A great story so far, although it's not quite as charming as Fear and Delight (so far!). However, I still love your descriptive ability and pacing, and the fact that you've built a world with just enough detail to allow for a suspension of disbelief without going overboard, and characters who don't behave like they're in a porn film.

I hope we get to see how it ends some time. For a moment I expected Beck to come back as Simon jumped into Ash's mouth and think he was cheating on her!

Is Sweet Little Temptations on sale anywhere else? It's tempting, but I generally avoid Amazon.