Reviewer: Jim1989 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04 2013 10:56 PM Title: Michelle's Room (part 2)

I'm kind of torn about this story now.  The writing is very detailed and suspenseful and the plot still has that sense of unpredictability and keeping the reader constantly guessing.  For that reason, I will most likely continue reading this story just to see how everything pans out in the end.

Having said that, I'm kind of sad to see that Nick has now fully given into carnal, animalistic instinct.  I had a feeling that was probably Michelle's endgame, though seeing it happen - and to see that Nick wants it to happen by this point - makes my stomach a bit uneasy.  I'm also curious how far this story is from the conclusion.  From a logical standpoint, Michelle has pretty much gotten all she wants out of Nick (except for maybe a few more inches or even a foot out of him).  He's physically and mentally a small child or toddler by this point, so he's going to put up little or no resistance to Michelle's commands.  

It does seem like Michelle has also taken that darker route like I guessed last time.  I don't know if Michelle might do a last-minute switch in personality at the story's end and have some degree of sympathy for Nick (I'd like that but I won't hold my breath on it).  She could easily kill Nick and probably find a way to cover her tracks so that nobody would ever be able to pin his death onto her (given her level of intelligence).  Then the story would pretty much be over by that point.  

Again, I'm hoping for something not completely depressing for Nick and possibly a bit unexpected at the end; but as always, it's your story and you decide how it ends.  Nick may very well be a slave for the rest of his life and Michelle may become a power-hungry manipulator.  Maybe neither of those things.  Either way, I still intend to keep up with this story, mainly out of great curiosity.

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 5:56 AM Title: Michelle's Room (part 2)

Very long brain teaser chapter.

I love it, can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

Yeah, I couldn't believe how long this whole 'scene' got (stretched into 3 chapters).  It's longer than most whole stories :O