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Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 77: Strip Tease

I'm glad to see an update to this story. Peter is in pretty big trouble still, as expected. Though personally I think he has a better chance of survival with Mandy than out in the wilderness, where he wouldn't know the way home, would take like a month to get there even if he did, and would probably be eaten by animal within hours anyway.

I wonder what Mandy's play with the camera is. If she plans on keeping him forever, she can't share those pictures with anyone. Though, I wouldn't be surprised if when he does finally get rescued, Sharon somehow gets ahold of the pictures.



Author's Response: You’re right about his survival odds, and this is something Peter is steadily realizing as well. Also a good thought about the camera, and it just may be addressed at some point.

Reviewer: Olo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 8:29 AM Title: Chapter 77: Strip Tease

I'm less confident than before about my ability to predict where this is going, but the humiliation in this chapter is so exquisite (and potentially public) that I cannot help but suspect that Mandy got some coaching.

Sharon share alike....

(Love this chapter. That photo is going to haunt Peter for decades, no matter how this turns out.)



Author's Response: Glad to hear I can still surprise with this one. It does seem like Mandy’s had some advice at some point.

Reviewer: Gabbarjan Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

Ooooooh at long last .I like the this story alot no sex talk and all.i liked the fairy one too.hey why don't u introduce a   real fairy itself to the story

 



Author's Response: Glad you like it. It might be a bit jarring to introduce an outright fantasy element, however.

Reviewer: Gabbarjan Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

Ooooooh at long last .I like the this story alot no sex talk and all.i liked the fairy one too.hey why don't u introduce a   real fairy itself to the story

 

Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2018 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

Welcome back... as jacksmith the author I mean. Peter as fairy It would been funny if he's not in such bad situation. Good chapter!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response: Thanks very much. I plan to post at least one more chapter of this soon.

Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2018 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

Welcome back... as jacksmith the author I mean. Peter as fairy It would been funny if he's not in such bad situation. Good chapter!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: SHREK Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 18 2017 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 69: Toe Lie

God I love Ms. Watson. She's just so...hot.

Although, if she did anything along the lines of what she does in here (blackmail and extortion) in real life, it would be far less hot.

Author's Response:

Thanks. We just might spend some more time with her later in the story

Reviewer: littlewarrior Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2017 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 32: Popped Question

Well, of course Sharon has to make sure Peter "knows the score". But she'll need to stay creative if she wants to keep playing on his insecurities. And I have every confidence in her.

"the siren’s irises threatened to spin from her sclera as poisoned shuriken..."

Author's Response:

Sharon's got a very large playbook on hand

Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2017 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

that's more evil and twister than Mandy's phone trap: making him beg to take him back ! good chapter!!!!



Author's Response:

She always has something new

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: September 27 2017 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 76: False Hope

People say it sounds too good to be true. It's not good! There's no way he survive a night alone in the forest, let alone find his way back home. He's going to have to give into defeat and go back with her, willingly.

 

And when she said she couldn't use him as a friend, but as the next best thing, I thought it was going to be something kinky, like sex toy.

 

Great chapter though.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 27 2017 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 76: False Hope

Heh! This sounds too good to be true.

Author's Response:

Most things are

Reviewer: Olo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 26 2017 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 76: False Hope

He's gonna hafta apologize and ask to see the movie with her.  And he has to mean it.



Author's Response:

At this point, good acting may or may not even make a difference

Reviewer: Nodqfan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 26 2017 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 76: False Hope

You know I actually feel bad for Mandy these last few chapters. I think all she wanted was a true friend and really considered Peter that friend. I hope that they can reconcile in the future.



Author's Response:

While Mandy's definitely one of the antagonists, I do hope some readers will be able to acknowledge, as Peter has to some degree, that she's somewhat of a tragic result rather than outright villain

Reviewer: giantessfan9 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 06 2017 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 75: Escape Plan

Another great chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 04 2017 9:54 AM Title: Chapter 75: Escape Plan

Hopefully, the day will be saved before Peter sees what that "next best thing" is. :-(

Author's Response:

We'll wait and see ;)

Reviewer: Olo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04 2017 9:19 AM Title: Chapter 75: Escape Plan

So Mandy's clever enough to set up tests to see if Peter is trustworthy, but she's surprised when Peter turns out to be as fragile as Sparky. What a messed-up kid.

The wrenching thing here is that Peter's best option is probably to play up his helplessness, perhaps even exaggerate his injuries.  I just hope his internal-Erica monologue won't prevent him from seizing the only way to manipulate Mandy.  Even if it works, he'll feel like a deceiver.  (Bonus self-doubt: he'll worry that no matter what he achieves later, he'll always be tempted to fall back into "wounded bird" mode.)



Author's Response:

Mandy's all about unwinnable scenarios that she may not even acknowledge as unwinnable herself.

Reviewer: giantessfan9 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2017 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 74: Boy Toy

This story is great. I'm glad you're still working on it. 



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 26 2017 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 74: Boy Toy

Who would set up a YouTube channel for such shenanigans! :)

Rather than race for the phone, Peter should be focusing on how to talk Mandy into a less abusive 'game'. The girl seems willing to listen to suggestions. Peter's goal at this point should be survival, not escape. The latter will happen naturally once enough time passes (assuming he's still alive).



Author's Response:

What you're suggesting is definitely what Peter's sister would be screaming at him to do if she could. The real question is whether Peter can resist his inclination to take matters into his own hands.

Reviewer: Olo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2017 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 74: Boy Toy

My favorite thing about petplay is the intrinsic humiliation.  Even Lisa would have to stifle a giggle at the sight of Peter in a hamster ball.  I doubt Mandy is deliberately trying to humiliate Peter, but indifference to others' dignity is only one of her many social failings.  Good thing she's not interested in setting up a YouTube channel.



Author's Response:

This is a concept I enjoy too, so it seemed like the fitting place to use it here. You're right that not every thing Mandy does is pure tactical humiliation; she works a lot on impulse.

Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2017 9:35 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

Let's bet on Peter's chances for reaching the phone and call for help... I'm kidding we all know he will caught by Mandy before that haha



Author's Response:

Hey, who knows, surprises happen sometimes... ;)

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