Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2010 1:02 PM Title: Body Exploration (9)

"Dum boob" is right. He should have employed reverse psychology and _pretended_ to hate being in her bra.

That way, she would have kept him there out of spite!

Author's Response:

good point too bad he didnt think of it first

Reviewer: Jay Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16 2010 11:15 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet

This is shaping up to be a fast, fun read.  I like your narration; it's descriptive and character driven, but not overly so.  Keep up the good work.  As a friendly suggestion, I've seen many stories similar to this go on far too long, mine included.  I'd love to see this fine story go 2-3 more solid chapters.  I also really hope Bianca ends his life beneath her smelly feet by agonizingly and slowly crushing him by scrunching him beneather the folds of her toes after eliminating his invulnrability!

Author's Response:

its more than 2 or 3 chapters becaus i still have to add the family party part.  Biancas chapters will end soon then it goes to someone else then im not sure what girl will end up with jake, but i have a pretty good idea of who it will be and i think youll be pleased with the ending. 

in fact i think Everbody will love the ending. youll see what i mean.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 13 2010 7:50 PM Title: Bianca's The One in Control Now (6)

He may wish he was dead by the time New Year's rolls around. Lol!

Author's Response: That is a Possibility?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09 2010 2:47 PM Title: Bianca Initiates Jakes Shrinkage (5)

And, we will hold you to that promise.

;-)

Author's Response: lol, jakes first escape attempt will be revealed in chapter 8 and 9

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 07 2010 10:23 AM Title: How I Could've Avoided This Fate (2)

Heh! Sounds more like the aunt should've been shrunk.

Author's Response: Yeah, but Bianca loves her Mom and Dad, and has never liked Jake.  she doesnt hate him, but she feels he would be better suited under her feet that any of her other family members or friends.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 01 2010 2:43 PM Title: The Beginning of the Middle of the End at the Bottom of Bianca's Feet

The semi-rhetorical questions posed, re: the character's fate in the very next chapter. At Writing.com, of course, the reader gets to answer that question to his/her own satisfaction. But, here? IT IS THE AUTHOR ALONE WHO GETS TO PULL THE CHARACTER'S PUPPET STRINGS. BWA-HAHAHAHAHAHA!

Ahem! Sorry! *Loosens shirt collar in embarrassment.* Couldn't resist.

Author's Response: lol, yeah i like those semi-rhetorical questions posed, but im trying to make it a little different by changing the time frames around so its kinda like a weird/cool story.  the ending will be a little different too. youll see what i mean.

Reviewer: asdfsdfasdf Signed [Report This]
Date: January 30 2010 10:19 PM Title: How The End of your Normal Life Began (1)

Nice start. Can't wait to see some action.

Author's Response: thanks, i just added some Action and there will be more in the next two chapters