[Report This]Date: August 03 2023 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Cherry on Top
Man, I was looking forward to this chapter, but it turned out even better than I expected!
You mentioned being concerned about your descriptions landing. Well, I would think you can put those concerns to bed. That mouth play description was incredible! I kind of thought that Mistress was a bit big for things to get too intense (based on what I've read so far, I'm guessing that she's about 5-6 inches tall?), but you absolutely proved me wrong.
That undressing was intense, and your description of it was as precise as Olivia's tongue. That bit where Olivia sucked Mistress right out of her corset played particularly vivid in my mind as I read it. I'm legitimately impressed with the level of detail and personality you put into this whole scene and without making the paragraphs seem the least bit cumbersome.
And speaking of personality, between the narrative using a lot of food references in a playful way and letting the reader see a lot more of Olivia's direct thoughts really sold this. Not to mention that bit of playfulness on her part just before, with her licking her lips and "mmmmming" at Mistress, as well as the tiny redhead's reaction. All of it was perfect.
Looking at the bigger picture, it was pretty awesome to see Olivia take control of the situation (and with only her tongue). It's interesting how enthusiastically she went along with this, even being willing to be choke a bit in order to take control and give Mistress "the best tongue lashing of her life." She didn't even try to exploit or leverage the situation in the slightest. She went all in on this the moment she decided that Mistress looked good enough to eat.
I also think Mistress's time was about building trust. She assumed some risk, even with the safety precautions, by climbing into Olivia's mouth, and Olivia was well aware of that, as she was worried about having another life in her mouth. I don't want to say that this was a test, necessarily, but I don't think it's a coincidence that only now is Olivia about to get her restraints loosened and have some freedom to handle Mistress. It's almost like Olivia proved that she could be trusted with more freedom.
Oh, and I'm back to thinking that these two know each other and that the drugs Olivia was given/took somehow blurred her memory a bit. She's mentioned her girlfriend a couple of times, and I wouldn't be shocked if Mistress turned out to be her and that this whole thing is just a kinky way to spice things up in the bedroom. I could be wrong, but the more I read, the more confident I get that this is the case.
Anyway, in case you couldn't, I really liked this chapter. I look forward to seeing what happens when Olivia gets her hands on her tiny domme!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your continued feedback and encouragement! I'm glad this chapter landed so well.
I was torn on whether or not to give an exact value for Misstress' height, and decided to picture her as 4 inches when I write, and practice conveying that through contextual clues. I guess I landed somewhere in that ballpark.
I'm really enjoying the process of exploring Olivia's growing awareness of her yet-unrealized tastes in a partner, as explored through the guidance of a tiny sex toy- guide! I meant guide!
I'm glad there's enough intrigue for you to do some speculating on the setting, and thanks for letting me know just how my hints and foreshadowing are landing. I hope you are as satisfied with the answers as our cast when they finally cum!
Thanks again for your support, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter when it's uploaded!