[Report This]Date: January 06 2024 3:26 AM Title: Ch 2. Sweltering Outside and In
Solid second chapter. Jackie with the boys was a really wholesome pair of scenes, and seeing how neighborly the folks in Pierce's neighborhood are was a nice change of pace from my reality. I'm glad Jackie was able to assist with the heavy lifting, really contributing to the group's progress.
Pierce has a foot fetish and a thing for Jackie. That's gonna be good later, and I still think he's boyfriend material.
And then there's Javi. Is he wearing a brand that weaves their clothes from big-nip? I env- I mean, I wish that man a ton of luck.
I was initially sorry to see Lynn rejected - her adventurous personality with a nerdy big RP-ing as a librarian could have been fun - but I'm still holding out hope for Heather down the line. And I'm glad that Lynn and Justine are friends.
I'm loving the idea that tinies default to electric cars while bigs default to gas/petrol. The physics of scale can be quite interesting, and this plays well to the strength of each technology. Also, small businesses with set-ups to accomodate bigs is absolutely adorable, and I think your approach is a great way to go about it given the difference in scale.
TLDR: Great chapter 2, and I'm really looking forward to chapter 3! Also, I'm totally shipping HeaLynn.
Author's Response:
It makes me really happy to see you shipping characters. Part of my goal with these early chapters was to leave things at least somewhat ambiguous as to who winds up with who. I want to give readers the chance to decide on their favorite characters and think about what relationships they'd like to see them in only for me to potentially crush their hopes and dreams later on. Or make them true. I'll guess we'll see.
I'm glad to hear that Pierce makes good bf material. Him and Javi are the hardest characters to write because they aren't giant women and thus aren't inherently interesting. Not that I'm coasting off that for the bigs, but I do have a much easier time making their characters appealing when they start their character sheets with huge charisma buffs by default.
The age-old adage of "watching a man drown while you die of thirst" very much applies to our boy Javi. Being a dreamboat, and young basketball star who can fit in a pocket (or "pocket") will do that to a man. Whether he survives the semester or not, a lot of people will be very envious of his position.
Unfortunately, Lynn and Justine weren't meant to be, but that at least leaves our tiny adventurer open to other possibilities. Perhaps we'll even get to see such possibility as early as the next chapter? Maybe, who knows? (I mean, I know, but I gotta keep that sort of stuff under wraps for now).
Worldbuilding in this and the original are so much fun. Such a disparate society opens up so many problems to be solved, and writing size lit is much more enjoyable than math.
Thanks again for the reviews. I love hearing your thoughts and insights. Hopefully, this story continues to captivate! (And shit, HeaLynn is a good ship name. Way better than Lynnther.)