[Report This]Date: September 19 2012 6:48 PM Title: Sleeping Arrangements
This chapter would make a great love song: "Frankie and Liza were sweethearts. He swore he'd be true to the end!"
Date: September 17 2012 1:25 PM Title: Bitter Sweet Dreams
For a second I though the dream was actually real but then he woke up. Maddison is rather strange, but one of the more enjoyable characters on this site. There was a story somewhat similar to this (but not too similar), well one of the main characters anyway (because they fall in love with another character), I read a while ago, about a human and his friend who are captured and sold to giants. I was looking for it but it seems to have been removed, because I could have sworn I'd added to my favourites.
Author's Response:
I recall reading a few stories with that kind of set up. And I feel ya, some great stories I read a long time ago I wish I had favorited or saved because I can't find some of them now.
Date: September 17 2012 1:11 PM Title: Sleeping Arrangements
For proofreading I use a piece of software known as "Speakonia". It reads out loud what you copy or type into it. However looking over some of my older pieces I have noticed a few mistakes so I guess it's also good to come back to a piece of writing after a while. I know I tend to notice some things which I feel aren't good enough so I often change parts of a chapter. I'm glad I added this story to my favourites though.
Although here:
It was a king gesture
Kind?
[Report This]Date: September 14 2012 11:31 AM Title: Water Games
Here:
attempt to rest, as I found myself as I found myself
You repeat yourself. I think I will add this story to my favourites.
Author's Response:
Thanks for pointing that out, corrected it. Even after pre-reading it and looking out for spelling erros I may not catch everything.
Date: September 14 2012 11:27 AM Title: Bath Time
Showever - bath, same thing I guess. Madison can be a very nice person and I do like her peronality. I feel it's been well thought through.
Date: September 14 2012 11:18 AM Title: Supper Time
Cool; bath time. This should be good. I really like the idea. Given recent events, I'm assuming he will be in the bath with her rather than in the sink. I could be wrong though.
Date: September 14 2012 11:13 AM Title: Testing the Waters
Tantalizing. I'm sure Madison is pretty. I don't think I've bee able to properly vizualize the characeters yet, but your description of the surroundings is largely good.
Date: September 14 2012 11:09 AM Title: Older Friend
Here:
Maddison has a conscious
I think you mean conscience.
I'm sure Madison will love him. Franky is a decent person.
Date: September 14 2012 11:02 AM Title: Alone at Last
I knew she wouldn't be gone for long....but wait, this is a new face. Hmmm....her friend maybe? I must find out!
Date: September 14 2012 11:00 AM Title: TLC
Interesting. I think it would be unwise to go for the device as that would make the situation worse if it does't work out. I think her leaving could be a test for him, a trick maybe.
Date: September 14 2012 10:54 AM Title: Game Time
Here:
she wanted to play I had to accept it ( although something tells me I don't have a choice)
I feel you've repeated yourself.
and here:
" Yay! Maddison gleefully
You're missing a speech mark.
At risk of overanalyzing your story, it almost sounds like Madison has a split personality or maybe it was all part of her plan all along. Also, this is just the story I needed to welcome myself back the site. I've been inactive for a while and it seems I've been missing out on good things. Onwards!
Date: September 14 2012 10:45 AM Title: Meet and Greet
This story is actually quite amazing. I really like the characters. Not realy much else I can say, other than: "onwards, to the next chapter!"
Date: September 14 2012 10:34 AM Title: Humble Beginnings
It's a good start though the introduction sounded like it was from a TV show or movie for some reason. I think it's the "this is my stort kind of start". I'm still going to give your story a try becaue I think it has potential and I noted it has the maxiumum rating.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2012 10:13 AM Title: Water Games
this girl has no remorse lol.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2012 8:02 AM Title: Water Games
Elementary, my dear Edexdexx! Elementary.
Seriously, though. Maddison definitely has some issues. I mean; from her viewpoint, she might be having harmless fun. But, to Our Hero, at his present size? That's undeniably open to dispute.
Author's Response:
Indeed she does. Franky better stay strong to keep up his charade.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2012 10:58 AM Title: Bath Time
Depends on whether or not the shower's cold. ;-)
[Report This]Date: September 07 2012 10:53 AM Title: Supper Time
But, is she going to bathe him in the sink, or...elsewhere?
[Report This]Date: September 07 2012 10:48 AM Title: Testing the Waters
No problem, dude! Sometimes, I'm lucky enough to have _three_ updated stories on the front page of "Most Recent." Other times, it can take me up to three or four weeks (minimum) to update just one! But, thanks for the advance warning. And, I'll see you at the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: September 06 2012 2:32 PM Title: Older Friend
In answer to "your" question: probably quite farther than he anticipates. A gorgeous, naked, raven-haired brunette? Two inches taller than me (if I were the shrunken one)? Oh, yeah! My brain's judgement center would definitely be way south of the border.
;-)
[Report This]Date: September 06 2012 2:30 PM Title: Older Friend
I like this plan it could work. great work