Date: February 06 2012 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
First review. I've followed this series since you started it. The subject matter generally isn't my interest in the least (I much prefer gentle content, and the few times I've enjoyed...less than gentle content is when the victim has done something to deserve that kind of treatment), but your writing is good enough to make them worth a read regardless of that. That said:
I came into this chapter expecting Chloe to be generally unhelpful (though I was certainly hoping otherwise). While it did meet that expectation, I was also expecting/hoping Chloe to be less...malicious in her attitude. I "get" the pet thing, but she does seem to have Carly's mean streak in her, which is where I have issues. I was hoping Chloe would be nicer to more thoroughly showcase that there is something horribly wrong with Carly as a person, to the point where even a girl Chloe's age is more empathetic.
Naturally, I can only comment on events you've written so far and you may mean to go into this later. Just felt compelled to share my thoughts.
Author's Response:
thanks for sharing your thoughts. basically, the point of chloe being less than helpful was to have a kind of ironic contrast: jack was afraid of sophie at first because he remembered her being snobby years before, but she ended up helping him, and with chloe he had hope that her cute streak would mean she would help him out, which proved to be wrong. while i can't promise chloe is going to turn over a new leaf, i will say that in the coming chapters i attempt to highlight a bit more the differences between chloe and carly, and just why one or the other is better. and don't worry, there will be more "gentle" content later on
[Report This]Date: February 05 2012 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Sorry, Im quite new here, this is supposed to be a chapter 17 review thing
Oh come on Jacksmith,
The guys been through enough, dont you think your starting to overmilk it?
It was perfect the way it was going, ah well
last time I didnt say it was chapter 17, didnt want to get you confused, sorry :)
Author's Response:
haha of course i'm overmilking it, that's supposed to be a lot of the appeal in the fetish part of it. patience, there's still enough chapters left that all is not lost
[Report This]Date: February 04 2012 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
I really like this third part of the series and that Jack finally found an ally. Although, things probably won't be smooth sailing, I hope Carly gets what's comming to her.
[Report This]Date: February 04 2012 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
"But fortunately, since he told Sophie about the shrinking formula, I just know that Carly's doomed."
Or Sophie ends up shrunk and Carly gets two pets.
Author's Response:
haha now you're starting to think like I do when I'm writing this stuff ;) better hope sophie paid attention in chem class...
[Report This]Date: February 04 2012 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Still great so far. I had to slap my head at Jack's apparent willingness to leave Sophie's care. But fortunately, since he told Sophie about the shrinking formula, I just know that Carly's doomed. Knowing that is enough for now, haha.
Date: February 03 2012 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Great I love gentle gts and great job on the story it is keeping me intrigued
Date: February 01 2012 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Hahahah! I'm liking what Sophie is thinking. >;] Wouldn't mind seeing that happen to Carly for a change, and Karma is bound to strike sometime in her life! :P
Author's Response:
i'd say you're not the only one who wants to see something like that happen. thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: January 31 2012 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Man, you continue to impress me with this story. I mean, I wouldn't expect anyone to hold grudges after five years of thinking the person was dead, but his extreme pessimism is totally unstandable at this point.
I'm really interested to see where you take this. You've really sucked me into the story and got me sympathizing with Jack and wanting Carly to burn. Fortunately, unless he does something really stupid it looks like he is in good shape. Still have this strange sense of foreboding though. Hopefully he is too well trained by now to do anything even the slightest bit offensive :)
Author's Response:
glad you like it. i wouldn't ignore that feeling of foreboding, though ;)
[Report This]Date: January 30 2012 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
I love this story. Glad to see you writing more chapters for it. I'm really hoping for a happy ending. Justice needs to be serve on Carly.
[Report This]Date: January 30 2012 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Great to see you adding to this third and final chapter. This could end up going a few ways--Carly has to remove her cousin from the scene because she is sympathetic to Jack, the cousin is like Carly and Jack is overdosed by female domination unto death, or the cousin starts out sympathetic but slowly comes around to Carly's point of view. Keep up the new-found momentum!
Author's Response:
with some glee, i point out your theories are incorrect! hopefully that means i've done a good job of keeping the ultimate end secret.
[Report This]Date: January 29 2012 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
This was a very exciting chapter. I really like the idea of bringing another person in to the situation. Maybe Carly and Sophie could double team Jack to hurt him or humiliate him. I think it would be fun to see just how much Sophie is like Carly.
Dave
Date: January 28 2012 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Awesome. I've been keeping up with this series for a while now. I have to admit, I wasn't as enthusiastic about looking into their past in "part 4". I see now, though, that is can be used as an excuse to keep the brother and sister together, whereas this story has an unknown future and can bring in Sophie.
It would be cool to see what a second person's reaction would be. I'm also curious about how our hero (victim?) would be able to mentally handle the idea that it's "happening again."
I remember the sister, in one chapter or another, saying how she wished he were smaller. How she would stuff him in her ear and have him feed her compliments all day. i don't know if it was random or a tease, but I think it would grow much more interesting if he were to shrink down more. Of course, I don't have any idea how it would be implemented, so I can only call it wishful thinking.
Regardless, I've enjoyed your writing and look forward to how the story progresses.
Date: November 15 2011 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Any idea when this story will be completed becuase I keep checking back on the site everyday hoping there will be a few new chapters.
Author's Response:
no idea when it will be "completed" as this story is probably only around half through. i will post a new chapter eventually
Date: November 14 2011 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Is there going to be another story in this series becuase I've really enjoyed reading them and think they're just great and I think that it would be a shame to drop the series until Jack manages to get back to normal size.
Author's Response:
it's unlikely that there'll be another one, but i do intend to tie up all the loose ends at the end of this story
Date: October 15 2011 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Beautifully writen chapter of a sister sharing the -joy- of christmas with her brother.
Author's Response:
'tis the season ;)
Date: September 25 2011 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Vau at last a really wild chapter as we remember from the previous second part of this story. At the beggining of this 3th part i was afraid u just lost your breathe because of the moveout of the chapters but now i see that its again accelerate and im glad i can welcome our old jacksmith :). I hope there will be some more hell for him similar to this last chapter. I have some ideas of using him as a decoration to her clothes or shoes maybe we think the same way. so thank u for your great ability of writing and using your fantasy and hope your other story about our tiny student will turn to the hell soon to as u know what i mean :P. Good luck in writing mf!
Author's Response:
thanks for the review. this one will certainly have some more intense chapters. the student story will be going at a slower pace, but that too will eventually have some crazier parts.
Date: September 16 2011 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Wow... yeah... Carly is clearly not mentally sound. Five long years being held prisoner like this would just utterly break a person down to a souless shell of his or her former self. No contact with other family or friends is damaging enough, the torture on top of that... yeah, unbearable. Can't say I'm really sympathizing with her yet... maybe I will though if karma ever comes back and pays her back for doing all of this.
This story has definitely gone into extremes in some respects, which does... make it a bit iffy to me, but I'm still enjoying it. In fact, I've honestly enjoyed most of your stories on here; You're definitely one of my favorite authors~
I don't mind you being wordy either... I appreciate the vivid descriptions of everything... I'm actually pretty heavy on the words myself when I write. =p
So yeah, please keep up the great work. I'm very interested in seeing what's going to happen here. It's nothing short of amazing how Jack has even a shred of sanity left in himself after five years of this cruelty.
Author's Response:
thanks for the lengthier-than-average review, i appreciate it when commentators sum up several angles on their thoughts.
carly is difficult to sympathize with, although part of it is that i have so much fun writing her, i have trouble disliking her ;)
on the extremes, all i can say is that this is rated R and tagged with violent/sadistic for a reason, but i'm glad you continue to enjoy even if it's not your favorite.
[Report This]Date: September 12 2011 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
I'll surrise and not mention Carly doing anything twisted to him with her feet this time! I think a fitting scene of humilation might actually consist of Carly using him to get herself off, so to speak. After she's done with the deed, she could hold his drenched, psychologically damaged little body between her thumb and forefinger up to her face, mocking this latest dispaly of utter degredation. All the while, Jack's face is drenched and his small body quivers helplessy from this latest display of carnage.
Author's Response:
thanks for the suggestion. to be perfectly honest insertion or anything closely related is sort of a personal turn-off for me regarding the gts fetish, but i'll see what i can do
[Report This]Date: September 07 2011 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Jack was kind of a jerk in the flashback. I hate to say it but in each story there have been times when he's been a jerk to Carly. Sometimes I think he deserves some of what he gets. But me being an only child growing up.I don't really know much about the love/hatred that can exists between siblings.
It was a great chapter as usual though. I loved it.
Dave
Author's Response:
thanks for reading. part of my intention is to get you to somewhat sympathize with Carly despite her insanity
[Report This]Date: September 04 2011 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Again, it's great to see you come back to this story and wrap things up. I can honestly say that I have no idea where you're taking things and how the these two sibling's story will end. That's a good thing. I also like where I think last chapter was pointing to; Carly seems to be in a mood to play with her brother at her feet. The ease by which various body parts of hers so easily manipulate his nether regions, I'd like to throw something humilating that hasn't been seen quite yet: What if Carly were to immobilize his hands so that he can't touch himself and experiments on whether her foot stink alone is enough to cause him to orgasm? I think it would simply be another incident in a long line of them involving her feet having utter superiority over her brother. Now, however, even the very smell of her feminine foot stink can have it's way with him in the most intimate of fashion. Great stuff so far. What small critique is that I don't ever like to read about anyone younger than 16 in these stories that's involved in the main bod of the story. Because you're so talented, I overlooked her being 14 in the first 2 stories, but it makes me a mite uncomfortable to read about her manipulating her brother at age 12. I realize that she's 19 now, which is great. Other than that, great additions!
Author's Response: I am very, very aware of your preferences at this point bud, and hope you're ok with the fact that we diverge a bit in our tastes regarding the foot scenes. As for the age thing i see your point, i hadn't really considered it though since there's no sexual content in chapter 4; additionally, as an author, being not terribly far off in age from carly, it hadn't really bothered me, but i'll keep the age thing more in mind from now on; thanks for the feedback, i appreciate it