Date: May 18 2014 6:02 AM Title: Underfoot and Out-of-Mind
"you're lucky to me my daughter" :)
More seriously: reading slowly & side-by-side may be slow, especially with real life going on in parallel, but it's very rewarding.
And most of the changes are very effective (one for all: her mom's refusal to go to the hospital looks way better now; and having read this chapter, the part about her mom "going easy" on her makes more sense).
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for pointing that out. It's fixed now. :)
Date: September 23 2012 9:35 PM Title: Underfoot and Out-of-Mind
Every so often an incredible story comes along.
Well, this is it.
I love how you phrase these things, truly a masterwork of humiliation... And all that good (bad?) stuff.
You should elaborate a little bit more about the world, you know? What shrinkers are exactly, you're not so clear.
Good stuff, though, really good stuff.
Date: September 17 2012 8:16 PM Title: Underfoot and Out-of-Mind
This is so sad. It's... it's inhumane! (But you are a great writer.)
[Report This]Date: July 07 2012 8:49 PM Title: Underfoot and Out-of-Mind
GREAT STORY
Author's Response:
Thanks!