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Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01 2011 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 1: Visitor

Just got caught up. Amazing story! My theory about Catherine and Caroline's connection (and why Elizabeth was merely a duchess) proved to be true. And Catherine became a giantess for the finale! Awesome! I hope my speculating in the comments didn't give anything away.

You asked for constructive criticism so I will say this -- the names were a bit distracting. England's royal family has had Elizabeths, Richards, Annes, and Phillips so these names came with baggage. For a fantasy setting, more unique names might have worked better.

My only disappointment was that Caroline never reached the height her mother and aunt did in the last chapter. The 100-200 foot range is my favorite and it would have been cool and sexy to see how Caroline handled interacting with the tiny people at that size. That's just personal taste though. Excellent job overall! This was a very good story.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the critiques; frankly, the only reason the names came out like that was because the story was such a "why not?" kind of thing when i started it, i was like "okay, names, names, i need names... ok, there we go."  As for the size thing, I really just did that so Catherine would appear as an impossibly imposing force to the gigantic Caroline, but I see your point; I'll keep these in mind if I ever try a fantasy story again.

Reviewer: Malaka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 01 2011 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 31: End

Pretty much the best ending I could have hoped for. But, as good as this story was, I'm glad it has come to a conclusion. The uncertainty over whether or not the princess would die was almost too much to bear, LOL.

Wonderful to see stories such as this one on this site, they motivate me to write better ones myself.



Author's Response:

believe me, my tired wrists are glad it's over too  :P   thanks for your consistent reviews, man, and i look forward to hearing from you again in the future and reading your own further work

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 30 2011 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 31: End

great ending. an what spectacular story. thank you for posting it.

aaron

Author's Response:

sure thing :)

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2011 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 1: Visitor

Well it took me quite awhile but I finally read the whole story. I loved the dream sequence.

This was a fantastic adventure story. And even though I don't normally read this type of story I honestly liked it. In fact I liked it much more than I thought I would.

Dave

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 26 2011 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 29: Truth

this id easily quickly becoming one of my favorite adventure stories. well done.

aaron
ps i loved the cliffhangers. an twists you've added.

Author's Response:

i love using cliffhangers; helps make sure at least someone reads the next chapter

Reviewer: Malaka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2011 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 28: Flight

Damn, that was some intense storytelling! Very, very well written. And now it seems that the final confrontation is about to happen, so I'm very eagerly looking forward to that. I have no idea how Caroline will defeat her enemy, or even if she will, but, in any case, I'm certain the finale will get a perfect 10 out of 10.



Author's Response:

10 out of 10?  oh dang; thanks a LOT, now i've gotta try to make this thing, you know, kinda good, or something ;)

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2011 7:33 PM Title: Chapter 27: Siege

The dream sequence was very well done and horrific. More intense than the rest of the story, sure, but not inappropriate. These kinds of thoughts would certainly be going through Caroline's head. It was pretty clearly a dream so I wasn't too concerned about her family's grisly fate or the increae in violence.

The dialogue between Catherine and her lackey always amuses me. I'm curious about one thing -- if she had the power to turn Caroline into a giantess, can she do the same to herself?

Looking forward to seeing how this all turns out.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you don't think I was stepping over the line; I just thought, having such a calm and sheltered character, it would provide a good chapter to toss some true horror at her.  And, while Catherine doesn't necessarily need to become a giantess because of her power, she may end up being given a run for her money when Caroline returns ;)

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 23 2011 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 25: Lost

this story is amazing. an im finally caught up with it, lol. an i cant wait for more.

aaron

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Date: June 21 2011 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 21: Luke

this story is truely remarkable. i absolutely love everything about it.
i especially love how you described how realistically shocked luke was when he first laid eyes on caroline. an the details to the scenary where spectacular.
well done. an keep going.


aaron

Author's Response:

will do ;) thanks for your consistent reviews

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 20 2011 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 24: Brawl

You sure are making this very exciting, Sorry I haven't been reviewing more often like I have with you other stories. But. with this story I have been reading the chapters a few at a time. I am liking this story much more than I thought I would. I'm not usually in to princesses and that fantasy stuff when it comes to giantess stuff. I prefer things like your Carly and Jack stories. But this story is really fun. Great writing.



Author's Response:

thanks bud; i'm enjoying exploring many aspects of this whole concept, so my next story will probably be more in line with your preferences, but i'm glad you're liking something new

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2011 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 23: Mother

Wow! Was not expecting that. Adios, King Richard. Real curious to hear the full story of his history with Catherine. I have a few theories.

I liked the earlier scene of Luke leaping off the balcony forcing Caroline to catch him. Very funny. Him being tied up in a bow to keep him out of the battle was a nice touch too.



Author's Response:

the history will pop up eventually, and you can bet it will be exuberant and absurdly geeky in equal measure, hehe

Reviewer: Malaka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 15 2011 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 21: Luke

This is turning into quite an epic tale, I hope you won't just get tired of writing it and leave it unfinished! In any case, another wonderful chapter - great to see that nothing can force Caroline and her little man apart.



Author's Response:

no need to worry about me leaving it undone, i'm one of those people who gets that awful nagging feeling when something is left incomplete; it also helps that, unlike my other stories, i also kinda know where i'm headed with it, haha

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 11 2011 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 18: Topple

Very good pace to the story. An the build up to her an Luke I killin me, lol.
I just love the overall aspect of this tale. Wéll done.

Aaron

Author's Response:

thanks, i figured the scenes involving her and Luke will be some of the most fun to write, so I've been trying to make sure I save some of the good stuff for later

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2011 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 18: Topple

Cool confrontation with the kidnappers, and Phillip being tossed off the cliff was quite a dramatic moment. Glad Caroline was able to catch him.

By the way, don't worry about the Others. By no means does "Lost" have the trademark on that term. It was just the first thing I thought of.



Author's Response:

okay, cool.  i was guessing that was the case there, i was mostly just hoping people don't have some other image of the Others in my story from the show.  hopefully it's not a huge distraction to anyone

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 08 2011 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 14: Journey

i love all the adventure this story has. an the characters are unforgettable.

aaron
ps the monsters seem to be based off of grendel and his mother...very frightening stuff.

Author's Response:

there are some very sharp people in this comment section, that was definitely meant to be a sort of reference, although the set-up for the mother's entrance in this story will very different than in beowulf

Reviewer: Malaka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 08 2011 2:29 PM Title: Chapter 14: Journey

Another brilliant plot development! It's great to see Caroline taking matters into her own hands - I wonder what kinds of dangers await her. Hope she take good care of Phillip, though.



Author's Response:

thanks, i thought it was about time to throw a few more actual threats at her in the story

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05 2011 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 11: Beast

A giantess vs. a giant monster -- nice! Cool fight scene. Is this beast meant to be any particular mythical creature or just something from your imagination?

I love the phrase, the Otherlands, by the way. Though calling the people "the Others" reminds me of "Lost." ;)



Author's Response:

the monster isn't based on anything, i pulled him out of my ass while i was sitting there writing.  and sorry about the Others, i didn't mean to steal it from anything, I've never seen nor do i know anything about Lost beyond the most basic premise, so I promise it wasn't a direct taking.  hopefully they're different enough kinds of things so no tv show executives come after me, hehe

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 05 2011 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 8: Waiting

Very good story. I love the overall gentleness of this tale, as well as the direction the story seems to be headed. Well done. An the characters reactions to things an their overall demeanor is surprisingly realistic. can't wait to see hope the villagers handle the sweet an kind hearted princess...

Aaron

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 04 2011 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 9: Plans

This has been fun so far. Much more than I thought it would be.

Dave



Author's Response:

hey, thanks, i'm glad; it's cool that you're willing to read stories that are maybe a little different from the genres you normally enjoy

Reviewer: Malaka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 02 2011 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 7: Small

What an amazing story! I honestly think it's one of the best, most realistic stories I've seen on this site so far. Each new chapter is more intriguing tham the last. I have honestly no idea how Caroline will cope with growing even larger than she is now, (can only imagine how frightening it must be for her) but I hope she does.

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