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Reviewer: soniti54 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2012 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

Oh, as an added note, you should probably up the rating, it's not quite "G" material lol

Author's Response:

I fixed the rating. Indeed, I forgot to change it, thanks for telling me.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2012 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

A good start I think. Just remember to put the speech on separate lines to the description.

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