Date: October 20 2024 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
The good:
- You took a difficult theme and came up with a brilliant execution; 100% worth the wait and worth the money.
- You made it a challenge - I'm not terribly confident people will try, but one can hope...
The bad:
- You promised one chapter and delivered seven - I'll never, ever forgive you!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the kind words!
Date: October 20 2024 12:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was amazing . I would love to see more. Will there be another chapter? Also, why didn’t his wife fight harder to take him back initially?
Author's Response:
Thank you! There aren't any plans for another chapter right now, sorry >w<
Date: October 20 2024 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
This needs the slave tag. No, being 'soft' doesn't change the situation.
EDIT: That (minor) gripe aside, I enjoyed this a lot. If it leaned more into pheromones (and thus validate the logic jumps present), and less into apathy and idiocy for the enslavement, it would have been perfect.
Author's Response:
Whoops, your totally right! I completely forgot about that tag and it has now been added. Thanks!
Date: October 20 2024 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
Really enjoyed this one! I particularly liked the psychological aspect of Brandon’s view being changed by being near Camila’s feet and being treated as pet. The idea of Camila getting these silly ideas from internet misinformation was funny. Also, it seems like the spacing might be messed up with the paragraphs and dialogue? Not sure. Great work though!
Author's Response:
Thank you!