Date: August 24 2015 8:42 AM Title: Chapter 5
THIS STORY IS SO FUCKING AWESOME!!!
Date: July 03 2013 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 4
Awesome chapter, really well described in all respects. Loving the slow methodical breakdown of vannessa told from both sides. Got this bookmarked ^_^ Keep up the deviance ;)
(Harlequinems)
Author's Response:
Thanks I plan to :)
[Report This]Date: July 02 2013 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 4
I'm coming around, good stuff.
Author's Response:
glad to hear that, thank you :)
Date: July 02 2013 11:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well this s interesting. Vanessa has wised up real quick which is completely understandable in this situation...yet you've managed to show it's more an immediate reaction than a permanent change good job. It's actually a very real reaction towards self preservation. I'm starting to wonder how much Kelsy cares for her sister. Was the death threat legitimate or really just a threat. The way you've written her I know she's perfectly willing to hurt Vanessa a lot if necessary but I think killing her would hurt Kelsy more than she might even realize. For the moment I think she's just sort of lost in her power trip.....um these are all just thoughts and opinions by the way just keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Good observations, Kelsey does like to see Vanessa squirm obviously but.. probably.. wouldn't take things so far even if push came to squish. ;)
[Report This]Date: July 02 2013 9:14 AM Title: Chapter 4
I cannot wait for the next chapter. From what your hinting at it seem to be a good one. This is a really good read.
Author's Response:
Thanks zephilia, I have had little time to write so these chapters have all been done a bit hastily but the next chapter won't be.
[Report This]Date: June 26 2013 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
Been enjoying reading this. The size difference is a good change of pace and the background has been thoroughly set out so we know exactly how all this came about and why the situation between the two has reached the point it has (I may just be biased though, as i hate overly complex mass quantities of background stuff).
Liking the character descriptions too, the difference between the lives of the girls really grinds the humiliation in to Vanessa ;)
Author's Response:
Thanks! I agree that a little background explanation is good but you can definitely take away from the story if there's too much of it.
Date: June 21 2013 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
A good start so far. I really hope things eventually work out for these two sisters. A person can only be pushed so far on both sides of this relationship and it would be a shame if this ended in tragedy. You've done a great job making these characters seem real and you've created a very sympathetic character in Vanessa my heart goes out to her and you've even made Kelsy interesting I hope she develops into something more than just a heartless sadist. I'd like to know just how she got like this. It can't all be from Vanessa being a lazy bitch....anyway keep it up :)
Author's Response:
I do have a flashback chapter in the works soon, and yes.. I plan to make their relationship much more.. complex.. than one sadist and one abused girl although I doubt that part will ever be too far from either of their minds. Thank you so much for your review!
[Report This]Date: June 20 2013 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh I like how forceful Kelsey is and I love the disobedient Vanessa. These two are a perfect match in my book. Cnnot wait to see how this story plays out. There personalities clash and I love it. However, I keep thinking it would be hilarious to see the tables turned later down the road. But thats just what I would find funny this story is great I would like to see Kelsey be a little more violent, I can't wait to see how far she will go with her "Pet".
Author's Response:
Unfortunately for Vanessa there will definitely be no turning of the tables :) I am really glad you like it so far
Date: June 20 2013 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 3
Well, Kelsey could have made it worse for Vanessa. I mean, at least Kelsey let Vanessa use her hands instead of forcing her to use her mouth to clean the toilet. She should be grateful.
Author's Response:
I'm sure Kelsey agrees with you
[Report This]Date: June 18 2013 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great story, wonder if she will turn docile or not. I sense she still has some fight in her. Cannot wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Oh yes, there is plenty of fight left in her especially with where I plan on taking things in later chapters =]
[Report This]Date: June 18 2013 10:21 AM Title: Chapter 2
This story is really good! I'm absolutely loving the interaction between the sisters, and I'm looking forward to seeing Vanessa's ultimate transformation into a good little girl.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: June 17 2013 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love where this is going. Can't wait for the next chapter. It seems like it will be a great story.
Date: June 17 2013 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
I hope Vanessa learns her place, perhaps by violent means. A whip and a choke chain are good tool for training animals.