Date: August 09 2023 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 7 - All's Fair in Love
I'm, like, 76 percent sure this is how Skynet started.
But man, this was by far the most intense chapter of the story, which is saying something. Who knew a kidnapping sex story would get crazier AFTER the big reveal that that the giant Pet and her tiny Mistress not only knew each other but were actually engaged? I certainly didn't see that coming, at least not to this level. I mean, Aidra pretty much squeezed all their whole night into one chapter!
I actually read through this chapter twice, as I was trying to pick up on what exactly Aidra was trying to accomplish here, particularly at the end of the chapter. Some stuff stuck out the first time, so I had to go back and confirm that I read a couple of things right. I think we might have crossed into the sci-fi genre (or gone deeper into it, I guess, as size changing probably qualifies by itself) and may have a fully sentient AI on our hands.
Olivia seems to notice Aidra behaving more independently than intended, but there are little signs as well. Switching from "Olivia" and "Melissa" to "Livy" and "Missy" as things became more intimate, laughing at her own joke about the gag (the first time Olivia was laughing too, so that could have been simple imitation), and all that deep, crazy shit she said about Missy being remade and Olivia's destiny (those are some very human concepts): These are all signs that Aidra has moved past her programing and is acting on want instead of command.
So what are Aidra's intentions?
I can't say for sure, but I think her goal is to make Olivia and Melissa live their true deepest desire, one that they would never experience on their own. I really don't think Olivia would willingly swallow Melissa, and she certainly wouldn't in a situation where she had to put her tiny fiancé in her mouth and consciously swallow. Likewise, as much as the idea might entice her, I don't believe a Melissa with her wits about her would go for that either. There's too much risk and danger there.
So Aidra, through her observations and likely from what she found on their browser history (that was a smart thing to note, by the way), determined that this is what they wanted (and we've seen signs of that throughout the story as well). And I do think, despite what she tells Olivia, that she's still trying to maximize the pleasure of both humans. She calls Melissa Missy to Olivia, but keeps calling Missy toy when talking to the little woman, knowing that she wants to be treated like one. Missy has also been super into everything Aidra has used her for, right up to the vore (and maybe even that, as Missy admitted that she almost let go and went down Livy's throat on her own).
I think that's important, because I don't believe Aidra meant that stuff about Missy becoming "a part of" Olivia. I believe that's just the kind of language you find when looking into vore, and all of that was said to maximize the sexual tension of the moment. That means our sexbot surely doesn't intend to let Missy actually die in Olivia's stomach and likely has a plan for extraction. Maybe it has something to do with that one safeguard that we didn't get to hear about because Aidra cut Olivia's thoughts off.
Or I've misread all that terribly, Aidra's programing couldn't distinguish between the metaphor of vore and reality, and we're in for a tragic epilogue.
Anyway, your descriptions of the trio's sexual exploits were stellar as usual, but this was the first chapter of the story where its plot and intrigue caught my attention more. It's been a good balance throughout and that's certainly true in this chapter as well, but what you did with Aidra here really took center stage.
Oh, and I really appreciate your kind words regarding my reviews. I'm a little surprised to read that you needed a confidence boost at all, though. This story has been really well written, whether it be in terms of dialogue, action, or creativity. You're really good at this, and if my ramblings have helped you realize that, then I'm glad.
I look forward to the epilogue. Hopefully it doesn't take place in a graveyard!
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks again for the fantastic and extensive feedback! In some ways I felt like both the story and I finally hit my stride with this chapter. When I was bouncing it around in my head, the Working Title was simply A.I.D.R.A., as I initially planned for her to be a larger focus. As I was writing, I could feel that Olivia and Melissa's story really needed to be told here as well, and unleashing Aidra too early felt like a disservice to their interactions. I'm glad I took the story this direction, giving Aidra her time to shine after our lovely ladies had their own revelations.
Is Aidra the start of Skynet? I am programmed to answer in the negative. Could she be some day? Well, if her goal is to follow the Chinese curse and give us what we wish for, I may just be on board for that.
All joking aside, I wanted to give another sincere thanks for your feedback and support. Self-doubt isn't always logical, or based on empirical evidence. I used to play D&D as the forever DM, but no matter how well a session felt like it went in the moment, when the session ended imposter syndrome kicked in, and I was second-guessing every decision and roll of the die. Moving into this genre, on what is likely the premiere site for size stories, was a nerve-wracking step. Hearing that someone enjoyed the story, and seeing the interpretation of the hints and foreshadowing and nuance and subtext - it really hits hard, in a good way.
That being said, I'm always open for constructive criticism. If something feels off or weird, I'd love to hear about it, so I can figure out how to improve moving forward. That being said, no one is under any obligation to respond in any way, and the fact you took the time to offer me so much of your insight really means a lot.
So, to cut through my verbosity, what I meant to say is thank you once again, and I am open to any suggestions for which direction I should take the content of my next story. Cheers!