What a great chapter, I enjoyed learning about Jinshin’s past.

I was at first thinking Ben, why are you going to try and run? Then it occurred to me that he needed to at least try once. I also got the feeling she was prepared and expecting him to run at least once. This gave her the opportunity to show mercy and earn just a little trust from Ben. She is a smart woman and understands that even though she may not know what she will do with him now, but she knows that there will be a time she can use him to her advantage in the future.  

I got shivers when I was reading the portion of his discovery on the floor and how she circled him with her legs as she sat down enlightening him with a glimpse of her past. I am immensely enjoying the way the chapters in this story are flowing such as harshness coupled with bouts of calming. This seems to not overwhelm the reader with constant harsh behavior.

I am catching myself wanting to know more about each character. This I know is because of how you are interspersing each character’s story into the chapters.

The transition to Deita and Liz was one of those moments where while reading the author changes tone and you are taken to another world altogether. This is a great experience for the reader as you are left with wanting more from Jinshin and Ben I recall many great books and or movies that do that as well, you are like wait a minute I want to know more about their story and then you get wrapped up in Deita and Liz’s story quickly. This, I must say, is a great feature in your story writing as the reader doesn’t get wrapped up in just one aspect of the story and forget or lose interest in the other characters. It keeps you focused on the greater story rather than just the individual characters.

You can see how Liz is blaming herself for the situation she has been thrown into. This is a sad mechanism, a victim trying to understand why they are in the situation they are in. It seems people first blame themselves thinking that it must have been something they did or something they should have done differently that got them here. We all know that there is evil in this world, and it isn’t necessarily the victim the one to blame.  

Although we already knew Deita was perverted and sadistic this chapter shows the reader the stark difference between Deita and Jinshin. How callous and uncaring she is with Liz shows her true feelings toward the victims she is dealing with.

This is a great set up for the next time we read about Deita and Liz as neither knows that they are destined to be together however long Deita determines.

Great chapter to this story, I like the soft then stark difference between characters it keeps the reader wanting more.