Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 11:25 AM Title: Nicole – betrayal and vengeance.

Argh your preference for telling rather than showing what is happening in the story using descriptive POV’s from both sides is making this story hard to read. The POV from the micro humans was actually pretty good but when it comes to the giantesses it just feels too impersonal. It’s like I’m reading a documentary rather than a story. I do like the concept behind this world your writing style makes it hard to get into.

As for the story itself, I think humanity is doomed. The way you write most of the girls makes them appear too immature to cultivate a civilization. I mean having a party in a populated zone? Really? Yeesh. 

 

Author's Response: Well, that was the point - most of the "Caretakers" do not perceive the "micros" as people, why would they "experience" it as anything else than just some fun? (You can always imagine how the little people must feel, though, especially after 5 - I hope I gave enough thoughts on the topic there) As for the doomed/immature part - remember it was the mothers idea for graduation parties like that (and more details about that will come as well, just when I finish struggling with the next two chapters), but I can see You already got the sort of impression I was aiming for at the very beginning of the story (40k words, I know, shush) - and of course keep reading, I hope it will get much, much more interesting :)