Date: June 04 2014 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
Please continue this story soon. It's getting really good and it would be a shame for it to remain in long-term hiatus again. I hope you find the inspiration and time to keep it going.
Date: November 10 2010 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love what you've done so far, it is the most well written story I've read yet on this site. Eager for chapter 4!
Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 4 is in the works.
[Report This]Date: October 29 2010 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
I'm really enjoying this story! The characters are sharply defined, and act like real people. Nell is a likeable protagonist (all too rare in this genre), and you've done a good job of establishing her relationships with the rest of the cast. I can't wait to see how these dynamics shift as she continues to grow.
I also like the way you've handled the technobabble. Some authors simply handwave the technology (I'm guilty of that), while others go into infodump mode and provide way more details than the reader needs. You've hit a good balance, keeping it accessible while giving just enough detail to keep it plausible.
My hat's off to any writer on these boards that tries to tell an actual story, and you're definitely one of the best. Eagerly awaiting the next installment!!!
(Note: Deleted and reposted, as I forgot to give a rating the first time.)
Author's Response: Thanks, Cayce! I'm on the record as someone who really admires both Homunculus and Now and Then (speaking of which, any updates for that last one on the horizon?) so what you've said means a lot to me.
The technobabble is mostly there because it's plot-crucial for how Nell grows over the course of the story, and what Daniel and her father will need to do to try and stop it. Working it in can be difficult for the best of us authors (previously, I've usually just included it in a prologue and left it there), but I feel like it can add something -- sometimes.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2010 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
With so much glaze on her eyes, Nell must be a real sweet girl. ;-)
Seriously, though: excellent first chapter! And, with the hint that chapter two is going to include a giant lab rat (Shades of HGW'S FOOD OF THE GODS!!), you have guaranteed my readership of said chapter. :-)
Author's Response: Heh, I guess I did use that descriptor one time too many. Actually, I think I'm going to skimp on giant lab rat content, although it will have a bearing on the story's plotline. Good to see you're still around, Cary.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2010 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
great to read your stories again. welcome back.
the characters are great an very realistic. but really love the dialog as well.
an the ending is very foreboding, cant wait to see how you write more of the scientific jargon because that whole asspect is very interesting and believable. well done.
aaron
ps does this mean 'forest lake incident' is finished?
Author's Response: Hey Aaron. Belated thanks for all the reviews! It's been a long time since I've logged into Giantess World (I usually keep up more with GC), so it's nice to see that a whole bunch of people have been reading. Also glad you enjoy this new one.
As to the PS, Forest Lake isn't finished, but I'm not sure if or when it will ever be. The sheer amount of plot in that story began to become a bit too much, and I also realized that the overall story was on the path towards being very misogynist and kind of a downer - neither of which were my intention, just sort of the way things were panning out. Unless I can figure out a different way to finish the story, I'm going to keep it shelved.