Date: February 21 2024 6:51 AM Title: Battle at Osmund's Farm
It took me a month or so of sporadic reading, but I finally caught up!
This whole story is fantastic, but I really feel like this last chapter is especially well done. Your descriptions of this battle were incredibly easy to picture, and between that and the map you included in the author's notes, it's clear you put a lot of thought into how this all played out, which is very much appreciated. It would have been really easy (and completely understandable) to have just written that the soldiers charged the farm and made the battle into just a vorefest (to be sure, it was, thankfully, still a vorefest, just an intricately thought out one with a deep story behind it), so I wanted to give you credit for putting a lot of effort into things like the military's pre-battle formation, how they came out of those positions, the intricate details of Jen moving through the woods while feasting on the western flank, and so many other minor details that you took the time to include to give this battle a very "live" feel, if that makes sense.
Also, like me, you use a lot of words when you write. But very much unlike me, those words aren't at all wasted. With this chapter, in particular, I felt like every syllable served a purpose. Every description were intricate and conveyed clearly not only what was happening but also how those actions affected the characters' surroundings, every line of dialogue built on things established in previous chapters and walked balanced the drama of the battle with bits of humor quite well, and every action taken by the characters (even the nameless ones) made sense and seemed realistic (or as realistic as attacking two roughly 140-foot-tall women with medieval era weaponry can seem, I suppose).
But yeah, like I said, this whole story has been great so far and has had several moments worthy of praise, but this last one just seemed to come together perfectly. I think maybe the action-oriented nature of the chapter displayed some of your talents that maybe weren't needed as much with the more one-sided nature of the previous chapters or the less action-oriented nature (at least so far) of Divinity Lost. In any case, good job!
As for the story as a whole, I'll echo everyone else in praising the relationship between Jen and Kara. I love the complexity of how this developed, as well as the way that, as two people on opposite extremes (Jen's extremely violent nature toward the Lilliputians and Kara's extreme pacifism) has caused the both of them to slowly "move toward the middle" over time. We went from Kara choosing to stay in Jen's boot over the giantess's eating habits to her getting in Soren's face and defending Jen for eating enemy soldiers in a relatively short amount of time. And while I don't think Jen will ever be able to accept the Lilliputians at large as equals, at least on a conscious level (more on that in a minute), her putting Kara in charge of who she can and can't eat is about as big a step in that direction as I think we can expect from her.
While we're on the subject of Kara being the keeper of Jen's stomach, I absolutely adored the fact that Jen felt that she had to get Kara's permission before eating the western flank. The fact that she took her promise to the mini-scholar that seriously in such a critical situation shows just how much she cares for and respects Kara. And it was the cutest prerequisite to that level of bloodlust that I've ever seen!
Between that and threatening to break Sara's legs (before trying to laugh it off when she realized that she needed to find her filter again around her equal-sized friend), Jen's love for Kara really shined through in that scene. Man, I'd hate to be those soldiers in the farmhouse right about now.
Jen, in general, has been a fun, yet surprisingly deep character. Early on, I thought this was going to be just a really good revenge story with rich perspectives of tinies given from time to time. But the emotional rollercoaster that she's gone through throughout the story has been really moving (and incredibly hot at the same time!). I especially loved the use of the language barrier in the earlier chapters, sometimes with Jen not understanding her victims' begging and others with those victims not understanding her actions (like the people taken from the bar and later let go). It was a unique way to get her emotions across and express both her frustrations and short-lived pleasures.
But like I said a few paragraphs back, I don't think Jen will ever be able to consciously see the Lilliputians as humans, even though it's pretty clear that she does on a subconscious level. Honestly, I think if she accepted that they were just like her, it would break her. The things she has done to them in a rage, especially devouring helpless villagers, would be pure evil if they were the same as her, and she's clearly not that. That's why she concluded that they were just food, even as she's explaining that to Kara, who she obviously didn't see as food even then. The consequence of this, though, is that she's going to keep eating them. If she stopped now, that would be acknowledging that she was wrong before, and I think the guilt of that would crush her.
Thankfully, Kara gives her a nice workaround for this. Jen can now keep deluding herself and not eat or have her fun with good, everyday people at the same time. I don't ever foresee Kara abusing her role in this, although she's still growing into it, and I think this battle going on right now is going to alter her perspective a bit more. And if that doesn't, if/when she finds out that Tarkus had that whole village killed, completely undoing all of the work she put in to show that peace was possible (not to mention murdering a whole town's worth of innocent people), that certainly will.
Tarkus is a great villain, by the way. Yeah, the queen is the main villain, and I love that she's so arrogant and easy to hate, but I'm digging the general, He's smart, measured, and logical. At the same time, he takes following orders to the extreme (that could just be the culture the queen instilled in the military, but he didn't even blink when he ordered that town to be killed. That's cold-blooded). That makes him really dangerous. Where I think most people in this society would overlook Kara no matter what, he actually respects her and acknowledges how capable she is, which is why he recognized her role with the giants so quickly and ordered her death as quickly as possible. He has the queen's ruthlessness but none of the arrogance. That's a lethal combination.
Sara is a really fun gentle character. Yeah, she's super nice and wouldn't hurt a fly (on purpose), but she's also ridiculously horny. I mean, she's had Soren and Felicia so far, and it looks like she's got Jen in her sights, too. Give it some time, and she'll find a way to get Kara inside her at some point too, if she can get her away from Jen long enough. Her role in the battle is particularly fun, though, as her refusing to fight makes things more difficult for our heroes but more interesting for the reader. And those accidental killings brought a log of humor to a really tense scene. I'm just curious if she's going to be able to continue her peaceful ways throughout the rest of the story or if she'll have to get her soles dirty at some point in the future.
I love Felicia. There, I said it. We haven't had a ton of time with her yet, but she's pure gold whenever she shows up. This last chapter especially. The way she turned on Soren as soon as Kara defended Jen's eating habits had me rolling! I also love how quickly she just accepted it. I don't know if it was Kara's passion that swayed her or if it's just that she has a thing from Jen too (she picked the perfect time to make that known), but it was nice to see someone judge Jen for how she's treated them versus what she's doing to the people trying to kill them. I'm eager to see how her role might expand as the story progresses.
Soren's pretty likable, and I'm curious if he'll get Sara all to himself like he wants or if he'll have to share her with his sister (at least). His rapport with his dad and sister has been pretty fun, and he's good with Sara. I don't think he's really had his time to shine yet, though. I think his dad's death will probably hit him the hardest, and it'll be interesting to see how he deals with that.
Lastly, I'm intrigued by where you're going with this Nectar of Subjugation angle. I mean, on the surface it looks like there's a clear arc for that to take, but I've noticed that you're pretty good at subverting expectations at opportune times, so I don't think it's a given that Jen gets subjugated at some point. It could really go either way in my mind, so that's created a bit of intrigue for me.
Again, great story so far!
Date: February 19 2024 9:05 AM Title: Battle at Osmund's Farm
Just spent several hours binge reading Echoes of Liliput. I'm hooked in the plot and characters! Not to discourage you from writing them, but I actually found myself blurring through the smuttier parts to find what happens next, because of how anxious I was.
I can't help but find Jen's protectiveness of Kara adorable, even if it's a "the best defense is offense" kind of protection. Absolute mama bear vibes. Hopefully she'll also give her little girlfriend(?) more gentle loving in the future.
There's so much I'm hoping for and looking forward to. I really want to see Jen and Kara continue to grow as people and be happy together. To see how the giants react to microlings (esp. Sarah when she discovers what she did to the refuge) and how Kara hid their existence. To discover what Sarah will do next and how her relationship with the family will progress. I feel for Gwen, I truly do, I don't think she's fully to blame for her worries so far and I hope things get a better for her. Poor woman even lost her husband... which I'm also sad about! I liked the divinely touched prophet, and I wonder how Jen and Sarah will feed themselves without his help. Maybe the answer is obvious, but still. I hope we get to see more of Jaina, that she's ok and that Kara can reconnect with her old friend---and introduce her to her new ones, that'd be both funny and cute.
There's no guarantee that anything I want will happen, of course, but despite all of the death this story has left me in a hopeful mood for its characters.
Apologies for the messy and unstructured review, currently very sleepy... But also very happy. Thank you for writing this.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
Date: February 18 2024 2:01 PM Title: Battle at Osmund's Farm
Miss the chance to have the soldiers asked “Hey Kara, how's it feel to betray your own race?”
Seriously though, Kara is such a capable character throughout the story who showed many positive traits, she is brave, smart and unyielding. But when speaking of the Queen in last chapter, all her rationality seemed to be gone, and that was even after the scout incident in chapter 11 which nearly got her killed.
The death of Osmund is not unforeseeable due to your hint (Well, unless he still has some tricks under his sleeve, I mean he did miraculously save Sarah earlier), but I didn’t expect Kara to go out herself just like that. I know accident and conflict are necessary for the plot of a story, still can’t help but feel a bit frustrated and facepalmed. Now she need Jen to save her ass and Osmund’s family are gonna be so mad at her.
The Queen, being the main antagonist, as I saw how you describe her obsession with size, at first I thought she would grow big with the help of alchemy and has some giantess catfighting with Jen or something during the final confrontation, LOL. Anyway, since the Nectar is completed and I think it is most likely to work successfully (or else those scenes previously would be rather meaningless), now it is quite a ominous situation for Jen and Sarah but the Queen’s plan is still rather unclear, I do look forward to seeing how the story goes.
BTW, there was a comment asked about Brobdingnagians and you avoided the spoiler, actually that’s my biggest curiosity as well. However, so far the story didn’t mention any hints of a bigger species, and if they really appear the power balance would be absolutely broken. So I think the chance for their appearance is very slim, or perhaps the story still has many unrevealed plots and there would be some surprises?
Date: February 08 2024 9:06 PM Title: Lost in Translation
Jen and Kara are so good together! Jen is my favorite kind of giantess - brutal, with a soft spot for someone special. The scene where Jen puts Kara on a throne and Kara has her break an ankle was amazing. I definitely want to see Jen dish out more punishments beyond the usual stepping on or devouring, and I hope Kara participates more.
You’ve done a good job playing up the conflict between Jen’s brutality and Kara’s pacifism. I can’t wait to see where it goes. I think it’s more likely that Kara becomes more violent than Jen stops entirely, but I suspect both will change each other. Jen has shown willingness to restrain herself, like with the villagers that pampered her, but I still don’t think she cares about most Lilliputians. I don’t see how a relationship with Kara is possible if that doesn’t change, unless Kara goes full evil too.
Thank you for commenting! Jennifer is the whole reason I set out to write this story. I'm with you, brutal giantess, but kind and endearing to someone tiny they care about, is so awesome to imagine.
I, too, am excited to see how Kara evolves with Jen as the story progresses. You can kinda already see how Jennifer is changing because of Kara. But Kara has mostly remained the same person. Maybe in the next chapter, Kara will start to change *wink* *wink*
Date: February 05 2024 7:25 AM Title: Lost in Translation
Wow, I really felt you were getting back into this story better than the last chapter. I was very engaged with Jennifer's relationship with Kara. I felt bad that no one is believing Soren, but I believe him! I see the foreshadowing that a feast is going to be had of the surrounding army, but the big question in my mind is will Sarah partake when seeing Jennifer do it.... I am on the edge of my seat about this.
Date: January 30 2024 9:16 AM Title: Kara
Interesting development for sure, that she has become normalised to the horrific acts of cruelty that she’s done to people around her. It’s also however shown to us that it was a last resort of sorts to get to this point, so it does help her case a bit.
Am interested in seeing how the new character in the new perspective will be integrated to our protagonist.
Date: January 30 2024 8:14 AM Title: Giant in a Tiny World
Very cool take on an otherwise well known concept. The writing so far has been superb and reads very naturally. The detail is neither too much or too little, it strikes a balance that allows the reader to both envision the world but also not feel like a slog to read.
Am sad to see in terms of plot, what just happened in this chapter. But am excited to see where we go from here too!
Date: January 27 2024 5:49 AM Title: The Experiment
Nice to see us back in Lilliput. I love that translation will be able to happen with Soren's family and Sarah. Very keen to see where the plot will go from here. Hopefully the family can put into context for Jennifer, why the troops were attacking them, and explaining about the other giants setting the only context the Lilliputians had even known.
My motivation is slowly creeping back. There's a lot more story to unfold here---I just want to make sure I do it right. Baby steps. Baby steps. I'll get there eventually.
Date: January 27 2024 3:06 AM Title: Catching Up
I don't care if it was short. It was very good. This is the best story going right now. Hopefully this is motivation motivation.
Thanks for the motivational help. I'm getting there. The relationship between Jen and Kara is reminding me why I started writing this story. I forgot how much I love Kara's character.
Date: January 17 2024 6:26 AM Title: The Experiment
Excellent so far! I really enjoy Jen and Kara’s dynamic. You’ve done a good job making their progression believable. I hope Kara continues to get corrupted and listens to lots more people screaming inside Jen, but I also like that she’s standing up to her.
Thank you for your comment! The relationship between Jen and Kara is the highlight of this story. Kara's character will definitely evolve throughout the story.
Date: December 16 2023 11:07 PM Title: The Experiment
Very glad to see Jennifer and Sarah finally together. Also very much looking forward to Jennifer getting her hands on the Queen!!!!
Exciting times ahead! The Queen will get really worried when she learns about Jennifer and Sarah roaming her kingdom.
Date: December 16 2023 10:33 AM Title: Old & New Friends
Wow, this story was great already. Now it's about to get even better. Cannot wait to see the next chapter.
Aww, thank you! I'm always happy to hear people enjoying this novel. I've already started typing the next chapter!
Date: December 09 2023 2:54 PM Title: Taste of Harmony
I like smut and plot so I love this story :) Excellent work.
Hey Nyx! We use to chat back in the day, when I went by a different name. I'm not sure if you still have access to your gmail, but I sent you an email where we use to chat. :)
Date: November 26 2023 8:05 PM Title: The Experiment
Re-posting my reviews to fix the rating error! Been really enjoying this story and get excited with every new chapter. Loving the plot/smut combo, I always enjoy a good slow burn, and the plot is keeping me hooked! Can’t wait to see what comes next!
Hey, thanks for doing that! I'm glad you're enjoying this little tale. All these comments give me motivation to keep on writing.