[Report This]Date: May 26 2013 4:56 PM Title: Amber – fun and regret.
I like how the micro humans became disillusioned with Amber and knew that she was going to kill them no matter what they did but I don’t like how quickly they trusted Nicole. It would have been interesting to see what Nicole would do if the micro humans saw through her façade of kindness and told her to “fuck off” like they did with Amber. Lisa’s sudden appearance in Amber’s zone was so random that even if you didn’t intend it I thought she destroyed that city just to spite her daughter. At least Amber knows how it feels to have her “micros” killed carelessly by another person without her permission, if nothing else.
But since Amber and Nicole aren’t that much more developed than they were in the earlier chapters, all the focus is on Kate because that is where the plot is. Now that Kate knows the micro humans were really shrunken people, I wonder how that is going to affects how she runs her zone, how she feels about her friends, and the others. Will she think they’re monsters? Hmm.
I knew Erica might have been the big bad. Gary might be safe for now in Kate’s zone but poor Rachel. It sucks she might die before we get to know any more about her.
Author's Response: Well, the problem with not-trusting-Nicole is that when they were being terrorized by this monstrous giantess - I really felt that even a hint of salvation would convince them. I mean.. Nicole could just as well kill them, but "promised" them escape from that dreaded place - don't tell you you would have seen it coming. Amber was the only caretaker they have seen at all (it was an untrained zone, as I mentioned a couple times) and the only option for them would be that she must be some kind of exception - I mean, to immediately assume that everybody is evil? Regardless of how much more interesting it might be (and I see your point there :>), I am trying to keep the story consistent - it would be even more fun if the littles had wings and kept flying all over the place, but... Also - it would take another K words to get to the point where they could play with them...
Lisa.. yeah... in the previous plan it made a bit more sense - but now Amber and Nicole figured it out on their own - and even then random things do happen in the real world. But the real explanation was meant to be that it was a couple days after her graduation - the girls don't know it, but Lauren did recall how they had to give Lisa the gifts only minutes before the party - perhaps she was simply greedy (but yes, this part was not bluntly explained after the re-cut - only hinted (like.. sooo many things), I hoped a careful reader might pick it up though (but yeah.. I think I'm putting these kinds of things for myself in a couple years)) - does it seem that random? Also keep in mind all the complaining on Lisa from various folks... Maybe she cannot do better? Try looking for various little things - "What do you mean" and later surprise - staring at each other...
Well, the main reason I decided to keep them around (and thus this 3+1 split from the beginning) was to mix the Kate's discoveries and interludes with the descriptions of how they were raised to behave (phew, now I can at least write about it in notes/responses openly), which I hoped would really emphasize the significance of Kate's early realizations. And it is not as simple as that as Kate - even she noticed how little she knows and can do about her situation. She will need all the help she can get if she is to accomplish anything - which may include Gary, Crawford (he's a cutey), perhaps some mothers or even other girls? Who knows... Besides - the girls are changing too, just less than Kate... but come on - she had a lot of help.
And I think it should be fairly simple to notice already - the very idea for the beginning of the story is the "reverse-giga", whereas in most (almost all?) stories a character gets blown up, sometimes destroys some cities unaware of her situation, realizes what she is then plays gentle and/or playfully (gentle part also optional) and finally turns to full rampage - at which point there is nothing more left to add to the story, this one seems to.. well, you have probably seen it as well :>
The EE (evil erica) was supposed to be obvious by now - with all the mentions from different characters in earlier chapters.. only I think of it more like "the ultimate master of all-the-evil-in-the-universes and beyond" kind of bad. Easily shadowing all evil dictators and fascist/communist/democratic leaders alike.. seriously... "big bad"?
But.. um... I thought it should be obvious what is going to happen to Rachel...
Also - why 4 stars? Have I done something wrong? I did not notice much disappointment in the review :>