Date: March 24 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Make another one except make it so girl shrinks boy on the boys permission and takes him home plays gentely with him and if you didn't have mouth play in this or body exploration do it in this one plz
Author's Response: I'm back and I have an idea for a story for you. A little short story, just while I work on my other ones. For those others reading this, I will continue Jarret Johnson. But for the meantime, I have another story for all you to read. Uhpoop, would you mind if I have a bit of violence in this story? It will be as you requested, with the mouth play and body exploration, but I have a solid idea for this story. I'll be publishing it very soon, so comment any specific requests for this story. Thank you for your time. -Julian
Date: September 13 2013 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 4
Not bad for a first story. There is a lot of action which I like.
If I could make one suggestion it is that you put something after the dialogue to tell us who is speaking.
For example if you have a line like...
"Oh. Your turn Julissa."
make sure to add something like "said Valerie" or something to tell the reader who is speaking at any given time.
Date: October 03 2012 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 6
At first, I thought he was having a nightmare. But, now, he'll feel like he's having a wonderful dream! The only thing that puzzles me is how these juvennile delinquettes are going to explain the sleep-gassing of Julian's mother, in a hospital room, with a window broken from the inside?
Author's Response: Hell if I know! Jk, I will explain that in a later chapter..... Or will I?
Date: September 29 2012 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 4
OK! So, these three are school rivals of Melony's. Perhaps, she's even bullied them, more than once! I initially thought they were fellow members of the quintet from chapter one, who got impatient waiting for their turn.
Sorry; my bad!