Date: December 05 2012 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
I don't see exactly what you mean concerning the ages of the characters with this story. I understand that some people are opponent to an erotica where the characters are 13 and 18 but the first 2 stories in the Blackmail series have Carly at 14 and Jack at 17 as you know (of course). Besides while I'm not sure if there are rules on this website against this but if there are not it's your story so I feel you should write what you want to write about. If that means erotic stuff in this story's setting then I would support you.
Author's Response:
i certainly appreciate your support and the review. in reality, from the beginning i had no plans to include explicit sexual content in the story; i think that people were more off-put by the fact that there was foot interaction in a story on a site that often caters to foot fetishists, making it at least somewhat sexual in nature. the age thing hadn't much occurred to me until recently, and it's something i'm going to be reconsidering in future installments of stories
[Report This]Date: December 04 2012 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
Things definitely picked up in this chapter. I'm a big fan of this scenario, and I like the parellels it can draw to the The Club chapter.
Also if I could cast my vote to a series to continue, it would have been the Love Games, but sadly that was concluded in the most spectacular ending ever. It's hard to pick a favorite because you have so many kinky stories but maybe there's a hidden trial in there that Amanda may have been ommitted. :P
My plan B vote is for MTO2: The Club, and maybe Susan takes things a bit too far and stomps his balls too hard...
Anyway, I'm always happy to see what you've concocted in every new chapter you upload. And don't concern yourself with nay sayers, you've made dedicated fans in the darkest of places!
Keep on rockin'
Author's Response:
thanks much for the review/rating! i enjoyed writing love games, but the impression i got from readers was that the violence was a tad much, so i curttailed that one a little sooner, although it could've certainly gone on if there was interest; i had plenty of ideas. i'm not quite sure what more I could specifically do with MTO2 since i consider it finished, although i do have plans for the 5th one that would see the return of several characters (and possibly Susan)
Date: December 04 2012 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
I'm sorry to hear that this story isn't getting as much positive comments as you would like because this is my favorite story you've writtern outside of the "A Little Blackmail" series and I was hoping for it to be quite lengthy. I really like the dialog of chapter 4 and I wish you would write like that more often.
Author's Response:
thanks for reading and reviewing. part of the desire to move onward sooner rather than later for this story is just the iffy subject matter considering the ages of the characters that some readers have, but soon i'll bring it back several years later on in the timeline to avoid controversy, so to speak. i'm not entirely sure what it is you mean by "like that" of the dialogue in chapter 4
[Report This]Date: December 03 2012 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
You have 12 reviews and five stars and you think this story isn't well liked?? How could it be anymore liked? Is there a sixth star hiding somewhere?
I love the power reversal in this story and the fact that you utilize exposition but don't let it get in the way of the plot. Heck I logged on just to rate this thing and I almost never log on. What does that tell you?
Moreover, I love that someone has finally done an in-shoe sports related story. This is a personal favorite of mine and so help me, jack, if you quit on us now I will never forgive you :-P
Author's Response:
thanks for logging on for the review; i'm glad you've enjoyed it thus far! the in-shoe sports concept is a fun one for me too, although the way things are going it may need to be delayed until a different story since i'm trying to wrap this one soon. i intend to bring that concept back later on in the series though since it is a favorite of mine as well.
Date: December 03 2012 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
I do like the way you describe the way he's forced to worship his sisters feet, I like all the detail, especially the color and shape of her toes
Author's Response:
thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response:
thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: December 03 2012 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
I'm liking it. Your writing is always great and I love the dynamics in the family: Poor abused Scott and his Mother that is obviously a bit out there, his sister now getting into the act. Your story so take it in the direction you feel the need to, but I'm enjoying immensely!
Author's Response:
thanks for the rating/review! definitely a major factor of this one for me to was to "pass on" the mantle of darkly whacky family dynamics from mother to daughter, although certainly the mother isn't done with her fun by a long shot
Date: December 03 2012 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
Imho the story is just as good s the previous episodes, both in the story itself and how it's written. 'nuff said.
Re the sister thing, I'm quite perplexed.
Myself, I don't like the idea -- it's the very reason why I din't read the blackmail series, and by "didn't read" I don't mean "read without commenting", or "read and complained afterwards": I just din't want to read it, so I didn't.
Yet this story is not really disturbing to me(*): they haven't done anything disgusting, you wrote they wouldn't (I trust you on that!), and I can't really imagine the story making any sense using a neighbor/friend/schoolmate/whatever(*), at the _very_ least because the beginning would become absurd; and as long as the story is good enough that
- I don't know what's going to happen next ("it wasn't Maggie")
- Reading it N times is always a pleasure
I guess I can just stay focused on what's happening rather than who Maggie is.
But maybe it's just me.
PS
When you finish this story and move to something else, please consider moving to "Mommy's Time-out 5".
(*) other than the "big/little brother", but nvm
(**) Where's his girlfriend from the 1st episode btw?
Author's Response:
I may take a break from the series before moving onto the 5th iteration, but it'll definitely be back since the short episodes don't take long to write, and as it happens my plan was to bring his girlfriend back from the first story to participate in the fun again. thanks for reviewing/sharing your thoughts