[Report This]Date: February 21 2024 3:48 AM Title: Ch 1. New Faces
Started reading the first three parts of this story and was instantly hooked on all the characters, they're designed and described so well! Very distinct personalities and styles. I find myself rooting for everyone. I hope Alena finds some well earned self confidence, I'm excited to see Lynne push her out of her comfort zone! The Pierce/Jackie dynamic is adorable, usually I'm pretty impatient with slow burn but this is done so well. Not to mention Javi's dilemma of course!
Then I read the 4th chapter... All this beautiful writing and story was an excuse to nerd out about mecha wasn't it :) you're like Tolkien writing Lord of the Rings just to talk about his cool elf lore
Joking aside, this is quickly becoming one of my favourite series on here. Great work!
Author's Response:
Yeah, I may have gone overboard with chapter 4 lol. I needed a place/event for Pierce and Jackie to spend some time together to build chemistry before I actually kicked off their relationship, and once I decided on anime/gaming convention, the floodgates on all this useless knowledge trapped in the confines of my mind came rushing out. You're regularly scheduled mixed size slice of life should be coming back next chapter without any unnecessary spiel regarding knightmare frames or variable fighters.
I'm glad you appreciate the character designs. It's an oft-overlooked element considering there's no actual visuals, but I do enjoy designing characters, especially their outfits. If I had the time and patience to learn how to draw, I'd truly be unstoppable, but until then words will have to suffice. These characters are a ton of fun to write, though. I was initially scared writing such a large cast, but it's been pretty smooth bouncing them off one another.
I get what you mean about slow burns. I love writing and reading them because when done right I think they lead to much more satisfying payoff, but they can absolutely be tedious if not handled well. Fortunately, I seem to be doing fine with it so far.
Thank you so much for the kind words! And that reminds me I still need to read your latest chapter, so I will try and remedy that some point in the nearish future.
[Report This]Date: January 06 2024 4:30 AM Title: Ch 1. New Faces
Ah, darn, there was one more point on which I meant to comment.
If I'm reading this right, the tiny desks are sitting on the floor at the front of the classroom. This has me a little confused and concerned, as this places them in a prime spot to be stepped on, trupped over, or fallen upon by purpose or accident. I imagine it might also hinder note-taking with the awkward viewing angle for the board. I'm a little surprised there's not a modified big desk with tiny desks arranged upon it, both for visibility of the tinies for the bigs, and for the tinies to see the board.
Sorry for the seeming nitpick, but the practicalities of mixed-size society are one of those things that I dwell on when my mind otherwise goes idle. I'm always curious to see what others come up with, and the reasonings for their approach. I probably shouldn't expound on the various wall-mounted tubs / multi-angle showers / mini water parks I've thought about adding for a tiny resident in a big's shower, but somehow I come back to the subject most mornings when I'm getting ready for work. At least my ideas are better than my singing...
Author's Response:
So, the way it's set up, the tiny desks essentially act as the front of row of seats, with the big desks forming the second rows and beyond. Since tiny desks are obviously smaller, you can fit them all in one row as opposed to the big desks that need multiple rows. There are five tiny desks in front of each big one with spaces between for the aisles, and those tiny desks are two feet in front of the outer edge of the big desks so that their visible and out of range of of most students legs. And there's a good few yards between the front row and the board, so it's not like they're in the front row of a movie theater. I could have sworn I described this in the text, but looking back at it, I clearly didn't, so I might have to edit that in. Granted, you're absolutely right that placing tiny seating on large tables or desks would be a safer bet. My only defense is that such a thing would require lifts for the tinies to access and thus would be less cost effective than simply arranging tiny seating on the floor, but that is admittedly a weak defense considering how much effort the school puts into accommodating both sizes. I'm also coming at this from the angle that this society has had much more time to adjust to mixed size living (unlike the original, the main cast here have lived their entire lives in coexistence) and thus are going to be more cognizant about not stepping or tripping over a tiny row of seats, but this comes with its own problems of me overestimating humanity's ability to not be clumsy around two-inch tall people.
Thanks for the nitpick! I mean that. I nitpick this kind of stuff all the time, and I'm usually good enough at catching my own bullshit, but that sometimes falls through the cracks. If anything bothersome like this pops up in the future, feel free to let me know. I'm not typically one to go back and change things I've already uploaded, but bearing the pain of my mistakes will (hopefully) keep me from making them again in the future.
[Report This]Date: January 06 2024 2:59 AM Title: Ch 1. New Faces
This is a great start to the sequel! Jackie and Lynn are great character achetypes. Between Lynn's adventurous and outgoing personality wrapped uo in her tiny, two-inch body, and Jackie's tiny, caring soul in her lumbering big body, they make an excellent counterpart for each other.
Your supporting characters are great too. Lynn finding a super-tall, half-japanese big to share a desk with in her first class is fun, but more than that, I love that Heather embodies Lynn's adventurous side, while Alena shares Lynn's creative and artistic side. I see romantic potention between Lynn and either, and while I think Alena and Lynn would make a cute couple, I think Heather's height and active nature would make for a dangerous and wonderful pairing.
Melanie seems like a nice-enough touchstone for Jackie if she needs to get away from bigs to reconnect with people her size (spiritually), and Pierce has both drive and boyfriend potential. Michelle is a character with a lot of potential, either to go the way of antagonist or villain, or else to figure out what the tinies need, and grow as a person.
I need to see more of Javi to get a good sense of him, but I'm leaning towards semi-aware player.
Your details are on point. Lynn's tiny pouch in Jackie's shoulder strap is absolutely adorable. Four-limbed Spiders is a rockin' name for a mini-metal band. I'm a little concerned that Alpha-Beta-Phi-Gamma's parties are literally killer for some of the tiny students, but that's likely me projecting all the sorority size stories I've read. I hope. Lynn diving to save her breasts cracked me up. Great scene.
Now that my session has timed out twice, the review is done and I'm moving straight on to chapter 2 - everyone trying to side-track me be damned.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm excited to see you enjoying the sequel, and hope I can continue to deliver. Jackie and Lynn are characters I've been dying to write for a long time now. I had them mostly figured out all the way back around chapter 6 or so of Mixing Sizes, and I'm so happy that I can finally write their story.
The supporting cast were much more recent creations, most of them having gone (and some still going through) many revisions. In terms of the size of the cast, this is going to be my most ambitious story yet (amount of cast, not literal size. I need to be more clear about that given what kind of smut I'm writing here). There'll be the core cast of characters, the ones we see pop up regularly throughout each chapter, but I'll also be populating this world with all sorts of folks with all sorts roles and relations. Seeing your takes on each character, I seem to be doing well enough in characterizing them so far, so that's a relief.
It wouldn't be a size story set in college without some sort of sorority shenanigans, now would it? Literally killing is against the law but there are plenty of activities that dwell in a sweet, ambiguous grey zone mwehehehe.
[Report This]Date: December 19 2023 4:58 AM Title: Ch 1. New Faces
Love this sm!
Author's Response:
Thank you!