly and convince her that he trusts her she will see him less as a person and more as a pet like everyone else.

...or I am totally off base with my analysis of Kim. ^_^ Am I at all close?

Great story! Definitely interested in where this is going, and I like the ruthlessness part of it, as you know me I believe. I'm a huge fan of world-building, and I would definitely love to see the back-story exanded.

Some constructive criticism I hope, some things that I've learned while I wrote my stories.

IMO, thoughts should always be written in italics while speaches should be quotet as usual. And also, it's definitely not a rule, but I find that when you break the the story into paragraphs, I feel that when you switch from one character speaking to another, it should always be a new paragraph, even if it's mostly one-liners. It's easier to read the story that way, and it looks more... beautiful.

This seems very interesting, especially Kim. She seems like she could turn out to be a very neat character. I could see her turning into a giantess who wants to be kind and loving to tinies, yet has to battle with wanting to abuse them as well. I'll be keeping an eye on this story. ^_^