I'm a huge fan of the Jonathan Swift Universe (if you couldn't tell by my writings). I have visited this story on many occasions because there are some scenes and scenarios that I find--not only fascinating--but incredibly hot. My beef with the story is that you gloss over details and move on to other actions too quickly. My advice would be to slow down. You know the old writing adage, “show, don’t tell”. In this story, you are telling me what is happening. You are telling me what the characters are saying. And you are telling me what the character’s inclinations are outright.

Don’t get me wrong, I’m loving this story and eager to read more. I’m just offering some advice to make it even better. Please continue the story whenever you get a chance!

By the way, have you seen my interactive story that takes place in the same universe? I tried sending you a PM, but this site is so fucking broken, ugh.

Interesting developments. If that size supremacist party ever manages to come to power they would find a great Quisling in Stacy. She could be propped up as a puppet ruler over the Liliputians and order them to do the bidding of the Brobdingnagans. Of course, she would be a slave herself, but she would have it cushier than the rest.

What could Liliputians do as slaves? I guess they could be useful in the semiconducter industry for obvious reasons. But you know what would be really cool? Imagine if Jessie or Skye ordered them to build an entire city inside of her bra or panties. Then she could literally wear an entire city against her most delicate parts. You wrote in a previous chapter that the Liliputians are notorious breeders, so imagine all it might take is a sample of a few hundred and then within a few months they could multiple into a few million. The way that could work is if they reached maturity within a very short period of time. They could have the same lifespan as humans or Brobs, but let's say they go from infants to adults in like a day or something like that, so that way within a day they could breed and create a new batch or something.

I dunno... I'm just brainstorming. Keep up the good work. I'm sorry that your recent chapters didn't get any feedback. Being that it is/was the holidays that probably had a lot to do with it. Hope it doesn't discourage you from writing more.

Great story.
But there could have been a little more from the people perspective in the city in chapter 5. Mostly because I like the doomed thoughts of the ones that are going to be crushed.

great story. i will be reading more if you choose to post although the mega/micro isnt my thing i really enjoyed reading this tale.

aaron