Date: September 15 2013 10:21 PM Title: The Closing Door
The size difference between both characters has gotta be pretty extreme by this point. I'm guessing Nick is around 2 feet tall or less, while Michelle is around 8 feet tall (maybe more). Maybe you can clarify on what their exact heights are in the next chapter.
I like how you show Michelle is somewhat internally conflicted on what she is doing and not just plain cruel (at least not entirely). Keeps the reader guessing. Looking forward to where things are going to go from there.
Author's Response:
Hmm, you're right, I haven't done the best job making their heights clear lately. She grows only a touch taller each time, with most of the growth being 'horizontal' development instead. She's "only" about 6'11" now (though, e.g., with her 8" heels on a couple chapters ago she was more like 7'6"). And Nick's about 2'6" after this last chapter. I'll try to work this organically into the next chapter somehow though.
Thanks -- the internal conflict bit was a last-minute addition I just added, kinda based on reader feedback in part, so we'll see how it plays out from here :).