[Report This]Date: July 25 2023 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Jacob's Nightmares: A Delicious Delicacy
Okay, I don’t always read through the Authors notes as they will sometimes give spoilers but this one intrigued me, so I decided to go ahead and read it. The buildup to the fate of Liz was just a tad impressive.
The opening of this chapter was not what I was expecting. I was anticipating a finality to the Liz saga but was treated to a whole new story line. I should have expected that you would have thrown a curve ball our way, but I guess you had me so invested in the fate of Liz that I was not prepared for new characters just yet.
Being taken to another location is sort of like a small reset to our story plot while keeping the reader enthralled and anticipating the interaction between the antagonists and protagonists of the story.
Now we can see where some of the first victims of this new shipment have gone and what their fates were. The new antagonist characters introduced Marissa the preppy rich brat, Macy the picky eater but can be peer pressured into anything. Joyce who is an adventurous eater just because hey, why not. And then there’s Jasmine the voluptuous ebony young woman. These characters could easily be brought back into the story at a later date possibly having some backstory with them.
I like how you made the interaction between the four young ladies to be just another fun night among friends trying new experiences together. This is supposed to be an experience they cherish as memories they had in college with friends. Taking the lives of those four victims and dehumanizing them to just food.
Although brutal it is important to have the details of what happened to the victims as it brings closure to those highlighted victims.
Just my opinion but especially with the leading victims we have currently Ben and Liz it is vital that their fate is descriptive if not more so than that of Howard. The reader has invested their energy into them although this may cause an emotion not everyone is prepared for it is important to have a climax fitting for such a buildup.
Great side story as a reset for the overall plot.
Author's Response:
I had this chapter in mind for some time, the pure brutality of it was what I liked so much.
Definitely looking forward to wrapping up the never ending buildup up Liz and Ben. Seems they're both in hot water now, and since Ben failed to find and save her, it appears Deita will be left unchallenged doesn't it?
As for Howard, I kept the details brief, but wanted to showcase just how deadly the female stomach is in my story. Doing some research, being in a stomach is far deadlier than most kink stories lead on. I decided to take a more realistic approach with Howard passing out from the lack of oxygen.
Now we know, if you get ate, you don't live much longer.