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Reviewer: gtsfan2001 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 18 2024 1:36 AM Title: A Cutting Edge Company

Thanks for the insight into Andra.  Didn't know about the estranged husband. Explains a lot.  I had to head over to your archive to read the latest version of "Melts in your mouth".  Thanks for mentioning that.  Looking forward to seeing her in "Tiny Tinder".
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Reviewer: gtsfan2001 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 17 2024 7:01 PM Title: HR Processed

I liked the pneumatic tube idea so much that I awarded maximum stars even though I had some trouble understanding the ending.

I didn't understand why Andra would be watching videos of Kevin after she'd treated him as "just food".  It implies that she'd lusted after him.  It only makes since if you know Andra from the companion story "The Nibbler's Forbidden Adventures".  One of my favorite characters BTW.  Also, the exercise bike illustration is to small to reveal that there is a tiny man taped to the dildo.  Who is he?  I'd drop the whole exercise bike scene and save it for another story.

I'd like to see another story set at E.A. Tech (which is a great fit for the Forbidden Dish universe since it employs the same shrinking technology and characters).  Use the pussy cannon and exercise bike.  Eager intern (call him Roger) seduces Andra.  He discovers details of the E.A. Tech termination process.  Andra loves her ongoing office romance and promises never to eat him.  He gets (with Andra's backing) promoted out of the intern pool.  He's a survivor.  But Andra has her appetites.  Rodger worked closely with Kevin.  Kevin's abrupt departure hit's hard.  Rodger confronts Andra who reluctantly betrays him to Tiffany.  Corporate goons drag Rodger to HR. Andra keeps her promise.  She doesn't eat Rodger.  He ends up taped to her dildo.  She watches him on video when she uses her exercise bike.    



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. In regards to the bike scene at the end - there is no tiny strapped to the dildo. As for watching the video of her former employee, it's one of her rituals - she has them for dinner (or late lunch) and then reminisces while working out before heading out for the evening. Just a way for her to blow off steam.  Andra's character is also in 'Melts in your Mouth' as well as an upcoming Tiny Tinder App story which I haven't completed details on yet.

It's an interesting idea you outline in your last paragraph, but in my timeline, Andra has already moved on from EA Tech to a different company, so I would have to go back in time to deliver that. She's moved on for the most part from the swallowing prey and has become more of a sexual cougar looking for a different type of prey to sate her sexual appetite (whether that means taking them home for sex or having them shrunk down and sneaking them out). That's why she didn't swallow her coworker in the 'Melts' story. So, just an evolution of her character as she's reached her early to mid-thirties and her priorities have shifted and her husband is estranged from her.

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