After reading your response, I just wanted to clarify my comments on Stella's game. When I said it was worse than I thought, I was referring specifically to the things that were revealed by Stella. I think your execution of those segments came off flawlessly, especially after reading all of the things that you were hoping to convey about her. In particular, starting with Stella's parents helped paint a picture of how a person like this could come to be, as the combination of a strict, demanding, manipulative mother and a weak, incompetent father willing to spoil his daughter makes someone like the would-be intern more plausible, I think.

I just wanted to make sure that my comment wasn't taken as a criticism of your writing in these segments, which, again, I thought was phenomenal.

But while I'm writing another review, I also had some more thoughts on your comments about Claire. Morality is fun, mostly due to its subjective nature. And I agree that Claire is a good person overall (and that she's a deep character, as I've been intrigued by her from the start). But, in my view, imposing this game on Stella was still an immoral choice. I see what you're saying about consent, but I think the misleading nature of how she obtained it from Stella needs to be considered as well. Let's say Claire sat down with Stella before handing her that drink and said this:

"So this drink will remove some of your inhibitions and compel you to say whatever is on your mind. Once you drink it, I'm going to show you pictures of several people I have reason to believe that you have wronged. Then I'm going to present you with questions that will more or less force you to tell me your thoughts about and actions against each one. Once we're finished, I, a complete stranger to you, will sit in judgment of your actions and determine which shrinking solution to give you as punishments for your past misdeeds, the worst outcome for you being shrunken to one inch tall for two whole days. [insert whatever the plan for Stella was after the shrinking here.] Are you ready to begin?"

Can you honestly say that Stella would agree to that? I have a hard time believing that she would, even if it meant losing out on that internship (although I'm pretty sure she's smart enough to figure out she was set up by Victoria at that point anyway). And I'm pretty sure Claire felt the same way, hence the fact that she resorted to deceiving the would-be intern in order to get her to go along with this.

This is why I think Claire was in the wrong here, although I do believe her intentions were noble. And again, one morally bad choice has started to lead her down a dark path with those noble intentions, with her starting to consider that the solution should be used to punish certain people.

Honestly, I think the morally right thing for Claire (and the Fab Four in general) to do in this situation was reject Victoria's idea in the first place and not allow Stella to be sent at all. Now, Victoria is in a position to pressure them to do this, sure, but sometimes doing the right thing involves making sacrifices.

So I guess what I'm saying is that Claire is a good person who has fallen into a moral trap and made a mistake. To be fair, that mistake might turn out for the best, as it allowed for the discovery of Tara and Stella just so happens to be a terrible human being who deserves whatever is coming to her. But I don't think that makes Claire's actions here right. Like I said before, in my view, it's the actions of the person committing the act that matter, not those of the one having the act committed on them that determines the morality of that first person's choice.

Thanks for humoring me on this. I love philosophical debate, and I the scenario you constructed here is ripe for that.

Wow. You've already written Victoria's big reveal? You're even more of a nonlinear writer than I am. I jumped around a lot during each of the first two chapters of my story, but I don't know if I'm ambitious enough to write that far ahead. You know, I thought I might have been overestimating Victoria a bit so far, but the way you worded this makes me think I may actually be underestimating her a bit. I'm kind of excited to see this scene now.

Ironically, you used a word that I had never heard before in your author's notes. I have never in my life had cause to reference more than a singular thesaurus, so while I don't need you to define it for me, thesauri is a new one for me.

Also, I love that your elegant, classy word defined in said author's notes shared a sentence with the term "fuck-filth," a word of equal class and elegance.

As far as the smut segments of this chapter go, once again you were as on-point with your descriptions as you were creative. That little "love triangle" with Missy, Titty, and Ronnie was really easy to picture, and the idea of Missy using Ronnie as a glorified strap-on while both being eaten out and working Titty's clit simultaneously was such an inventive idea that I would have ever thought of, let alone the idea of how you incorporated Jen and Dick into the mix.

Better yet, I thought the way you broke up each of those segments did a fantastic job of conveying Titty's scale to the little ones. For the most part, those at each section of her body got their own separate segment, which subtly made it seem as though each character (or characters in Missy and Ronnie's case) were in completely different locations, as opposed to just being in the same room, let alone the same body. This made Titty seem positively monumental by comparison. And with the Titty segments broken up between the Claire/Stella ones, I found the layout of this chapter to be quite clever.

You also captured that effect I mentioned above extremely well with the Tara segment and the start of the one directly after it. We were given a look at Tara's huge struggle to stimulate Stella and make herself known to the others, only to see Stella be into it briefly, then slightly annoyed, only to adjust her by rubbing her crotch on the chair. That made Tara's size seem more insignificant than any direct description could have. It was the literary equivalent of the camera slowly zooming out on Tara fighting for her life all the way out to see Stella absently rub her crotch slightly.

It was nice to not only check in with Tara for the first time since she was taken but get a bit of backstory on her as well. I was thinking she might be losing her mind in Stella's sex, but I was impressed with the way she was able to keep her mental state together despite being shrunk and turned into an inch-tall sex toy. It sucks that she has to deal with these traumatic events after going through so much shit in life already, but it was good to see that her past hardships helped her cope with her situation and continue to fight.

Also, Tara said my favorite line in the whole chapter:

I might not be into girls, but ... with a boss like Titty, I know my way around a vagina.

That must have been an interesting orientation.

Stella's game turned out even worse than I thought it was going to. I assumed the girl she bullied into killing herself would be one of the pictures she would be shown, but fuck, that story was rough. Pretty much all of the other ones were, too. You had teased up until this point that the would-be intern was a nasty person, but now I know that when you construct a villain, you go all out. I respect that. The complicated villain has her place, but sometimes you just want a good old fashion embodiment of evil to root against, and you certainly delivered on that front here.

I also both agree with and like Claire's assessment of Stella. She's not a master manipulator. She's not dumb by any means, but she's been able to pull off all of this terrible shit because society is quick to judge and doesn't ask questions. I mentioned before that I didn't think Stella was particularly great at thinking things through, and it felt good to see Claire (a character that has really shined these last few chapters, by the way) give me a bit of vindication here.

But as much as I like Claire, Kim is now my favorite character in this entire story (and that's saying something). We didn't get a ton of her this chapter, but the small streamer's gradually changing reactions as Stella revealed more and more of how disgusting she is mirrored my own pretty well (Claire's shock and concern for Kim and her safety fit her character really well, though). And then at that huge cliffhanger, where Claire was both literally and metaphorically choking, the way Kim took control of the situation and came up with a crazy plan that put herself in danger to save a total stranger was just awesome! I've been liking Kim for a while now, as you well know, but that was the moment where I realized just how much I enjoy her character. She just has that neutrally controlling demeanor about her and between that and her natural confidence, she just won't let panic get to her. It's really admirable.

Since I mentioned Kim, I have to say that I noticed that Jen was having more fun with Titty than I predicted she would, although she did still have Kim on the back of her mind. I think this makes sense, though, given Jen's youthful exuberance. She's focusing on what's directly in front of her, burying the unpleasantness that happened with Kim and the potential consequences of said unpleasantness. I think she would have felt hollow after it was all said and done, though (I say would have, because I'm pretty sure she's about to have some bigger concerns based on that cliffhanger).

Looking at Claire in this chapter led to a very interesting philosophical debate in my mind. You've mentioned a couple of times how this game would fall into morally questionable territory, and you were completely correct. So regardless of her intentions, was Claire morally okay to drug Stella and drag her darkest secrets out of her?

To figure out where I stood on that, I had to ask myself which is more important to consider in a situation like this: the moral values of the person an act is being committed against or the act itself? If I didn't make it clear above, I don't feel sorry for Stella at all. That she has been exposed and will face the consequences of her actions (no matter how the next part turns out) isn't something I'm going to shed any tears over. In fact, you could easily argue that society will be better off now that the dark truth about her is out there.

But, from a moral perspective, is it really about Stella?

Claire has used her knowledge of chemistry to extract information that Stella would have never willfully given under normal circumstances. Are we, as human beings, not allowed to have secrets? Or can only the "good" people keep their private moments private? Who determines where that line is?

Let's say that Stella wasn't a terrible, terrible person. Let's say that her answers were mostly pleasant and that it turned out that the suicide she caused was actually an unfortunate misunderstanding for which she feels incredibly guilty. Would that have made Claire's actions any more or less moral?

Ultimately, for me, it was Claire's actions and not Stella's deserving of retribution that dictated how I viewed the morality of the situation. I think Claire was in the wrong here. I don't think that makes her a bad person (it makes her even more interesting, though), and she does have good intent by doing this to Stella, but none of that changes the fact that she serious compromised ethical standards to justify this. That can lead even the most noble of people down a dark path, which I think we saw a glimpse of in Claire's thoughts after hearing the tale of Emerald Greene.

Claire actually begins to consider using the shrinking solution to "punish people like this in a manner they truly deserve," which seems like the exact kind of thing the Fab Four have been trying to make sure doesn't happen with their product up until this point. Yeah, she says that she won't do that without the consent of the others, and sure, you could argue that this reaction is more about just how much Stella's actions have affected Claire, but no matter how you look at it, even considering punishing those who "truly deserve" it is an ethical barrier from which there's no return once you cross it. Making yourself (or your group of friends) the grand arbiters of right and wrong, of who's deserving of such punishment, is a one-way ticket to corruption.

But even with everything else going on in this chapter, I found myself constantly thinking about one character, despite the fact that she's barely even mentioned in this chapter at all: Victoria Vane. I'm going to go ahead and double down on my prediction that all of this is part of her plan, even if the exact happenings weren't necessarily foreseen.

I started thinking about this again when we looked in on Chae-Won. You see, Chae-won isn't very smart when it comes to planning criminal activities. Her "brilliant" plan to just break in to the sex shop; steal the shrinking solution, Melissa, and as many other tinies as possible; gamble that the dean of her college is cool with human trafficking; and coerce Melissa to transfer ownership of the business over to her under duress is actually pretty terrible. Not terrible as in evil (although it's that, too) but terrible as an awful. It has virtually no chance of succeeding. Not only that, but she doesn't know how long the solution lasts, if a gun can even stop Aidra, (again) if the dean is going to accept her generous gift of tiny sex slaves and not report her to the authorities instead, or who the companies partners even are. Somehow, I don't see Victoria being cool with her sister being kidnapped and tortured, which could lead to a lot of trouble for the Fab Four Fluids' "new owner." 

Then I began to wonder if her involvement wasn't part of Victoria's plan. I don't think it would be too much of a stretch to assume that Victoria would have looked into other professors in Claire's department and put together some information on Chae-Won. And given what we've learned about Stella in this chapter, would it really be so crazy to assume that the would-be intern would find out about and try to use the disgruntled professor to her advantage? For all we know, Stella might have been informed on who Chae-Won was when she got her information on the Fab Four.

But Victoria would probably know enough about Chae-Won to know that she would try something stupid and likely fail, much like I think she's expecting out of Stella. And going back to Stella herself, I don't think it would have been crazy for Victoria to assume hearing about Stella's past would make someone like Claire consider some "alternative uses" for the shrinking solution.

Again, I'm not saying Victoria is omniscient and knew exactly how things would play out, but I don't think she has to in order to know that her plan is going to work. I think she wanted to create a situation that would cause the Fab Four to question themselves and their product and maybe even feel some guilt. Whether the end game is to put them in a mental state to want out of the business and give her sole control of the product or to simply bring them around to her way of thinking, I think getting in the Fab Four's heads is the ultimate goal here. And Elise is hanging around to get samples and whatnot, just in case things don't go according to plan.

I'm going to further predict that Melissa is the one that sees through that plan and keeps the Fab Four on the right path. She knows her sister well, and while the other three are wallowing in extreme guilt over Tara and anger over Stella (I'm really wondering how far they're going to go with her once things settle down), Missy is probably going to have the most clear head of the group (then again, she might feel guilt over the fact that her creation is what caused the problem in the first place, but I personally don't think she'll dwell on that too much).

But yeah, a couple of huge cliffhangers you've left us with here. It looks like we're going to find out whether or not Aidra is bulletproof (I don't know why she would be, but you never know). If she's not, the immediate future isn't looking too good for our favorite orgy. Take as long as you need before getting the next one out, obviously, but I'm really eager to see where things go from here!

The phonetic alphabet is fun. That authorization code makes a lot of sense in particular, as, based on what we learned about her in Turnabout Livy really is a glutton for punishment.

Speaking of that, I mentioned last chapter how Claire and Titty were going to be beating themselves up later after they find out what's happening to Tara, and you turned that shit to 11 by adding Olivia to the mix as well. She may end up feeling even worse than either of the other two, which is ironic because she's the only one out of that trio that didn't make a decision that inadvertently put the one-inch goth in this situation. Yet she'll still feel tremendous guilt over not letting Aidra stop the whole thing then and there, as well as for putting off checking Aidra's reports, which I'm guessing would have made the reality of the situation pretty clear. Of course, Livy had every reason to believe it was just a mistake by Aidra, as she truly thought every person in the building was accounted for. I don't think that's going to matter to her much when the time comes, though.

By the way, between that and Claire's assumptions as to why Stella isn't able to stay still, this chapter did a masterful job of building tension around Tara's struggle without even mentioning her or showing Stella's perspective once. The ignorance of Livy and Claire's perspectives was so frustrating (which I want to clarify is a good thing) and I find myself legitimately caring and worrying about what's going to happen to Tara, someone we've seen mentioned in only two chapters so far. I'm really impressed by that.

And despite neither this story or Turnabout having a particularly dark tone (which the latter very easily could have, but didn't), this story has been written in a way that I'm don't feel like it's a sure thing that the mini-goth is going to come out of this alive. That uncertainty gives this story a nice sense of tension.

I still think Aidra might save the day for Tara by the end of things, as some of those things that Livy was trying to keep out of the sexbot might end up doing more good than harm. I could also see Stella telling on herself in this uninhibited state, but that's not a given either.

Seeing Kim uninhibited was refreshing. Up until now, and I think I've said this a lot, she has been a paragon of control without being controlling. Even in this chapter, up until she took a dip in Stella's drink, it felt like Kim was comfortable and politely assertive, even though she's sharing the room with two strangers, one of which she has been told is likely a terrible person. There's a certain grace about her, and to see her go from that to just blurting out whatever's on her mind feels like we're peeling back that layer of elegance and seeing a fun sort of bluntness from her. I really enjoy that, and I hope we get to see a bit more of that, even if Stella's game obviously takes precedence.

Claire and Kim are also really cute interacting with each other. Kim is inquisitive and mature enough that Claire can take her seriously but has just enough of that silly, video game mentality to break past that cold professor exterior and let Claire show her softer side a little bit. And, in turn, Kim is relaxed enough around Claire, even after such a short amount of time, that she feels comfortable showing that silly side of her. This is especially nice to see after the emotional drama she dealt with last chapter.

Stella's game sounds really interesting. I'm curious to see where it goes. I'm guessing that, since she's going to be compelled to talk about each person by the concoction, Stella isn't going to actually going to improve her size based on how she answers. And I think we know who at least one of those pictures is going to be of ...

I think that's the first thing I've seen actually phase Titty. Great planning by Team Tiny. She's expected sexy fun time and gets tickled instead. I just hope Richard holds on to whatever part of her ear that he can, because that head is going to be moving.

Speaking for myself, I didn't mind all the set-up at all. In fact, I just kind of enjoy reading about these characters in general. Also, while there was no smut, you did have a shrunken woman take a dip in someone's drink, so you get points for that at least.

You know, at the start of this chapter I started to form a bit of a conspiracy theory about Stella, and by the end of it, I've become thoroughly convinced that I'm right on this.

In short, I think Victoria sent Stella there knowing that she would do something bad and that she would get caught doing it.

In long (no one ever says this, but it should work as an opposite for in short, right? RIGHT?!), Stella's situation struck me as odd from the start. It just didn't make sense to me that someone who wasn't good enough to be selected for one internship would be given such a massive assignment (one obviously very important to Victoria) in order to prove that she deserved a different internship with that same company. But I figured suspension of disbelief, don't take works of fiction too seriously, blah blah blah, and I kind of wrote it off and just went with it.

Once Stella started interacting with Tara and we saw how far the would-be intern is willing to go just for "leverage" (it seems like it was really more for fun than anything else), I started to wonder if maybe Victoria had anticipated that Stella would do something like what she did to the poor goth (I'm not saying the elder Vane predicted that she would do that specifically, but she probably anticipated that the college girl would try something along those lines).

Claire revealing that not only does Stella have a criminal background and other shady features to her past but that she received this information FROM Victoria all but confirmed, at least in my mind, my budding theory.

Now, why would Victoria send someone if she assumed/anticipated that she would do something so vile? I think it's a case of hitting not one, not the usual two, but three birds with one stone:

1. It'll probably scare off the other investors. I mean, despite all the fun they're having now, if they find out that Stella used the potential product to shrink and rape a girl, in an area that was supposed to be completely supervised no less, I have a hard time seeing them want to be a part of something that could turn out so badly.

Thus, Victoria would be the ONLY investor, which obviously would give her more say in how things are run going forward.

2. It'll make the Fab Four second-guess everything they thought about the shrinking solution. Seeing the abuse of their product first-hand, and, again, under their own supervision, is probably going to at least make them question their current business model. Hell, they might feel so guilty that they don't want to be involved in the future of the shrinking solution whatsoever, which, again, would likely lead to Victoria having complete control of said future.

3. I really think Victoria has something personal against Stella. The fact that Ms. Vane outted Stella to the Fab Four and wants them to do something that just sounds borderline-ethical (although probably not too bad, given how soft-hearted the group is) makes me rethink that earlier scene where Stella was admiring everything on the private jet. She thought it was Victoria showing her what she could have if she joined the company, when I'm now pretty sure it was a huge middle finger, showing her what she'll never have.

Maybe Victoria was close to the person who killed herself because of Stella's bullying (I could see her trying to bring in the kid of one her rivals down the road; that's a hell of a power move). Or perhaps Victoria just despises bullies like Stella. I don't know, but I feel pretty comfortable saying that there's something more there. 

As for Stella herself, I was just saying last chapter how Chae-Won was starting to look like the villain of the story, but the would-be intern had the proverbial "hold my beer" moment here. Damn! That girl is dark. And it wasn't just her terrible actions that sold that point, she was straight-up despicable when she owned the narrative. From her relishing in Tara's desperation to the way she quickly started thinking of the goth girl as an it rather than a she, the way Stella enjoys using people as though their mere possessions that exist only for her pleasure is the stuff great villains are made of!

Unfortunately for her, though, I don't think she has really thought any of this through. She wants to eat Tara? She doesn't even know how growing back works yet, and how is she so sure that a tiny's enhanced durability won't survive her digestive tract? Come to think of it, didn't Claire say that those crystals only last for 15 minutes, and wasn't Stella in the bathroom for, oh, about 15 minutes? Stella had better be careful, or things could get ... messy for her really soon.

As for the other big development in this chapter, man, you (and Terry) really nailed Jen and Kim in this chapter! I mentioned in my last review that I didn't think that crazy shrunken sex alone was going to be enough to bring the together like it did Ronnie and Dick, but I think this fight has actually moved them pretty significantly in that direction, even if it doesn't seem like it now.

I now feel like I have a much better understanding of where Jen is at in all of this. Yeah, what she said was really hurtful, even if not intentionally so, but she clearly needed to put that stuff out there, and the absurdity of the situation just caused her to start spewing it all out. This was confirmation for me that Jen feels the same way about Kim that Kid does about her; the only difference is that Kim knows how she feels and Jen doesn't fully understand her feelings.

Jen's rant started off as a simple comment about how much more exciting this sex was than their usual fair, but it turned into an airing of grievances. Subconsciously, Jen is frustrated with how things have gone in the bedroom with Kim; she wants more, but she doesn't realize it yet. I think her quest for her family's acceptance has left her with cock on the brain, so her love for Kim is buried so deep that Jen isn't consciously aware of it.

But that love is there, and, on some level, she know Kim is perfect for her. Except in bed. She doesn't like the vanilla routine the have, and that frustrates her to no end. What's worse, she doesn't even know she's frustrated, because she's not consciously thinking of Kim as a partner. So that frustration is also buried deep, only now manifesting itself unintentionally though Jen's rant.

Ultimately, this is a good thing, however, as Kim made clear that she also wants more in the bedroom. She was just afraid that trying new things would scare Jen away, that her younger friend took comfort in their routine. Ironically, she thought she was giving Jen what she wanted but was really pushing her away. Now that it's out there, they can move past it.

But Jen's not quite there yet. She knew she hurt Kim, I she doesn't yet understand why she did it. And now she's trying to move on in her own way, focusing on ravaging a kaiju succubus and blaming Kim for not being there with her to take advantage of this once-in-a-lifetime opportunity (although, let's be honest, if they were willing to fly out again, Titty would be down to do this again pretty much anytime). I have a feeling that Jen isn't going to enjoy her time in the now nearly as much as she thinks she is.

And as for Kim not taking advantage of said opportunity, I don't think she'll regret it at all. Unlike Jen, she knows exactly what she wants and doesn't need to experiment around. That's why she was okay with their routine. It doesn't matter to her what she does nearly as much as who she's doing it with. This is why Jen's words about this new experience hit so hard, they emphasized everyone else involved but Kim. Between that and Jen making sex with her sound like a chore, it makes perfect sense that Kim feels like a pet (and this is a pretty powerful metaphor, given the aura of control that Kim has exuded up to this point; it really shows how much Jen means to her).

But I think Jen is finally on the cusp of understanding this for herself, and from there, it's only a matter of convincing Kim that she feels the same way.

There's a lot of really interesting arcs in this story (and they've been really well paced and balanced out so far), but this Kim and Jen one has really stolen the show for me.

Let me also echo Terry's review by saying that your descriptions of one-inch Dick's view of the world were really on the mark. You conveyed his scale so well both in physical terms and in how he was perceiving everything around him. Not only was this really well done, but the more drastic size difference plays especially well against the larger tiny sizes that we've seen so far.

It was really interesting to compare Claire's "nothing can go wrong" speech with Livy's from last chapter. It's amazing the hubris of not being worried at all over the prospect of a known criminal and suspected bad person abusing the shrinking gummies she intentionally left out despite the fact that she was all over Livy about every little thing that could go wrong with Aidra. She's so worried about someone else making a critical mistake that she can't even consider that something she didn't anticipate could (and, in fact, did) happen. I still don't know what's going to happen with Aidra (or whether it will be a good or bad thing), but I feel pretty safe in saying that Claire will feel so much worse about the cost of her mistake than Livy will for Aidra's actions, even if they do turn out to lead to something terrible (which, again, I'm not necessarily convinced they will).

I don't want to come down too hard on Claire, though. I still really enjoy her character, and her considerate nature toward Kim was really endearing. And I get that she needed some confirmation that Stella was as bad as Victoria says she is (I wouldn't just take the elder Vane's word for it, either). It's just unfortunate that a simple lack of communication and a bit of hubris have led to such terrible consequences.

Also, I can't imagine any of the other three members of the Fab Four are going to be too thrilled to find out that Titty invited Tara there in the first place. I mean, based on the only other time we saw Tara, it was made pretty clear that they were trying to keep the shrinking solution a secret from the goth girl. Yeah, Claire shouldn't have used such a careless test, but Titty never should have had Tara there, either.

And lastly (I know, this is ridiculously long, right?), I just wanted to note that it was clever to have Tara's piercings not shrink with her. It makes perfect sense, but I never would have thought of that, and it took me by surprise. Good thing tinies heal fast!

Yo, this chapter's ending was dope. I thought for a second that Missy was going to give in to the domme side, but the Aidra tag-in was *chef's kiss*. Missy's inner conflict was really entertaining, understanding the logical course of action while her inner domme craved for the sexy to play out. 

I liked how Kim processed her new surroundings through gamer terminology. Overall, you do a good job of playing with the narration to suit whichever character's perspective we're reading (like Claire definitely not intentionally avoiding glancing at the succubus in the corner). As a side-note, I like the word "mélange." Very sexy word choice.

Shrunken amazon was a ton of fun. It's cool seeing different tinies of different scales interact like that, and I love seeing it both from Claire's perspective (where Jen and Kim don't seem that different) and Kim's (where the size difference is much more apparent). 

In regards to what we discussed about the whole TittyxRonniexDick thing, kudos to sticking to your guns, and I think adding the paragraph in which you describe what could have happened was an excellent choice. Even if truncated, that description offers the reader the juicy details they'd want from that scene without having to force the characters down a path you don't think they should take.

I was going to call bullshit on Aidra's anti-ramwhateveritscalled not protecting against the exact things it needs to protect against as contrived, but you did a fine job justifying why Olivia set themselves up for potential catastrophic failure in her last paragraph of explanation, so I'll rescind that critique.

A minor nitpick: there were a decent amount of times in the Kim/Jen where it got confusing which character you referring to, whether due to typo, incorrect name use, or vague pronouns. There was one instance where you referred to one of them as Ken and that got a chuckle out of me.

The Chae-won segment bugged me, though, and has me questioning my spatial awareness of the scene. Has the demonstration been visible from the street this whole time? It's been a minute since I read whichever chapter this started in, so forgive me if I'm misremembering, but I thought the demonstration was happening in a backroom away from prying eyes. How is Chae-won able to see the scene in such detail from outside the shop's front window? That aside, it seems unreasonable that Claire and the others would be demonstrating their secret new invention in a location that's visible to anyone with a camera on the sidewalk, so I feel like I must be misunderstanding something here. 

Excellent use of the word schlong, first of all! It's a classic I thought long forgotten.

I have to say, Missy showed a bit more of a dark side here than I expected. I knew she could get a bit dark with her domme side, but considering allowing things to go on with Ronnie when she was pretty sure the tiny assistant was having issues was surprising to me. I mean, we were starting to wander into rape territory at the end there.

Now, to be fair, given the "atmosphere" in the room, it would likely be pretty easy to get lost in your lust and not think clearly. In fact, based on Ronnie's reaction right before Titty started her "descent," I'm pretty sure Missy would have had some serious regrets afterward had she allowed this to continue.

Of course, we don't know what she would have done, as Aidra stepped in before she could react. I'm guessing Titty almost stomping her flat, whether coming that close intentionally to tease the tiny student or accidentally while lost in her lust, delayed any effort Missy might have made to put the kibosh on things.

This isn't a complaint that Missy was acting out of character, however. It was just interesting to see Missy's thought process in that situation, and it makes me think that maybe Missy is just a little bit more like her sister than she would care to admit.

As for Titty, it's obvious that she was so horny that she didn't even notice Ronnie decline the invitation to her "holy place." Said invitation was really more of a formality than an actual question, so the giant succubus clearly didn't pay attention to her response. Honestly, I don't think Titty could even comprehend the notion that somebody doesn't wouldn't want to get inside her.

And also, at least Titty owned the fucking pun! No more of this "pun unintended, hehe" shit!

I can see what you mean about plot threads weaving together. It looks like shits about to hit the fan and from multiple angles, too!

Hearing Olivia unknowingly describe what's likely to happen with Aidra when telling Claire why those things can't happen was both enjoyable and nerve-wracking. Any conversation that involves our robot overlords obtaining sentience and experimenting with bioweapons and shrinking tech is obviously a fun one. But yeah, hearing a protagonist unwittingly explain what (at least potentially) terrible thing is about to happen is always a bit unsettling, and I don't think we see enough of that nowadays, so it was certainly welcome here.

And now that Aidra is awake, I'm pretty intrigued to see just how much of Olivia's scenario (or anti-scenario might be a better word?) is going to play out.

I really like how entitled Chae-Won is here. She has absolutely nothing to do with this project (it's not even a project for the university), but she feels like she's entitled to get some credit for it because Claire chose a student over her to work on it. Now, just seconds after finding out shrinking is a thing, she's already looking for opportunities to steal the shrinking solutions and fantasizing about her "enemies" being tiny and at her mercy. She's very quickly gone from a character on the periphery to a serious, serious threat, and I love the absolute pettiness that serves as her motivation. Sometimes a simply villain is more enjoyable than a complex one with understandable reasons guiding their actions.

And who the hell knows what Stella is doing right now. Is she plotting something? Running scared? Actually using the bathroom? It's interesting that it was noted that she wasn't there and casually so.

But while Chae-Won's selfishness is giving her the makings of a great villainess, Kim's selfishness was something I found myself cheering. It's obvious Jen wants to go explore Dick's giant, well, dick (and that might have actually helped Ronnie's situation, actually), but Kim isn't about to give up her Jen time, and good for her! Kim was super possessive of Jen before she even realized Jen wasn't a body pillow, using her for comfort as she adjusted to her shrinking. I'm really pulling for Kim to break through that barrier with Jen, but I'm not sure if one shrunken-sexy-time session is going to be enough to do that (unlike with Richard and Ronnie).

Hopefully it'll move things in the right direction, though.

Speaking of Kim and Jen's time together, I've mentioned your smutty creativity before, but I have to bring it up again here. After several chapters (and the entire previous story) focusing on more extreme size differences, we got to see an amazon Kim use her two-inch height advantage to ravage Jen and do so in a very creative way. Lifting Jen up by her ass to eat her out almost like one does a watermelon is actually a pretty unique way to go about it, I think, and the whole thing was described beautifully. Then Jen uses a sucked-down sexed-up gummy cock to fuck her best friend and occasional lover, which is certainly not what I was expecting!

I'm eager to see what Jen does once she's the big one (assuming everything hasn't gone to shit by that point). Will she take on a more dominant role, or is tiny Kim still going to find a way to keep control of things?

Also, as I mentioned your descriptions, you had some really unique ones here. One of my favorites was Kim describing Olivia sitting on the bed as an amusement park attraction so tall that she would say "fuck it" and leave because there are too many stairs. I feel like a lot of descriptions get recycled through these giantess fetish stories (and there's nothing wrong with that; in fact, I find that some of these can carry an almost Pavlovian effect), so different ways to describe size tend to really stand out for me. This was probably the most unique, yet relatable one that I've seen yet. Well done!

And finally (I know, right?) I wanted to say that I appreciated the little explanation at the start when Claire noted the details about the FDA and patenting for the shrinking solution. This story has been very detail oriented, so I wasn't surprised that these minor details worked their way into the story, but I felt I should acknowledge my appreciation that you've put that much thought into your work.

Oh (extra finally, I guess), and Claire trying to not perv on Titty was cute and funny!

Now, I'm eager to see what Ronnie picks as Titty's punishment next chapter (you know, once she's able to speak again) and which Claire, erm, I mean, person is assigned to dole it out!

Absolutely worth the wait.

The general pacing here is really good, both within the chapter and the story as a whole, from the steady build to last chapters explosive release to this chapter's mellow intermission before ramping up again. I really liked the use of repetition in the opening section (specifically, detailing his busy lifestyle and describing Ronnie's body), really made that segment stand out to me. I also liked the focus on temperature regarding Jen's segments. It adds an extra layer to the scene's movements while simultaneously emphasizing how small she is (and descriptions of breathing on tinies always gets a thumbs up).

I'd compare this chapter to sitting down to eat a full course meal, only to finish it, full and satisfied, and realize that was just the appetizer. Get to the halfway point of the chapter, turns out there are two more feasts worth of high-quality smut still to go. Nah, make that three or four.

Every sentence was packed full of detail, and it was a delight to read the whole way through. There was some really creative sequences here: Titty rubbing Jen against her breasts with her forked tongue, Titty dominating Kim's ear, all the nipple grinding, "breastslide," the waterslide of spit into Kim's panties, tribbing and sixty-nining with Jen in the mix, so on and so forth. It's wild how fresh and exciting everything here was; even well-played out concepts felt like I was reading them for the first time.

Wordplay, vocab, alliteration, etc. were all on full force here, making a satisfying read in more ways than one.

Claire's minor role in this chapter was very amusing.

At this point, I may as well stamp every review with "I love Titty. She's the best. Fuck."

So yeah, good chapter.

I totally feel you on coming up with new size comparisons. Conveying difference in size in a unique and tantalizing way is something I always stress over, and I'm afraid that I never do a good enough job at it considering how important it is to most reader's enjoyment of size smut. 

I'll admit, I didn't realize that was what the elevator metaphor was indicating. I interpreted it as symbolic of how Jen felt shrinking, like her heart rising out of her chest from shock. I understood the pokeball imagery once she was free and the clothes were on the floor, but Kim's actions were lost on me til that point. 

Looking back on it, the word "indistinct " in "Jen had the indistinct feeling of rising and falling" is what tripped me up. I thought the feeling being indistinct meant it wasn't really happening, when really it was and Jen just wasn't fully aware of it, like someone riding in an elevator. Personally, I think a more objective statement that she is in fact being lifted up at the start clears up any confusion (i.e. "Jen felt herself lifted up within the confines of her clothing, giving her the indistinct sensation of rising and falling, like she was riding a high-speed elevator... and continue from there with what you had.) "Show, don't tell" is great and all, but I've found in my own experience there are times where you need to tell or else the reader doesn't get to see what you're trying to show them. 

But I'm as much (or maybe moreso) of an amateur as you are, so take any advice I give with a healthy heaping of salt lol. 

 “Titty looks hornier than I’ve seen her in a while, and both you and your little lover might want to brace for what comes next.”

Now there's a scary thought! Is that even possible?! Pokémon must be an aphrodisiac for her, right up there with breathing, moving, and someone who has a beating heart!

Kim slipping a bit into her streamer persona and simulating a Pokémon battle was a clever way to make sure Jen was comfortable with their newfound size difference. Seeing things from Jen's perspective, we get no hint of fear at all from her, and she seems to jump into competitive mode pretty much right away. Jen doesn't even hesitate to go under Kim's foot as it's descending in the hope of attaining victory. I know she trusts Kim not to squish her, but she was so into the battle that it wasn't even a thought for her.

Also, when Kim said she would make Jen feel helpless, my mind went to a lot of places. I have to admit, though, her wearing Jen's edible underwear on her toes wasn't one of them.  Between that and crushing the figurine, she was pretty creative in taking away any semblance of control Jen may have had before going down, and she even managed to do it without even touching her.  In fact, Jen initiated all contact during the whole battle, yet she felt like she was fighting an uphill, almost futile battle the entire time. That kind of mental, gentle domination fits Kim's character really, really well.

I actually had a bit of a realization (or misread) during their "battle." When we first met Kim, she seemed like she had kind of over her streaming gig for awhile, trying to find a more adult way to make money (investing). In fact, she has kind of had a more "adult" air about her throughout the story (at least to me). But here, she was really into her game with Jen; her enthusiasm felt real, rather than manufactured ala streaming personality. And while reading the scene, I realized (I think) that the reason Kim has stuck with streaming as a profession for as long as she has is at least partially because it allows her a certain level of closeness with Jen. Yeah, I'm sure they'd still be friends and even screw around some even if they didn't work together, but I think the extra time they get to spend streaming together is important to Kim.

I mean, it's already been hinted at that Kim wants a real relationship with Jen. Holding on to excuses to spend more time with her doesn't seem like too much of a stretch.

And Claire on commentary was just adorable! That stick-up-her-ass professor mentality she showed at the start of the story is already paying dividends as she begins to show a softer, more fun side, but gradually and without jumping into anything crazy (it would be weird if she suddenly became Titty, after all). I enjoyed Claire more here because of that harsh exterior we saw in the first few chapters, and I'm interested to see if that effect continues to build as the story continues.

I'm very interested to see what Titty has in mind for our streaming duo next chapter. I could see her getting really creative. I could also see her fingering herself as she attacks Kim's vagina with Jen in her other hand. She's pretty unpredictable!