Date: October 17 2013 5:36 PM Title: Unfair Fate
I have to admit this is the farthest I've got. mainly because I'm afraid to read the ending. I took a sneak peek so I can guess whats going to happen but because it's so different I'm afraid I'll either love it or be mildy surprised at the ending. If I love I'll never get a chance for this type of suspense again and if dont like it then well I still lose the suspense.
The same thing happened with Cayce's story. It's been almost ten years since i first started reading it and I still havent finished the last 5 chapters because I dont ever want it to end.
but so far you've done a great job up to this point in the story!
I completely understand and respect your decision. In fact I am honored by your choice, It makes me feel confident as an author to know that I could deliver a story so moving.
However I must inform you that I am considering the idea of giving this story a sequel, but that is a long way off from now. Even so I thought i'd give you a heads up.
Thanks again for your support Mr E.
Date: July 12 2013 9:23 AM Title: The Graduation Gift
Angela's organization sounds like every cadre of super-villains I've ever read about in comic books ("Magnet's Brotherhood of Mutants," for example):
"The so-called 'normal' humans have ruined this world. It's time for Homo superior to ascend!"
But, if mixed couples like Angela and Josh can get along with each other--maybe even truly love each other--the improvement of our world in your stories need not be a totally violent one.
Thanks for sharing all this food-for-thought with us. :-)
Thanks for reviewing again Carycomic and I'm glad you enjoyed the ending as well.
As for Angela's organization (which is actually part cult, part corporation) it is very powerful and our two heros, one of which is of considerably smaller size than the others will have to work hard to bring it down.
I look foward to your support in the next part of this story.
Date: July 07 2013 8:06 AM Title: Showdown: Priya Vs. Angela
Oooooh! A mysterious cliff-hanger? I love those!!
Thanks for reviewing again carycomic.
I took a good long look at the entire story and created a moral I feel will best sum up this story as well as guide it for its upcoming sequals.
And it is all thanks to you. because without your warning I would have never re-evaluated my work.
So thank you very much. I hope you enjoy the next chapter I really worked hard on it
Date: July 06 2013 9:19 PM Title: Showdown: Priya Vs. Angela
Interesting story. Hard to follow and wth a lot of unexpected twists at every turn, but still good. Keep it up.
Welcome back Ghost254 I'm glad you find my story enjoyable.
I have really worked to improve my writing and after this final chapter I feel everything will be a lot clearer
Date: July 06 2013 9:03 PM Title: Showdown: Priya Vs. Angela
Looking tremendously forward to it.
You AdamX are probably one of my best supporters.
Let me tell you as I am writing this I am putting the finishing touches on the final chapter. And god I am nervous. I hope this final chapter will be a sucess so that I can continue writting with these characters.
Date: July 06 2013 8:28 PM Title: Prologue
I like Angela the most. For varying reasons of course.
Thanks for reviewing again Dude.
Well Angela is likely to be the most well rounded of this stories characters I would say. Personally I think its only natural to like her considering the other girls are terrible in there own ways.
But I think I know why you like Angela in particular tee hee
Date: June 26 2013 10:24 AM Title: Unfair Fate
Hmmmmm! By this point, I think Josh is probably realizing that the opposite of under-achiever isn't necessarily being an over-achiever. That's it's possible (if rare) to become a plain old, reasonably contented regular achiever.
Interesting comment. I will take this into consideration.
I'm going to try my best to give this story a proper end so that the sequal can have a proper start
Date: June 10 2013 7:20 AM Title: Unfair Fate
I can't honestly say I enjoyed the ending. Because, there was no clear moral like at the end of a TWILIGHT ZONE: TOS episode. Unless, the moral was it sucked to be Josh. If so, he might as well have stayed normal-sized, because that was obvious from his introduction in chapter 1.
In short; a bit of a disappointing anti-climax.
This is a legitimate criticism and one that I am interested in fixing, but first I want to let you know that this chapter wasn't the ending.
That being said, you are right. There was no clear moral being presented. (as far as I could gather from re-reading the entire story.)
I had planned for the message to be something about friendship seeing as I mention it in almost every chapter, but I'm a little unsure of what I should say. The best message I can think of is "choose your friends wisely, as its possible they may not be your friends at all."
Maybe you can help me out Carycomic. If you have an idea for what the main moral of the story should be leave a review for me and I'll get back to you when I can.
Date: June 10 2013 7:09 AM Title: Are We Alone Kevin?
Heather seems to be more of a "Jacqueline Hyde." First, she beats the crap out of him. Now, she's nice???
Heather doesn't know that our main character is the same person from her high school. She, along with everyone else believes that Josh is dead and that he is now Kevin.
Her behavior would have been a lot different towards him if she was able to recognize him as Josh.
Date: June 09 2013 9:33 PM Title: Prologue
lol now that i saw gadgetmawombo's review he might like this story a little more than me lol.
now I know why Priya is such a bitch, but Angela remains a mystery to me. Im looking forward to whts nxt
Angela's motives are a lot different than Priya's I can tell you that. Mainly because
Priya never saw Josh as a person. she only pretended to be his friend when he was normal sized.
Angela on the other hand actually hade affection for Josh. For reasons I can't explain now.
Date: June 09 2013 9:26 PM Title: Unfair Fate
Me Me Me I follow this story every update. Shit I wished u posted more lol. I hate waiting for the good stories to update, but I still wait patiently.
Im incredibly interested to read whts next. hope u update soon.
ps. I 100% love reading this story
You have been one of my best supporters. Honestly without you and everyone else encouraging me I probably would have quit a long time ago. I would buy you a beer if I could. ;D
Date: June 09 2013 9:09 PM Title: Prologue
Dont think that nobody is interested cuz I am VERY interesting in this story...I WANNA KNOW WHY KEVIN/JOSH'S GENES ARE A THREAT, AND I WANNA KNOW NAO!!! *huff* *puff* *wheeze* Im sorry about that...Im done.
anyways I can't quite reveal that information yet, but rest assured it's going to show up either in an upcoming chapter or the sequal to this story.
Date: June 03 2013 10:20 PM Title: Are We Alone Kevin?
Given some stories dropping off this and Titan are my front runners for story of the year.
Wow thanks AdamX I didn't think my story was having that much of an impact. You are one of my best supporters and this compliment coming from you means a lot.
Date: April 27 2013 7:39 PM Title: To Worship A Friend
The internal dialogue was a tad prolonged. But, better than another overdose of vicarious foot odor! ;-)
The internal dialogue should be a little more spread out in future chapters. I lengthened the internal dialogue because that part was intended as an erotic scene and I have a tendency to rely on dialogue tags in order to add details. Sorry if it got a little wordy.
You'd be happy to know that the next few chapters (which are also the last chapters until the sequel comes). Will be more plot and less content oriented.
Date: April 26 2013 11:48 PM Title: To Worship A Friend
Right, this was a really great chapter. I liked the internal conflict raging on in his mind between what seemed like Josh and Kevin.
It reminded me of Lord Of The Rings with Gollum and Smeagol.
I think I'm going to have that little voice on the inside of his head carry through the entire story It seems to really add to his character.
Date: April 26 2013 10:29 PM Title: To Worship A Friend
I love Paige.
Then you would be happy to know that, 1) Paige is going to be a major character. and 2) Paige is getting her own story, but its going to be when she is in high school so Idk if you would still like that.