[Report This]Date: January 21 2024 12:01 PM Title: Ch 3. Hooking Up
Lynn is my hero.
I absolutely love how she had both the patience and the passionate, relentless drive to bring Alena out of her shell. Her take-charge, let-cum-what-may attitude in the bedroom is just perfect.
Alena is absolutely adorable here, and I feel for her lack of self-confidence on a very deep level.
I feel a little bad Jackie got kicked out of her room on such short notice, but I think it's important for tinies to have a safe space then can engage with a big. Given the more positive and affirmative bent to your stories I wouldn't expect anything bad to come from it, but Lynn taking a full-sized Uber and wandering alone into a mixed-size bar would be very dangerous in a less wholesome story. I'm glad Jackie is so accommodating, and that goes for Heather as well. Heather's down-to-earth and compassionate approach to her new friends is very encouraging.
Wonderful job work the sexy times. That scene checked all of my horny boxes. Take-charge tiny? Check. Big calls the tiny Mistress? Check. Tiny gets gobsmacked and then smothered in boobs? Check. Big tells the tiny," I want you inside me?" Fuck yes! I-I mean, check.
Lynn taking the lead was very in character, but I was extremely pleased when Alena made the first move to engage in intimacy. And what a move, putting Lynn straight into her mouth. I'm not sure what got to me more, the action itself, or its representation of Alena coming out of her shell. A great moment in an excellent scene.
Thanks again for the chapter, and I can't wait to see what comes next!
Author's Response:
I've been wanting to write a tiny who wears the oversized pants in the relationship for quite some time, but I have never been quite sure how to navigate that. Missy in both Turnabout and Small Investments has been a huge inspiration, and I hope I can mold Lynn into a tiny domme even half as good as her. That being said, I really like switches in F/f relationships, so Alena will have her key moments of taking charge (like taking the first bite in this chapter). And as charismatic as Lynn can be, she will absolutely break down into a giddy mess at the chance of being smothered by giant boobs. God, I'm really excited to write more of these two.
Lynn is certainly a risk taker, though I don't think she's even aware of that sort of thing. Youth and confidence go a long way into making her feel immortal even if most her size would feel otherwise. I'm glad to hear Heather is coming across as down-to-earth considering how far above it all her heritage has placed her. She's another character I'm looking forward to writing more of (granted, I can say the same thing about all these guys, so I don't know why I keep specifying this lol).
Next chapter will be a fun one, focusing on much of the main cast and moving some relationships along. And I just want to apologize for sinking the HeaLynn ship so soon. I felt really bad reading your previous reviews knowing where I was headed literally the next chapter. But it sounds like I sold you on Lynn x Alena (ALynna? idk), so I'mma chalk that up as a success. (And don't worry, I have some antics planned between Heather and Lynn, so even if they aren't dating, I think the pair will still provide plenty of entertainment).
[Report This]Date: January 20 2024 9:35 AM Title: Ch 3. Hooking Up
As much as I enjoyed Mixing Sizes, I think I already like this story better.
I think you've made both of the twins into delightfully complex and unique characters, and it's really easy to get invested into them for that almost as much as it is for how likable they are. I think I read in your response to one of the other reviews that you started thinking about these two pretty early on when writing Mixing Sizes, and that really shows here.
Going into this story, I expected the big twin to be pretty understanding of a tiny's perspective and to probably go out of their way to be accommodating to tinies in general, if not be a bit mischievous from time to time (I would think a big sibling could pull off some epic pranks on their tiny twin). I absolutely didn't expect the big twin to actually IDENTIFY as a tiny the way that Jackie does. I found this to be as adorable as I did brilliant. I've honestly never seen that in size fetish story before.
And I love the way that identity has shaped Jackie's personality. Of course she's going to be a shy introvert; she's expected to hang around a group of people she generally finds annoying and intimidating as a big tiny. It's one thing to understand and accommodate a tiny's needs and feelings, but it's quite another to actually at least somewhat share those needs and feelings, so it makes sense that she feels the way she does about her "fellow" bigs.
She seemed so much more comfortable in the tiny district in chapter two. There was none of that awkwardness that Jess always felt there, and Jackie felt like she belonged there despite her size, even when accepting Mrs. McGunagle's (great name, by the way) lemon squares.
I'm really curious whether it will be her or Pierce that will make the first move. I think Pierce is just a little bit more bold than Jackie, but I could see the big tiny moving past her shyness and going after what she wants as her friends help her open up.
On a side note, I found it interesting that Jackie wandering through the tiny district got no reaction at all from the tiny residents. I laughed whenever Jess and Sasha got harassed by the tiny drivers in Mixing Sizes, but it looks like tiny districts have embraced big tourism in the 20 or so years since then. That's a smart choice on their part, and it's intriguing to see the development between the two peoples play out between the two stories.
Lynn I found even more interesting. With Jackie being a big that identifies as a small, you would think that she would be the other side of that coin and be a small that identifies as a big. She doesn't, though. I honestly think that she doesn't identify as either. For her, her size is just a physical trait rather than a representation of who she is, which I think makes her different from pretty much every other character in the story.
I also think this is what gives her such incredible confidence. She's not intimidated by bigs, nor is she super excited to make friends with one. Despite the huge size difference between her and Heather and Alena, Lynn was pretty casual when they first met. And she wasn't looking to avoid sitting in the tiny section because she wanted to sit with the bigs or avoid being seen as just a tiny, she just wanted to sit in the back, you know, like a normal student.
She also takes things in stride that other tinies would gripe about, such as Heather stepping over her and almost knocking her down. I'm pretty sure most of the tinies on campus would have grumbled "frickin' bigs" or something if that would have happened to them, but it wasn't a thing for Lynn. She even got a little annoyed with Alena in this last chapter for handling her too gently, even if she did appreciate the thought.
Of course, Lynn did make it clear that she has a strong preference for big partners, but I think that has more to do with them having a lot more places to stuff her and other tinies not having any such places than anything else. I think Lynn might be more into this fetish than some people on this site! She also clearly inherited Drew's adventurous spirit.
It was great to see her get together with Alena, as that seemed to be the most natural connection she had in the first chapter (other than Alena trying to erase her boobs; what the hell, Alena?!). Seeing Lynn get shy, timid Alena to embrace her wild side was pretty rewarding, and the whole scene was really well-written.
I'm really interested to see how this love rhombus Javi has fallen into will play out. Right now, I think he's going to end up with either Heather or Michelle. We don't know much about Shana yet, so she kind of feels more like an obstacle for the other two to overcome than a legitimate threat. That could change in the coming chapters, though, so I'm not counting her out just yet.
I kind of feel like he's got the most natural rapport with Heather. Michelle seems interested in Javi himself but not particularly interested in the things Javi is interested in or how he sees things as a tiny.
It says a lot that he was able to shrug off the rude, careless way she went looking for him the tiny center, but I'm not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing in terms of Michelle looking to get with him. It could be taken as a positive, as Javi has adjusted to Michelle in a way that most tiny's (even big ones like Jackie) never will. It could also be taken as a negative in the sense that Michelle either just expected him to adjust to her or simply didn't care to notice the impact her actions have on tinies.
Heather has shown that she can be a bit careless around tinies, too (not dangerously so, but more like that time I mentioned when she almost knocked Lynn over). But she also hasn't been around tinies very much mainly because she's a giant even amongst the bigs and that has to be incredibly intimidating to every tiny not named Lynn or Javi, so there's a reason for her not to realize stuff like that. Michelle has been around Javi for some time, so her actions come off a bit differently.
Still, maybe this presents an opportunity for Michelle to grow as a person and win Javi that way. I could still see this going either way.
We also got an unnamed cameo from Jess! And almost one from Guilty Gear! Come on, Heather! Who doesn't like a good fighting game?
But yeah, like I said, I'm pretty into this already, so I'm excited to see where you go with it from here!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'd like to think my writing has improved at least somewhat since starting Mixing (though I'm always afraid that my skill is regressing lol, so thanks for the pick-me-up). I had figured out how I wanted to end Mixing early while writing it, and as soon as I decided on Jess and Drew having twins, my mind exploded with ideas on where I wanted the sequel to go. Jackie and Lynn have been taking up a lot of room in my head ever since (making writing other stories in the meanwhile a touch more difficult), but I'm glad to finally unleash the pair onto the world.
Your analysis of their characters makes me beyond giddy because it tells me I'm successfully conveying their characters so far. Jackie is the type of person who will behave noticeably different depending on where she is and who she's around. She's always going to feel more comfortable around her people and more closed off around those who are physically her size (with some exceptions). You are absolutely spot on with Lynn, her seeing her height as simply a trait rather than a defining aspect of her identity. Just because she enjoys hanging around bigs doesn't mean she wishes she were one or that she sees any issues being a tiny. If anything, she loves her size because it lets her date larger women and be tossed into all sorts of places. Her size fetish is interesting in that, unlike irl, it's based around her reality and not limited to a fantasy, and I think that makes it manifest in ways different than how we actualize it. It's almost more equivalent to a real world fat fetish or attraction towards tomboys or something, in that it's based in more practical ideas than abstract ones, which is honestly a drawn out way of saying Lynn thinks bigger is better. I'm excited to explore both of their characters further as the story continues, and am so elated to hear how well received they've been from just these early chapters.
I'll refrain from making specific remarks regarding Javi's enviable situation as to not play my hand too early. Right now, that whole dynamic is giving me the most anxiety as it's my first time writing something akin to a love triangle (as you so aptly put it, a love rhombus), but I'm hopeful the whole thing will satisfy readers with how I plan to let it play out.
Jackie's taste in video games has definitely been affected by the ones she used to play with her parents, so who knows, maybe Guilty Gear will have a chance to cameo yet lol.
Very glad to see you enjoying this so far. I'm hoping to get chapter 4 out sometime this week, and I expect it will continue to deliver.
Date: January 17 2024 6:29 AM Title: Ch 3. Hooking Up
Good story! I love the concept of a pair of twins of different sizes. I like the twist that the smaller sister seems to be the more outgoing one. And you've added some interesting multi-size world building elements to this. I was surprised that things, er, escalated so quickly in chapter 3 but then again, what's a size fetish story without the sexy bits?
Author's Response:
Thank you! Jackie and Lynn have been living rent free in my head for quite a while. The idea of someone growing up with another person that's their mirror image but one is way bigger/smaller than other seemed like it'd make such interesting characters, and I'm excited to finally be writing their story. Having their personalities not line up with their sizes was the extra cherry on top that felt too right not to do. As for worldbuilding, I'm hoping I can do the original story proud and continue its legacy (though, I guess that goes for everything beyond the worldbuilding too)
"Mixed size relationships move at a much faster pace" is a joke line I have planned for a future chapter. It's kind of the nature of this being smut, but I try not to meander too much between the sexy bits. The college setting also helps to speed some relationships along and makes it more believable that some characters are very much down to fuck, but as more characters start to pair up, my goal is to try and have them progress at different rates depending on the personalities involved. I think Mixing Sizes had a decent pace between wholesome dating and intimate sex, so I'm hoping to sort of emulate that here, at least for the time being.