Reviewer: bobowell202 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05 2025 4:26 PM Title: Day 1 - Part 1

I think this is a great story, regardless the mislabeling. Maybe he will temporarily be shrunk to 6 inches? Whos to say but the author. 

Writing in first person is oftentimes ill advised, but I think it is nice if you know the opportunity it can bring to a story. You could describe characters in the light of an unreliable narrator: someone who thinks a certain way about someone, where we the reader know better. 

You can make the reader think they are reading one character's thoughts but you switched who the narrator is.

Take it as a grain of salt, these tropes can be abused/misused. 

Onto the story: I adore the intentional shrinking, even if the dude didn't know the effects, he downed the serum just to make a point. I find that incredibly sexy. Perhaps lean into it? "I drank it because I didn't want to get you caught" or " I'm already a useless, jobless oaf, I might as well take up less space" The dude is clearly depressed and in need of some consoling. 

Those are my stream of thoughts. Thanks for posting. I'm generally happy with the story and the interactions between the couple.

Author's Response:

Hey, thanks for your review and feedback, which is really helpful and interesting.

I've corrected the tags, he goes through all of these heights down to micro/ nano size, and then it leads to him getting taken to a lab and then... No, I can't spoil it, you'll have to find out...

In terms of the perspective and first person, it's my only story I have written so far like this and I thought it was interesting to try and experiment with it. 

I like your ideas of exploring his psyche about why he shrank and I was trying to explore his depression and his lack of job making him feel worthless, thus the shrinking being a bit of a blatant and in your face metaphor (sorry about that). 

In the next parts I was thinking of exploring the dynamic of his wife's sister finding him.... exploring this new power dynamic, perhaps it shifts from a caring and loving wife to a jealous single sister who wants what her sister has and potentially misuses her newfound power. I wonder what people's thoughts about this would be...?

Reviewer: DollSize Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13 2023 12:09 AM Title: Day 2 - Part 2

Like her saying she was gonna miss his cock at adult size….maybe she has a coworker that she can use for his real man size while her hubby is getting small ….great story love love love real slow shrink

Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback, appreciate your thoughts and comments. Check out some more of the story, and yes its a real slow shrinker story :-)