Reviewer: Alpha Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2023 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Jacob's Nightmares: The Sole Problem

I will keep this review vague as possible to obviously not give any spoilers to anyone reading reviews prior to reading the story chapter.

We open with Camilla, our first predator in this story, with a new character Claire. This one was a little harder as feet don’t do much for me, so I was reading through it without much interest. I focused more heavily on the content of the characters rather than the action that was taking place.

I liked the gentleness of Claire as she tried protecting Cate although she was oblivious of what she was a part of. Claire’s sadistic nature was intriguing as well.

WOW!  He just shows up anywhere. We are graced with more knowledge of his abilities, and they are very interesting to say the least. Telepathic powers, being able to control others mind and body, Strength unmatched by anyone obviously he must be able to teleport to different locations (only assuming Camilla doesn’t live near Blaire’s parents house).

There is a feeling of justice as we encounter the judgment performed by Alec. I truly love the details of what happens to Camilla, she deserves every bit of this sentence.

Seeing through portals and able to control others from a distance is amazing reminiscent of God like qualities. Alec showing us another ability causes the plot to just deepen and gets more Interesting as we move through the chapters.

I loved how you tied the plot of the story into the dream sequence moving the chapters along seamlessly. Great ending with what we will hopefully see in the next chapter. I have grown to love these four characters more and more as the chapters progress.

This makes you wonder will Jinshin ever face the judgement from Alec or will he give her a pass due to her helping the victims now. Hopefully he will give her the pass and call her help as penance for her past deeds.

Looking forward to seeing where we go with the next chapter and wondering how Blaire will react when she finds out the true nature of Jacob and how she reacts to the knowledge of who those two tiny victims are in her house.

Author's Response:

Think you accidentally double posted a review! Just in case, pasting my response again to make sure you see it :)

I only have 1 thing to say.

"This makes you wonder will Jinshin ever face the judgement from Alec"

You may or may not have unveiled the plot for Nefarious 2... ;)

Lol, I look forward to continuing Alec's development. Sadly, and admittedly, you may not see him again for a while...

Would love to chat more if you are interested or have time! Reach out to me on Discord sometime if you can :) would love to get more detailed in your thoughts and was curious on ideas on how to improve the story wherever possible!

Thanks for reading <3