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Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 25 2011 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 2: The Break-up

I loved the cruelty of Carly making Jack pay for someone else's crimes against her. The last thing you had her do in this chapter was truly vicious. I loved it.

Dave

Reviewer: sexyhunter22 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 24 2011 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

I love your series and i hope you continue. I would love to see him go on a date with her or used as a sex toy during there date. Maybe go to prom with her. And her friends use him. Please continue.



Author's Response:

thanks. don't hold your breath for the sex toy part, i'm not much into that, but i hope you continue to like the story

Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 20 2011 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 2: The Break-up

Great story. Well crafted. I love your detailed descriptions of what is going through her mind. She's psychotic and crazy enough to do anything to Jack - the messier and sexier, the better...

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 18 2011 8:26 AM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

What a great concept. I love the idea of knowing what Carly feels when she tortures and humiliates Jack. Just from the way you describe the high she gets when she even thinks about torturing him is incredible. I think alnost anyone would do it if they could feel that good. Great chapter.

Dave  



Author's Response:

thanks, the goal was definitely to get you to understand where she's coming from

Reviewer: Jurdzi Signed [Report This]
Date: December 18 2011 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

im happy u decided to continue with this great series i hope u r gonna write some stories about actions in school like promoton night or some parties and carl will take jake with her. it would be interesting to imagine it. Anyway great job. Jurdzi

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: December 18 2011 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

This is amazing!  An idea i've toyed with myself for awhile now.  SM as a drug.  it's the perfect way!

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 17 2011 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

i love this series.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17 2011 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

I really enjoyed this journey into her mind.

 

You're antagonist always have such vivid changes in mood and behavior that it is rather nice to see into one of their minds during said processes.

Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 17 2011 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: Carly's Daydreams

Hey, it's great to see you back here! You're a prolific producer of oustanding material. No one can go at the pace you were going indefinitely. And, if anyone deserves to take a break or even reitre, it's you.  That said, I completely agree with this in-between, short story approach.  It's much more manageable and allows you to devle immediately into a scene without having to produce the necessary characterization and scenery, so to speak.  I loved getting a glimpse into Carly's head.  I've left a few stories unfinished and probably will never get around to finishing them.  My honest advice would be to stream-line A Little Blackmail 3 and go with the ending you had orignally planned.  I wish I had done this with a story of mine years ago, called, "Daddy's Fatal Attracton."  If you don't think you'll ever finish the third and final chapter of this brother/sister epic, could you say how you planned to end it?  Take care and do what you feel like doing. We are always happy to see anything you write.



Author's Response:

i'm not going to streamline it, i know how i want it to end, so there's no need to worry there. there's a reasonable chance that i will finish it at some point, too, so i'll leave that unsaid for now. if i ever do get too sick of it to finish, though, i'll at least toss up a quick explanation of how i wanted to end it. thanks for the review

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