[Report This]Date: October 12 2024 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Reckless Disregard
I spent about 25 minutes writing a review to press submit and find the site had logged me out and deleted the whole thing! I shall try and summarise what I had written prior about how fantastic this story is as it really deserves to be read by all who enjoy a good shrinking story!
I think that DoctorWeird does a fantastic job at fleshing out his characters and making them feel very real and justified in their actions. Many a story has half soaked, hollow and unthought out characteristical traits that have you questioning the characters and not fully believing in what they're doing or why they're doing it. The characters in this story feel alive and with every addition, more and more like they actually exist and you feel engaged to find out what happens to them and empathetic to what they're feeling which really draws you in and makes you read on. The scene where Mr. C has a moment alone looking at an old photo of him and Amy and the emotions he was relaying, I felt like I was stood there right alongside him. It's a very hard thing to do to make someone care for a character but you do it effortlessly and it's a such a joy to read.
I find myself checking daily to see if you've dropped a surprise chapter for me to devour as I'm so invested in the story and seeing what happens to Mr. C and how they're going to get through these tumultuous times...I'm addicted!! I honestly cannot wait for the next addition to this thrilling and wonderful universe you're creating. My only wish, if you can add it to a later chapter maybe, would be more of the unaware ass and thigh content. Not so much inside the pants like chapter 7, but maybe a back pocket or a side pocket on tight leggings (leggings do sometimes have pockets, I swear). For example, when Mrs. K confronts Emma about what she has in her hand, if Mr. C would have stayed still and been mistaken for a doll, she could have confiscated him and kept him in her back pocket until the end of practise? My favourite piece of writing is called Checkmate by Nostromo (absolute legend) and he has a similar scene where the shrunken character end up inside the front front of his partners tights as he loses a game of chess (hence the name) and it starts as an aware scenario but has moments of unaware with her thighs and I'd really love to see you put your own unique spin on a situation like that with one of the characters maybe?
Anyway, if my previous statements haven't alluded to how highly I rate this content, I love your style of writing, I love the characters and I love the nitty grittiness of your chapters and how truly real they feel. If ever you need anybody to bounce ideas off of or need help fleshing out a paragraph or section, then please feel free to message me! I've written a few chapters on Writing.com and absolutely loved it! 10/10 - A+++++
Until the next chapter, R.
Author's Response:
Wow....this is amazing. Thank you so, so much for taking the time to write all that. I'm glad the characters mean something to you and that their depictions are landing as real people. As I've mentioned in my replies to other people who have left reviews, for me personally, having the characters be real people with real problems and real motivations creates stakes and emotional investment, and it's my feeling that stakes and investment make the sexy stuff sexier.
Make no mistake; we all know what this site is about, and what we're all here for. This is, first and foremost, supposed to be fun and arousing. But IMO, no reason we can't also have a decent story along with it. Yes, it's pure smut at times, but the more we come to care about these characters, the more their interactions, including (and especially) the sexy ones, matter.
I mentioned this in response to another review someone left that was hoping for a happy ending. And as the synopsis says, the shrinking was supposed to lead to an irreoncilable decline in Steve's relationship with Amy, ultimately culminating in tragedy (I've had the ending written in my head from the moment I drafted the prologue).
But I'll admit that I got attached to these two lovebirds myself. This is turning into a Stranger Than Fiction thing where I don't wanna see Harold Crick die. I might have to revise my synopsis and change the ending or, like I mentioned, draft multiples in a "choose your own adventure" style.
Again, thank you so much for the kind words and feedback. This is the kind of stuff that motivates me to keep writing. The Word document is 112 pages already (working on Chapter 7 as we speak), so this could very easily end up being 500 pages before it's done. That's longer than most full-length novels. And the reason I'm doing it is because of responses like these that let me know the story reached someone personally and brightened their day! So, thanks again!
I read you loud and clear on the clothed butt/thighs interaction. Emma's leggings not having pockets was primarily a plot device, as I'm sure you know. Fret not, I think the forthcoming in-office adventures will be to your liking!!
Date: October 12 2024 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Reckless Disregard
Another great chapter, love how Emma has big drama and plot points enough for her to have her own story. Really makes the setting feel real and fleshed out. Breast growth is one of my favorites, so she quickly became my favorite giantess, but excited to see the other characters you bring in next.
Also, do you plan on having more giant male character interactions?
Author's Response:
Thank you!! That was the intent: create stakes by tying the characters to what hopefully feel like real life problems.
And I wasn't planning on having much more in terms of giant men, not really my cup of tea. That said, Steve's law firm partner is one of the listed characters in the intro for a reason.