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Reviewer: Binary_Prophet Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2012 5:52 PM Title: Epilogue: Six Months Later

Wow, I'm stunned you were manage to cap this with a happy ending. :) I would have never though with how absolute Carly's control was. I admire your control as a writer! :)

Hope to see more from you. I especially love your SW scenes. Keep writing!



Author's Response:

thanks. i always enjoy the fun spin that SW put on things, so i'll definitely try one again sometime

Reviewer: The Darkness Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31 2012 12:46 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

Beutiful justice!

Reviewer: socksarecool Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2012 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

You're an amazing writer. This was the best story I have read on this site. :)

 



Author's Response:

thanks!

Reviewer: Small_but_firm Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2012 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

A fitting end, if you'll pardon the pun.

Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30 2012 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

You did a beyond belief awesome job with this entire series. You should be proud of how talented you are and for producing such a profound story, one that will be treasured forever by the GTS community.  My advice is that after the epilogue, you leave this story be. There is no reason to re-vist things, as you wove a fantastic ending. Anything more would simply be overkill and exploitive, like so many unnecessary Hollywood sequels. 

I'm hoping to see you try your hand again at a mother/son foot story, as you did a great job with that one. If you do one, I'd love to see you take it a down an even darker road. Keep up your great work!



Author's Response:

you probably know by now I very rarely go down the "dark" road, but I enjoy that particular genre as well, so I may try my hand at it again someday

Reviewer: hotoh34 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2012 11:35 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Very good ending. Would like to have seen a happy ending for carly, i would love to see an alternative ending in which sophie never entered the room.



Author's Response:

Honestly, if you really want an "alternate ending" where Carly gets a happy conclusion, you could sort of just pretend like the story ended at Chapter 29 :P thanks for the comment!

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2012 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

Your writing is so dark.  Have you read much Conrad?  

I have much enjoyed Jack's mental journey along with his physical journey.  It's so complex, you pathologize these characters, it's wonderful.

I'm really hoping you decide to take a stab at what Jack's freedom could be, after being Carly's drawer creature for five years.

 



Author's Response:

depending on the kinds of reviews/emails I get, I may revisit Jack in a follow-up story sometime in the future

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2012 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

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Wow, well I'm not surprised how Sophie acted Jack pulled a bit of a 360 towards the end there.

Regardless of what happens I am glad the world got to see Carly in all her glory as she was without a doubt one of the best writen characters I've ever read.

Hats off to you god sir and keep up the good work on your other tales.



Author's Response:

thank you for reading!

Reviewer: Vord Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

Maybe you can end by having Carly be Chloe's pet or something, anyway I really hope you'll continue the story at some point in the near future. Everyone loves this series.



Author's Response:

it does seem like that would be justified, doesn't it? :P  we'll just have to wait and see in the epilogue

Reviewer: Maximus Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Not the ending I was hoping for but an epic story none the less. I personally think you should have ended it after Carely finally broke Jack, it just seemed the more natural destination as that is what the 5 years were focused on. The ending that you scripted was just a little too hollywood, hero comes bursting through the door and saves the day. But, like said, still an epic story and excellently crafted. You are a very good writer. 



Author's Response:

a perfectly acceptable critique. i knew i wasn't going to be able to please everyone with the ending i chose. if you really do prefer Jack being totally broken by Carly though, you can just pretend that the story ended with Chapter 29. thanks for reading!

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

This series is fucking amazing, man.  Well done and I cant believe its over!  This whole story and series that we've been reading over the past year has been extremely well put together. 

Personally, this ALB series if combined into one long story, easily ranks among my top 5 all time favorite stories, which is coming up on almost 10 years that I've been into this fantasy.  The way that you've written this story puts you right up there alongside the best, in my book.  From how you incorporate character thoughts, to the way you build the intensity of the plot, its just amazing.  I've only seen a few other writers who have written stories as well as what you have, ever.  So please, do everyone a favor and keep writing, whether you do it professionally or just on the side, dont waste the skills you have.



Author's Response:

wow, very high praise; thank you so much. i hope you continue to enjoy reading what i upload

Reviewer: Javert Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

Brilliant, as usual.



Author's Response:

thank you sir

Reviewer: horatio Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

Absolutely great. Thanks for keeping it up such a long time, can't wait to read the epilogue :)



Author's Response:

thanks for the review. the epilogue will appear soon

Reviewer: tavneyht Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

I actually had to make an account just to tell u..... This was..... Omg..... This was a great series a great ending and ..... I can't believe it's over plse accept my complement tht u r the best this was so well written and I'm happy to say I was a part of it as was everyone who read along. Thnx!!

Author's Response:

well, thank you very much, i appreciate that you felt compelled to create an account just for this story. i hope you continue to enjoy what you see

Reviewer: jojomojo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

besst auther in the world I hope you make more stories

Author's Response:

i shall indeed make more stories

Reviewer: Mars Frog Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 31: Carly's Last Game

*claps* Excellent! Muy excellente! An excellent ending that had a little bit of everything, wonderfully detailed. :)

I think my favorite part out of all of this though, was Jack's final confrontation with his fallen sister. He didn't let himself become a merciless brute, he wanted to be better than his sister, and he won that battle. Of course, she definitely had that punch coming. ;)

Can't wait to see this epilogue~

 



Author's Response:

it means a lot that you enjoyed that final confrontation, it was important to me to tie off their destructive relationship in a fitting way. thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: jojomojo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 30: A New Life Begins

I please ask that you that you continue

Author's Response:

very soon

Reviewer: Maximus Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20 2012 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Uh oh, been 17 days since the last update, has anyone been in contact with Jack? He hasn't even responded to the reviews which is very unusual. Hope this one doesn't get left in limbo, I created an account just to comment on it! If any writer deserves a break it's Jack, the way he generated chapters was ridiculous, just hope this one doesn't fall into the bottomless pit of unfinished stories, it's too good to be left incomplete. 

Oh well, if this is the end, I'm just going to pretend the last scene didn't happen, i could live with that ending :D



Author's Response:

thanks for your patience. i'm more or less back, and i intend on finishing the story soon as it was intended originally.

Reviewer: Javert Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 11 2012 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Ha, I'll admit some impatience as well, but please, enjoy your well-deserved break.  Take as much time as you need!  We'll all still be here when you grind out your next brilliant chapter!  :D



Author's Response:

thank you. the break was definitely needed, trust me. i hope you enjoy what's to come

Reviewer: Alakazam Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11 2012 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

UGG when does the next chapter come out?

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