[Report This]Date: May 09 2013 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 5
Great chapter and I hope kate stays big. I think she is more evil than her sister.
Author's Response: You'll just have to wait and see!
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 4
Love the little backstory, I hope that we see more revenge for Kate.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 4
I like the story but seeing how Kate acting I'm beginning to feel Nat was in the right and deserved to stay big.
Author's Response:
It looks like my work here is finished :P. But really, that,s what I'm trying to squeeze out of this thing. Sympathy, pity, etc. I want you guys to read a chapter and it feel right or wrong in terms of what should happen in the story instead of how I should fix my GUMS.
Chapter 5 won't be what you expect but it'll ease your troubled conscience a little.
Date: May 06 2013 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 4
Hmmm...
That was pretty good for fleshing out the character's backstories a bit more. Or at the very least, Katie's...
Considering that Katie apparently doesn't live with her sister and is now the bigger of the two I'm going to guess she's gonna take her new little sister along with her to her home-away from home yeah? ^_^;
After swiping any convenient wadds of cash lying about the house first of course ;)
Author's Response:
Who knows what'll happen now that the tables are turned and the situation in another's favor? Kate could possibly NOT be the cold-hearted bitch everyone's making her out to be. I guess you'll just have to wait until chapter 5.
Date: May 01 2013 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 3
When do their parents (and other people they know) come into this? They would notice her missing, perhaps shrunken, (straight away in the case of parents) and would be concerned. It's an interesting story, but I didn't feel it was very believable as niether girl really considered the implications of their actions. However, I do like the ending.
Author's Response:
Stubbornstain, I just wrote this up as a quick intro to writing. The plotline is nonexistent and this was really just 3 chapters of erotica. Believability is minimal because once more, I didn't even have a plotline. If it pleases you, I am writing up a story WITH a plotline. When I start it up, maybe you could comment on that?
[Report This]Date: April 29 2013 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 2
Like where this is going! I've been waiting a long time for a decent shrunken women story involving sisters, incest, insertion, feet etc, especially one where the younger sister shrinks the older and dominates!
I'd like to see a prequel maybe, explaining where/how Kate shrank, was it due to Natalie, was it because Kate was being mean to Natalie, was it instant or slow, was it with a shrink ray, or spell, or chemical etc!
Author's Response:
Honestly, I don't know where I'm taking this myself. It's probably on the same path as when I finished. I probably will continue this, but for now, I'll let it be.
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 3
great story. Kept me interested throughout
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
Ah, a swerve.
Well played.
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great new chapter, it sad that its the last one. Your first dtory is great. !0 stars all around for this one. Cannot wait to see your next works. BTW I hope you stick to the violent scenarios. Its my cup of tea and you have a nack for writing it.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2013 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was very good, and the sister on sister dynamic you have going is suprisingly erotic
Author's Response:
Hey, here it is! Thanks for the review and I'm glad you actually enjoy it, seems like many people do (Go Figure). I'll give you a review that's just as positive!
[Report This]Date: April 26 2013 2:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Please god more chapters
Date: April 26 2013 10:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
can't wait the next chapter!! =)
Date: April 26 2013 10:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story! Sometimes it's really refreshing to jump right into the action! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Oh my gosh! I got a review from Yougts?!?! When did I deserve this honor??? And he likes my story too! This is too much! (goes into a slight faint).
[Report This]Date: April 26 2013 6:15 AM Title: Chapter 2
Love the story, and what wrong using a toy like it supposed to be? Natalie has every right to do what she wants. Cannot wait to read how she treats her during school.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2013 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 2
Loving this story so far.
Author's Response:
It makes me feel just tingly inside when I see that you loved it for another chapter! Let's all hope the love connects to chapter 3, and 4, and so on and so on.
Date: April 25 2013 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awesome story so far! I hope we can see point of views from the older daughter trapped inside of her sisters panties! :D Keep up the good work! :D
Date: April 25 2013 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
great work!
continue, please! =)
Date: April 25 2013 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love it. Can't wait to read more. There is going to be more, isn't there?
Author's Response:
Yes, there is more.
[Report This]Date: April 25 2013 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story so far. love how you get into the meat. Some people build up momentum others go right to the nitty grity. Either of thos I like. I hate when people can't decide and just jumble stuff together. Great job though. Cannot wait for the next chapter.