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Reviewer: GiantessLover122 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: August 14 2015 9:10 AM Title: Chapter 1

Gotta agree with @MrNoName637 and @Jacksmith in this one.

Reviewer: MutantMane Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26 2013 9:36 AM Title: Chapter 1

The paragraphs are way too choppy. You end words in the middle and begin them on the next paragraph. Think you can fix that?

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: November 23 2011 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 1

don't want to be harsh either, but i'm going to have to agree and say that this almost seems like a joke. are you aware of conventional english grammar and whatnot? there's a tool on the site to help you out if you're not.  keep trying.

Reviewer: MrNoName637 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: November 01 2011 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 1

This story seems like it was written entirely while high. Honestly, have you ever written anything before? I'm usually not this harsh, but this is just awful.

Author's Response:

really? I liked my plot thought it was smart and no first time

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 01 2011 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

The way I see it is each paragraph should focus on one idea and the next paragraph tackles a different idea. I reccomend having a look at the writing tools section of the site.



Author's Response:

yeah I wanted it to focuse on each group of caritores

 

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31 2011 10:24 AM Title: Chapter 1

Can you please split your story into paragraphs. It would make much easier for people to read. At the moment it looks very daunting.



Author's Response:

I kind of don't know how dude?

 

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