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Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2012 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 2

Great story an I hope to see it continued

aaron

Reviewer: Afroking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2012 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 2

 

I really like the story and im intrested in all the different Categories that u have. Hope we get to see some feet soon.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2012 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 2

Here:Amber has always been stuck in the castle

You mean "had"

Also, you mean Joy's name before she has a chance to tell the reader herself. It would be better to refer to her as "she" until she says her name.

Here:  scarred you.

You means "scared". Scarred means to have scars.

The story is alright so far, so I look forward to seeing more.



Author's Response:

Sorry about the errors, and thank you for pointing them out.

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