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Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26 2012 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 2

This is really good. My favorite kinds of stories are the ones that combine the fetish with fantasy elements and actual plot and character work. Ones that can stand on their own as a story, as well as being sexy.

I love the details about the Calculi, especially the "light of the soul" and the description of their language. Very cool. I was able to picture them well.

Not sure how I feel about the prologue. It looks like things will turn a bit dark and the suspense over Xi's fate is gone. Overall though, this is a very strong start.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the compliment.  My hope is that in this story I am able to create very realistic characters that the readers are able to connect with.  I was debating on whether to add the details of Xi's fate in the prologue or not, but then I decided it would be more of an entralling story if I gave away one secret just so that you can observe how things spiral out of control from the beginning.  Don't worry, though, I am going to add a lot more characters as the story progresses.

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